Phew Nursery Rhyme

There is in the house a hullabaloo
Furore, a fuss, commotion, ado
The in-laws will soon
Return from the moon
Be staying with us, a month, maybe two!

Short notice, their note arrived in the mail
A bolt from the blue, a cause for travail.
Do not get me wrong
We all get along
But we’re in a fix; the house is for sale! 

We’re packing our things and are under stress
And as you can guess the place is a mess.
What can we now do!
We don’t have a clue
This issue we must together assess.

The ruckus abates, in silence we sit
On boxes and chairs, our brows tightly knit
Till Susan (who else!)
“Eureka” she yells
She is the most smart, I have to admit.

“We’ll rent the hotel that is down the street
It’s small but enough (her voice is upbeat)
To hold one and all
Let’s give them a call.”
We quickly agree and jump off our seat.

Off season it is, so luck's on our side
We’re happy to get a place to reside...
This surely will cause
Surprise for in-laws
Initial concern we’re putting aside. 

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Children’s Limericks Contest
Sponsored by Eve Roper
         Placed 2nd
© 1st December, 2022
Copyright © | Year Posted 2022

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Horne Avatar
June 18, 2023 at 4:04 AM
Ha ha, love this fun write, Paul
Callus Avatar
June 19, 2023 at 6:31 AM
Glad you enjoyed, Jack. Best of luck to you, my friend // paul
Meadows Avatar
January 21, 2023 at 12:04 AM
A funny poem. Well written.
Callus Avatar
January 22, 2023 at 1:00 AM
Glad you enjoyed it, Jeanette....thank you. Regards // paul
Messina Avatar
January 18, 2023 at 3:31 AM
LOL- your in-laws were sure in for a surprise, Paul. Great limericks too...Belated Congrats on your 1st place win! Regards // Charlie
Callus Avatar
January 18, 2023 at 2:53 PM
Thank you, Charles. Narrative Limericks kind of write themselves :) ~ Regards // paul
Debole Avatar
January 4, 2023 at 2:26 PM
Congrats on your win! I love the fact that you told your story in a whimsical way using the limerick form. Reminds me of a time when my family and I had just moved into a house with many unpacked boxes and little furniture and...surprise...a couple of relatives just decided to drop in unannounced!!!!
Callus Avatar
January 6, 2023 at 2:32 AM
Thank you on all counts, Gail. It is nice to have relatives dropping by, but not when we're completely unprepared. Your personal experience could lay the foundations for a delightful poem :) ~ Best regards // paul
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December 24, 2022 at 9:36 AM
Congratulations, Paul. This is both witty and full of heart as you are……a most well deserved win, amigo! Pangie xoxo
Callus Avatar
December 24, 2022 at 11:20 AM
Thank you my friend Pangie. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Best wishes for the festive season. Warm regards // paul
Jones Avatar
December 14, 2022 at 2:03 AM
What a fun poem with melodic tones. Belated congrats on your 2nd place win.
Callus Avatar
December 22, 2022 at 12:03 PM
Thank you, Karen; glad you enjoyed it. Best regards // paul
Proxenos Avatar
December 9, 2022 at 7:50 AM
Hi Paul what a witty clever poem you have entered and deservedly won. I love it. Its great you all get along, but i hear a bell going ding dong, they have arrived, hope you survive ! Bravo to Susan what a great gal, I always enjoy your poetry my Pal. A blessed, happy and peaceful Christmas, to you and your wonderful family Paul, may all your collective dreams come to fruition with the New Year. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Callus Avatar
December 23, 2022 at 5:40 AM
I am sure I already replied to your pleasant comments, Jenny. But here goes again, just in case my mind is playing tricks on me :) Thank you for being so loyal and supportive, my friend. ~ I wish you and all your loved ones a Happy & Blessed Christmas and all the best for 2023 ~ Hugs // paul
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December 6, 2022 at 6:44 AM
I love this journey Paul of preparations and stress as the in-laws return from the moon ! Your quick wit and your Susan’s bright idea keep things manageable !! So well described . I love the title as well !!Congratulations on your win . Big hugs and warm wishes for a healthy happy holiday season . Susan :)
Callus Avatar
December 22, 2022 at 11:39 AM
Thank you for your pleasant visit and congrats, Susan. (most Susans I know happen to be bright!) I hope you too enjoy a happy and 'relaxed' Christmas. ~ Warm regards & hugs, my friend. // paul
Ika Avatar
December 5, 2022 at 1:35 PM
Dear Mr Paul, this is as very well of first place calibre, honestly.Competition must have been tight.I appreciate the rhythm structure:just the right ring to it.Couldn't help but make sure to read audibly(for the full experience), sounding a little frantic at some points; since "We’re packing our things and are under stress".
Ika Avatar
December 5, 2022 at 1:37 PM
I'm tempted to add that emoji, where the guy is holding his head with both hands.Haha.I love how "Susan" presents her idea with such great enthusiasm. And most of all,what we all hope for, every single one of us, a happy ending to this great big drama of life.And Congrats. I'm proud of you. Thank you for making my night.Blessings
Dietrich Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 2:54 PM
