Petal Plucker

She whispers, “He loves me; he loves me not,”
as she plucks the dewy petals off a daisy.
She thinks of the misery that loving him has brought.
Oh, but his sweet kisses. They melt her and make her crazy!

As she plucks the dewy petals off a daisy,
she thinks of a few bad times; he gave her bruises then.
Oh, but his sweet kisses. They melt her and drive her crazy!
He always brings her flowers, vowing not to sadden her again.

She thinks of a few bad times; he gave her bruises then
although there have been such good times she also can recall!
He always brings her flowers, vowing not to sadden her again.
Two petals remain; one by one each dewy petal shall fall.

Although there have been such good times she also can recall,
she thinks of the misery that loving him has brought.
Two petals remain; one by one each dewy petal shall fall.
She whispers, “He loves me . . . he loves me NOT.”

Nov. 2020
For Brian Strand's 'COMPLETELY YOUR CHOICE(46) any theme any form' Poetry Contest

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Date: 3/6/2021 11:16:00 AM
So this is what pantoums were made for! Wow! Just Wow! Im faving this one.
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Date: 1/20/2021 3:51:00 PM
Back with congrats. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 11/29/2020 11:01:00 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the Juxtaposition contest, Andrea :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 11/27/2020 11:04:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea. I really enjoyed this one ~ John
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Date: 11/25/2020 10:17:00 AM
Hi Andrea, Good take on the contest theme. Congratulations on your win. Have a Happy Thanksgiving my friend:-) Alexis
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Date: 11/25/2020 7:11:00 AM
I think so many will relate with your poem as many have been in such situations.. Congratulations on your placement in the contest..
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Date: 11/23/2020 6:17:00 AM
You got that last line correct with the perfect ending. He doesn't even love himself. Reads like a good contender for the contest. Way to go. Thanks for the visit to my page. Sara
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Date: 11/23/2020 6:01:00 AM
this took me back to my younger days, oh the vase collection i had from all the promises spoken yet broken, perhaps that's why i don't like red roses like most...you captured it well, and in a pantoum form, bravo... best wishes in the contest! my muse is still waking up, thanks for the visit to my poem :) hugs
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Date: 11/22/2020 11:04:00 PM
I don't think he loves you, if is such a brute. ~~
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 11/23/2020 9:54:00 AM
it's not me. Could bee many an abused "she"
Date: 11/22/2020 8:47:00 PM
This is a great example (in my mind anyway) of juxtaposition, using a well-known petal picking game, only with the ominous shadows of abuse darkening the scene. That daisy knows what it's talking about! Very creative and imaginative writing. ~ John
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Date: 11/22/2020 8:42:00 PM
An excellent play with opposites, Andrea!! This piece smoothly flows while evoking humuor and pathos.
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Date: 11/22/2020 8:33:00 PM
I hear the dialogue of two competing emotions she feels, Andrea--apt for the contest theme.
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Date: 11/22/2020 7:18:00 PM
Congratulations, Andrea. You did this pantoum well. I especially like what you do with the petals in this poem.
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Date: 11/22/2020 6:34:00 PM
Petal plucker...love the title. Not every flower is one we should love.
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