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Picturesque- Summer Love

Flying high, touching the hues, of daylight end, heavenly peace, Moving sand, writing with heart, and hang onto, see waves erase, Am I real, imagination, Picture perfect, my dream ? Summer love, a treasure trove, heat rises to, a newer high, Bubbly self, sojourns beside, ever I heave, a deeper sigh, Dream come true, A fascination, an illusion, factual ? Written on 2/6/14 Sijo strings - 15/15/15, 15/15/15 Contest- Sijo strings Sponsor- Debbie Guzzi Awarded 5th place

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Emmanuel Brian Oule

Date: 7/6/2014 10:58:00 AM

My lady congs... keep going Bryan Writes

Elaine George

Date: 7/4/2014 6:30:00 AM

A Sijo, full of action paints such a beautiful picture. Many congrats on your sensational sijo win. bn, Lainie,

Elaine George

Date: 7/4/2014 6:25:00 AM

A Sijo, full of action paints such a beautiful picture. Many congrats on your sensational sijo win. bn, Lainie,

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/3/2014 10:10:00 PM

a big congratulations for your fine win, and I was happy to finally see your entry in the contest.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/3/2014 11:34:00 AM

Dr Upma, lovely win..PD

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 7/3/2014 5:56:00 AM

Very descriptive piece of a poem, Dr Upma, congrats on the win

Casarah Nance

Date: 7/2/2014 5:53:00 PM

I loved the last three lines so very much, well done on your win :) :)

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/2/2014 5:16:00 PM

Your second lines are so amazing..:) great great one dr. Upma kudos!!! :)

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 7/2/2014 3:39:00 PM

Hi Dr. Upma, congratulations on well-deserved high placement in this contest This is such a beautiful descriptive piece! Kindest regards.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 7/2/2014 3:13:00 PM

Work on not forgetting your articles dear, [the,a,an] that with make your verse more fluid, I believe they are not used much in your native language Congrad's on your win. [mail] Light & Love

John Lawless

Date: 7/2/2014 2:44:00 PM

I like it. It captures the hustle and bustle of the summer, its chaos and charm

John Lawless
Date: 7/2/2014 2:45:00 PM

OOPS!!! didn't think the first comment got posted.

John Lawless

Date: 7/2/2014 2:40:00 PM

This Sijo has the feel of summer, the hustle and bustle of recreation and relationships, and beaches, and well ....and. I enjoyed the ride.

Arlene Smith

Date: 7/2/2014 1:39:00 PM

Congrats on a great win, Dr. Sharma my friend. Hugs.. Arlene

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 7/2/2014 2:04:00 PM

Thnx dear Arlene !

Paul Callus

Date: 7/2/2014 1:27:00 PM

This is a treasure trove in itself, Upma. I notice the probing questions that seem to ask for reassurance...also as if asking us readers to participate in your write. Congrats on placing high on the winners' list. // paul

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 7/2/2014 1:34:00 PM

Thanks Paul ! Glad u construed exactly as I wrote, no write is complete without reader's valuable inputs //Upma//

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 6/12/2014 7:47:00 PM

Little help dear new friend [not a rhyming form] each syllabic grouping needs to mean something and all of them together must relate [Flying as]3 - has no meaning [high as touching]4 has no meaning- where are [Flying high]3 has meaning! [touching the hues]4 has meaning [of daylights end] 4 [ heavenly peace] 4 / this has no rhyme [Flying high touching the hues of daylights end heavenly peace] 15 syllables /

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 6/12/2014 10:47:00 PM

Thanks Debbie ! I really didn't know how to go about it,, much appreciate ur efforts !

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/12/2014 7:48:00 PM

I'd like 2 sijo's ... you will rank higher with 2 well done ones

Debbie Guzzi
Date: 6/12/2014 7:47:00 PM

it's OK to do less syllables but each grouping must stand alone & together SHOW don't tell..Light & Love

Sara Kendrick

Date: 6/5/2014 8:17:00 AM

Reads like a winner to me..Way to go for the contest..Very creative work..Thanks for the visit to my page..Sara

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 6/7/2014 3:21:00 AM

Thanks Sara ! Is this one sijo string enough to qualify for the contest ?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/4/2014 3:20:00 PM

I love the summery feeling this gives. I am not 100 percent sure, but maybe sijo string implies more than one!

John Lawless
Date: 7/2/2014 2:39:00 PM

I think the Sijo string is the one you tie on your finger to help remember the syllable count(s).

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 6/7/2014 3:20:00 AM

Thanks Andrea ! if so i will try writing one more string !

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 6/2/2014 6:22:00 AM

Yes, it's picture perfect, Dr Upma

Dr. Upma A. Sharma
Date: 6/2/2014 7:23:00 AM

Thnx Dr Ram !