PHew is a GREAT title on this one. wonderful writing, Paul. Congrats for your win.
One Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 10:57 AM
This is so well done..it flows so well..Great limericks
Roper Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 9:50 AM
Great story, Paul, congratulations on your win . Many Blessings my friend
Callus Avatar
December 18, 2022 at 2:00 AM
Please forgive my late reply, dear Eve. Thank you for my high placement, but most of all for the inspiration which your contest offered me. ~ Regards & Blessings, my friend // paul
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December 4, 2022 at 7:58 AM
Dear Paul, a fun story - and so well-written! I particularly love these lines -" The in-laws will soon Return from the moon", "Till Susan (who else!) “Eureka” she yells" - you are a master of limericks as well - the poem is super witty, and enjoyable, even by adults. Congratulations on your win, Dear Poet. To my faves. I will share with my family. Best wishes ~ Mala
Callus Avatar
December 18, 2022 at 3:20 AM
Thank you for the lovely complimentary comments, dear Mala...and for the fav...all very much appreciated, my friend. ~ Regards & blessings // paul
Kendrick Avatar
December 4, 2022 at 3:07 AM
Congratulations on your winner in Eve's contest. Way to go. Sara..Reads like a real life happening that worked out just fine except for the trip to the moon. I wonder if they are thinking about relocating to the moon.
Callus Avatar
December 18, 2022 at 1:56 AM
Thank you for a most pleasant visit, Sara. Probably in a few years time most people will be relocating to the moon, though I might give it a miss :) Best regards // paul
Ashley Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 8:55 AM
Dear Paul, your creative pen inspired such a delightful and witty string of limericks. I especially loved "The in-laws will soon / Return from the moon" haha! And I have to admit a special fondness for this line too.. "Till Susan (who else!) / “Eureka” she yells / She is the most smart, I have to admit".. hehe! :)) A fun and fabulous poem, my wonderful friend! Best wishes for a win and warmest wishes and hugs for you.. ~Susan
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 2:25 PM
Thank you, Susan. I'm glad that this light, fun poem achieved the aim it was written for. And, yes....you did catch on to the Susan (who else!)...( she is smart :) ~ Warm regards & Hugs, my friend // paul
Volumes Avatar
December 2, 2022 at 1:03 AM
Well done Paul. An interesting story running through a collection of Limericks, made it exceedingly readable. Enjoyed it very much.
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 12:24 PM
Thank you, Wendy. It is not always easy to go down to a child's level while keeping in mind that this has to appeal to grownups as well. ~ Regards // paul
Rodrigues Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 5:44 PM
Seems best sometimes, especially when loved ones are from outer space! ;)
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 12:16 PM
At this time of year everyone is most welcome in our house, Kim :) but I would not want to be caught on the wrong foot! // paul
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December 1, 2022 at 1:53 PM
It's amazing how a disaster can generate so much out of the box thinking Paul. I just love this especially the way the lines flow so easily just like inspired creativity! Best wishes for the contest. Blessings of the season to you!
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 11:57 AM
Thank you for your lovely insightful comments, Sam; very much appreciated. Sending you season's greetings & blessings // paul
Bauer Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 9:20 AM
well done, paul! best of luck in the contest...
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 11:49 AM
Thank you so much, Ilene. Your visit and continued support is appreciated. Regards // paul
Hankins Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 9:00 AM
Delightful, Paul. A complete story in marvelous, well-written limericks!
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 11:40 AM
Pleased that you enjoyed my Limerick narrative, Milton...thank you. Regards // paul
Buhagiar Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 8:39 AM
Great limericks. And a happy ending.
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 11:21 AM
Thank you, Victor. Being a contest aimed at children a happy ending seemed quite appropriate. Regards // paul
Cunningham Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 8:16 AM
Lovely string of limericks Paul, thankfully a happy ending for all. Hope you're keeping well. Tom
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 12:09 PM
Thank you, Tom. Pleased to see you again after your vacation. Regards // paul
Callus Avatar
December 3, 2022 at 10:54 AM
Thank you, Tom. Pleased to see you again after your vacation. Regards // paul
Andresen Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 6:24 AM
- A lovely piece of writing for children, Paul ... I love it, and I'm sure Eve does too :) - hugs
Callus Avatar
December 1, 2022 at 6:37 AM
Thank you for being my first commenting visitor, dear Anne-Lise. Glad that you found it to your liking :) Regards & Hugs // paul
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