Nette Onclaud Poet Sedoka

Plastic

moon river  thins out
     crawling on muddy waters
         …like black honey thick with phlegm

grandeur of tides breaks
     her frail song choking for breath…
        sea creatures huff for clear wafts


life is shortened now
      bearing trash of man’s neglect…
               to nurture pure ocean beds



crests wither with age
        a garbage of waves fleeting
               … swallowed  by lethal plastic


                     
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                  sedoka---5/7/7/, 5/7/7

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Susan Burch’s Paper or Plastic

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Christopher Bunton March 6, 2012 at 6:44 PM Congratulations!

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl March 3, 2012 at 6:15 AM Congratulations nette a very nice piece makes you think xx

Poet Destroyer A March 2, 2012 at 7:16 PM NETTE... congratulations! WITH YOUR CONTEST WIN!! *Enjoyed stopping by to view may winners tonight!! Have yourself a very nice night ;-)*always..pd

Samual Ronthorpe March 2, 2012 at 5:09 PM Nette, wonderful words, wonderful form. well done. Congrats on making Susan's winners' list.....................S.Ronthorpe

Black Eyed Susan March 2, 2012 at 2:58 PM Congratulations on your win and thanks for supporting my contest! a surprisingly dark poem from you ;) great subject.

Carol Sunshine Brown March 2, 2012 at 11:04 AM Congratulations on your win in Susan's "Paper Or Plastic" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Dinda Minardi March 2, 2012 at 7:59 AM I love how turn this theme into a poetic piece, Nette. Glad I red this :)

Ilene Bauer March 2, 2012 at 7:47 AM beautiful imagery with a sad but very true message. nice one!

Linda-Marie Sweetheart February 18, 2012 at 8:31 AM Nette luv u certainly said ..or wrote.. a mouthful of ,agnificent marvelous phrases .. this form, has bee n lingering for me to do a contest and now contemplating.. thankxxx.. good luck.. a sure shot winning wonder ..sweets..

Jancarl Campi February 18, 2012 at 12:01 AM what a great poem. i hope those who read your work got your message. Time to turn out turn light here and thanks for reading my work, Jancarl

Andrea Dietrich February 17, 2012 at 9:36 PM well, I can sure see what you think of plastic. You took a very inventive approach and came up with a powerful message for the environment as well. I'm just going off for the day. I just can't take it anymore. hahaha. Luv ya, Andrea

Sara Kendrick February 17, 2012 at 5:42 PM The third line is very expressive of what happens to rivers which are being polluted ..Very graffic detail..Good luck in the contest..Reads like a winner to me..This is one of your best..Thanks for the kind review of my work..I appreciate the encouraging review of my Haiku..Sara

Harry Horsman February 17, 2012 at 3:30 PM So true nette, awesome example to humankind, is this wonderful poem. harry

Cindy Lu February 17, 2012 at 12:24 PM paper. you have to ask for paper in the grocery store. very good writing. Thanks so much for commenting on my poetry, it was the light part of my day. Sincerely, Cindy Lu

Russell Sivey February 17, 2012 at 11:52 AM Yes, it is truly awful what we are doing to our environment, especially the water, by using plastic! Plastic is not really bio-degradable and causes a lot of problems in the streams and rivers like you said! I hate to see this happen to our planet! This is a great write my friend! Excellent Work!!

Kash Poet February 17, 2012 at 11:36 AM Very good approach to the contest theme Nette.Best wishes.

Robert Pettit February 17, 2012 at 11:31 AM You have described land and water pollution very well with these sedoka entries. Good write Nette.

Anne-Lise Andresen February 17, 2012 at 10:59 AM Well done, good luck in contest nette! - oxox love Anne-Lise