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example poem inspired by eckho scott's poem in the high critique forum which may be read here: https://www.poetrysoup.com/poetry/forum/topic7487-critique-please.aspx?MessageID=14459#post14459 She leaned into the mirror cleaning her mascara. Thick red lipstick, she painted her lips practicing and repracticing the smile that hid the pain. Careful, she cleaned the red from her teeth, so no one could see her rage. She blotted everything bleeding into the tissue, a stain thrown into the bin with his key.

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Date: 3/22/2019 12:54:00 PM
I interested to know why you chose the words "that hid the pain" instead of "hiding the pain?" I appreciate all you do and what you write. Thanks.
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Jack Webster
Date: 3/22/2019 9:03:00 PM
couldnt fit it all in 1 post. there are 3 parts
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Jack Webster
Date: 3/22/2019 8:55:00 PM
that's a great question. sorry for the long reply. please see here: https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/answer_for_gerald_greene_1126815