Andrea Dietrich Poet Pantoum

Petal Plucker

She whispers, “He loves me; he loves me not,”
as she plucks the dewy petals off a daisy.
She thinks of the misery that loving him has brought.
Oh, but his sweet kisses. They melt her and make her crazy!

As she plucks the dewy petals off a daisy,
she thinks of a few bad times; he gave her bruises then.
Oh, but his sweet kisses. They melt her and drive her crazy!
He always brings her flowers, vowing not to sadden her again.

She thinks of a few bad times; he gave her bruises then
although there have been such good times she also can recall!
He always brings her flowers, vowing not to sadden her again.
Two petals remain; one by one each dewy petal shall fall.

Although there have been such good times she also can recall,
she thinks of the misery that loving him has brought.
Two petals remain; one by one each dewy petal shall fall.
She whispers, “He loves me . . . he loves me NOT.”

Nov. 2020
For Brian Strand's 'COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE(46) any theme any form' Poetry Contest

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P.S. Awtry March 6, 2021 at 11:16 AM So this is what pantoums were made for! Wow! Just Wow! Im faving this one.

Sara Kendrick January 20, 2021 at 3:51 PM Back with congrats. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Anne-Lise Andresen November 29, 2020 at 11:01 AM - Congratulations on your win in the Juxtaposition contest, Andrea :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

John Watt November 27, 2020 at 11:04 PM Congrats on your win, Andrea. I really enjoyed this one ~ John

Alexis Y. November 25, 2020 at 10:17 AM Hi Andrea, Good take on the contest theme. Congratulations on your win. Have a Happy Thanksgiving my friend:-) Alexis

Silent One November 25, 2020 at 7:11 AM I think so many will relate with your poem as many have been in such situations.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..

Sara Kendrick November 23, 2020 at 6:17 AM You got that last line correct with the perfect ending. He doesn't even love himself. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara

Sandra Adams November 23, 2020 at 6:01 AM this took me back to my younger days, oh the vase collection i had from all the promises spoken yet broken, perhaps that's why i don't like red roses like most...you captured it well, and in a pantoum form, bravo... best wishes in the contest! my muse is still waking up, thanks for the visit to my poem :) hugs

Victor Buhagiar November 22, 2020 at 11:04 PM I don't think he loves you, if is such a brute. ~~ Andrea Dietrich November 23, 2020 at 9:54 AM it's not me. Could bee many an abused "she"

John Watt November 22, 2020 at 8:47 PM This is a great example (in my mind anyway) of juxtaposition, using a well-known petal picking game, only with the ominous shadows of abuse darkening the scene. That daisy knows what it's talking about! Very creative and imaginative writing. ~ John

Newton Ranaweera November 22, 2020 at 8:42 PM An excellent play with opposites, Andrea!! This piece smoothly flows while evoking humuor and pathos.

Vijay Pandit November 22, 2020 at 8:33 PM I hear the dialogue of two competing emotions she feels, Andrea--apt for the contest theme.

Mike Bayles November 22, 2020 at 7:18 PM Congratulations, Andrea. You did this pantoum well. I especially like what you do with the petals in this poem.

Kim Rodrigues November 22, 2020 at 6:34 PM Petal plucker...love the title. Not every flower is one we should love.