Playground Secrets

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Secrets hide in playgrounds
Tall shadows for concealing
Sandboxes glow all around
Gloom feeds off feelings

Bad dreams pose as fakes
Old lies parade and glare
Shame glosses most mistakes
Loneliness mixes with despair

Secrets hide in playgrounds
Empty words drop and roll
Silence screams clear and loud
Sins and gin drink up lost souls

Hearts burn on dirty grills
Hope teeters on edge of display
Promises tunnel into hills
Tomorrow slides in another day

Secrets hide in playgrounds
Waiting patiently to be found

March 13, 2018

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Heidi Sands

Date: 4/2/2018 7:08:00 AM

This is deep and sad, yet written well with a strong message :)

Susan Gentry
Date: 4/2/2018 5:21:00 PM

Thank you Heidi. I appreciate you taking time to read and comment.

Chris Green

Date: 3/22/2018 6:40:00 PM

This poem is dark, a bit lonely and very loud. What waits in the shadows of a place of fun...I really enjoyed this.

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/22/2018 8:24:00 PM

Good to hear. Thx so much for reading and commenting.

John Gondolf

Date: 3/22/2018 4:22:00 PM

By day children laugh and run in the playground and by night the reprehensible people lurk in the shadows. Nicely written, Susan. John

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/22/2018 8:23:00 PM

Thx John. Appreciate your comment.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2018 3:17:00 PM

very interesting images using the playground area as the place for the secrets. For me, it's like painting full circle what happens in the home spills itself out on playgrounds , in how children behave, and also I imagine scenes from movies where some brutal things take place in the darkness of playgrounds at night!

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/21/2018 7:42:00 PM

Thank you. I'm so glad you took time to read and comment. Very much appreciated!

Rhoda Tripp

Date: 3/20/2018 7:01:00 PM

Very intriguing write! I love it! Without coming right out and saying it, you have painted a chilling scenario. Kudos!

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/21/2018 7:41:00 PM

Thank you Rhoda! You are very kind.

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/19/2018 10:19:00 PM

Hope I am not reading to much into this, but what I am getting is secrets of the worse kind? A very subtle way of expressing what could be. Subtle, and powerful, well penned! Mick

Susan Gentry
Date: 3/20/2018 7:26:00 AM

Appreciate you reading and your nice comments about, yes, secrets of the worse kind.