Pillow Talk

Dreams Waft Downward Billowing As the bed sheets drape. Fold in the sides - tuck the corners For only then will my wrinkled thoughts be neatly made.

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Deborah Burch

Date: 7/10/2012 5:04:00 PM

:) you are a remarkable and talented poet!! I shall be reading more of your work...I see fav's coming...love ya, deb....Big Congrats on your success...I just read your blog...for some reason my responding is intermittantly validated...kinda like life ;)

Elaine George

Date: 8/2/2011 4:00:00 AM

Superb writing as always, dear John. Congratulations on your 3 entries making it through the first round and best wishes on making it to the Finals. Elaine

Nicholas Collard

Date: 2/21/2011 9:19:00 AM

Smashing Imagiste poem,John. Beautifully distilled. Regards Nick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 12/4/2010 2:30:00 PM

This is my favorite yet. Wonderful symbolism!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/24/2010 2:20:00 PM

Beautifully written, John. I'm something of a neat freak, but I don't know how to erase the wrinkles of memory from my brain. (My sister says she'd like to remove her skin and iron it -- LOL) Very nice work! Love, Carolyn

Andrew Crisci

Date: 9/22/2010 7:27:00 AM

Perfection seems to be your goal in this inspiring Fibonacci, John! We all are like you..." folding in the sides -tucking the corners!" Thanks for the Honorable Mention in your contest, " Encore. " It was a great honor to enter your inspiring contest. Have a wonderful day. Love and admiration, Andrew.

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 9/22/2010 5:43:00 AM

I really enjoyed the metaphors and similes you have used in this write, John

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 9/22/2010 2:14:00 AM

John, An amazing write! I have never written one of these. Aloha, Connie

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 9/21/2010 9:56:00 PM

a sweet and lovely write, enjoyed..P.D.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/21/2010 9:14:00 PM

Did u view my wedding photos on my blog yet luv?

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/21/2010 9:13:00 PM

Luv this form John and your words are so special tonight.. always a pleasure to read u and your contest is just wonderful my friend.. good luck.. a special theme indeed..hope u are doing well and are happy....luv..

Deb Wilson

Date: 9/21/2010 7:45:00 PM

This is a good one ..Take care~Deb

Francine Roberts

Date: 9/21/2010 7:41:00 PM

love it

Diane Locksley

Date: 9/21/2010 7:32:00 PM

A tidy home and a tidy mind. Very nicely stated, John. I haven't heard of this form before, but it looks like a great one to try!