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Poetic Inhalation Poetry Contest

Poetic Inhalation

Inhales prosaic air
muse probes breeze 
Filtering depth 
as image melees 
Drum snares the heart 
beating out dull pain 
Osmosing spores 
form finely tuned rain
Patters tap source
concept ignites
Erupts into thought
exhales and writes

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Jin-ju Ye

November 13, 2025 at 1:27 PM

I adore the way this builds to that last line, written in such a way that it's hardly noticeable to the reader that they were holding their breath - such a sensory experience for the "finely tuned rain" - like a poetic microcosm :) (I mean miniature bubble around the poet - might have the wrong word)

David Kavanagh

November 15, 2025 at 4:07 AM

Haha I totally forgot about this one just lying around in my back catalogue, but it is one of my favourites, yes I was in a bubble and holding my breath when writing this one, I was also delighted and proud to have done so well in Di11y Da11y’s contest, this site hasn’t been the same since she left! Thanks so much Jin for stopping by, cheers David

Ann Peck

February 13, 2024 at 11:46 AM

i love your poem, David--every line! Congratulations on your win!

David Kavanagh

November 15, 2025 at 4:08 AM

Thank you so much Ann, I was delighted with the win in Dilly’s contest. Cheers David

Paula Goldsmith

February 12, 2024 at 6:53 AM

Congratulations on your wonderful write. Have a blessed day writing away................

David Kavanagh

February 13, 2024 at 8:47 AM

Thank you Paula, was a great contest, cheers David

Robert Sidwell

February 11, 2024 at 12:47 PM

Well deserved congratulations! Loved the thought, progression and rhythm. Read it multiple times just for fun.

David Kavanagh

February 11, 2024 at 2:47 PM

Thank you so much Robert, glad you enjoyed, I was delighted to place with this one, cheers David

Christuraj Alex

February 9, 2024 at 7:21 PM

"Drum snares the heart beating out dull pain" - Beautiful concept. Congratulations!

David Kavanagh

February 11, 2024 at 3:28 AM

Thank you Chris, one of my better lines perhaps, I’m delighted with the placement, cheers David

I Am Anaya

February 9, 2024 at 12:20 PM

Congratulations on your win!

David Kavanagh

February 9, 2024 at 12:42 PM

Thank you Anaya for returning visit and congrats, cheers David

Tania Kitchin

January 21, 2024 at 4:00 AM

David, a great poem, well penned.

David Kavanagh

January 21, 2024 at 4:06 AM

Thank you Tania, perhaps a little different for me, but I enjoyed writing this one for the contest, cheers David

I Am Anaya

January 20, 2024 at 3:59 PM

Inhale, filter, exhale-- everything comes from the heart & from how deep we breathe it. It's how we express it. Your "Inhalation" is right up Dilly's alley! I too delighted in this contest. Oh btw, give my warmest regards to Jan Allison, hats off to her newly garnered celebrity and superb publication of her book and success! F-yeah!

David Kavanagh

January 21, 2024 at 1:40 AM

Thanks so much Anaya, you’re so right about the heart, it really is a complex organ literarily and physically, I hope Dilly enjoys this one, I will indeed pass on your regards to Jan on her new found success and book, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

January 20, 2024 at 2:42 PM

Could do with a few gulps of that right now. Can you send me the recipe lol. Tom

Tom Cunningham

January 20, 2024 at 3:01 PM

If that dont fire me up nothing will lol

David Kavanagh

January 20, 2024 at 2:51 PM

Double measure of Gunpowder gin, couple slices of lime, ice cubes and tonic, the experience will happen in due course lol! Cheers David

Lin Lane

January 20, 2024 at 1:28 PM

You took it all in (including that G&T) swished it all around and like lava from a volcano... you exhaled and it erupted into a rhyming flow of thoughts!

David Kavanagh

January 20, 2024 at 2:14 PM

You know Lin that’s exactly how it happens, not all the time, but was probably the catalyst on this occasion, thanks so much, cheers David