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Persian Haiku 4

Persian Haiku 4. Persian Haiku 4. I cried with the night. When the nightingale stopped singing, My poor umbrella! The moon's reflection, Loneliness is elegant. On a lonesome pond. Life makes me too old. Death humiliates my life. I'm glad there is love. When I come, you'll leave. Moonlight dims, and autumn grieves. I'm so so naive. Iron turns to rust, My body will burst into dust, Trust the dust, I must. Who spilled my bottle? The Inebriated ground! Who is the drunken? What is half of us? Nowhere to be found in this; It's not me or you. Like the sun, I shine, Like the moonlight, I promise. To create more love. 12/11/18 Haloo Note: The form I called Persian Haiku is a form of poetry in Persian literature called “Segani” or “triangular.” They must be in three lines, but not necessarily 5-7-5 syllables, but unlike Haiku, the last line of Segani must have a “Mental Punctuation or mental blowout.” Segani has three major branches: Classic, Nimaa’i (related to the poet Nima Yooshij), and Sepeed (means white). Each has many different forms with and without Rhyme. I combined the rules of Japanese Haiku with 5-7-5 Syllables plus the” Segani” and” Sepeed” with no rhyme.

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Date: 1/30/2020 10:21:00 AM
Deep thoughts for pondering. Enjoyed.
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Date: 12/31/2019 4:41:00 AM
Love it. The inebriated ground, what a projection ...
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Date: 12/4/2019 3:42:00 AM
Like the sun I shine,/ Like the moonlight, I promise./ To create more love.// excellent haiku series
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Date: 9/7/2019 5:15:00 PM
Very creative lines. Enjoyed reading the new and fresh. Thanks for dropping by. Sara
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Date: 8/2/2019 6:09:00 AM
Amazing haikus...loved each line. Very good poem. -JWE
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/3/2019 5:14:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 4/11/2019 2:59:00 PM
Very enjoyable.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/3/2019 5:13:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 4/1/2019 1:57:00 PM
I enjoyed this. Thank you for sharing ! Well done :)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 8/3/2019 5:13:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 1/29/2019 2:50:00 PM
so interesting. I enjoy seeing new things like this and the employment of rhyme that you used inside the series!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 1/29/2019 6:03:00 PM
Thanks Andrea...
Date: 1/22/2019 3:51:00 PM
lovely
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 1/29/2019 6:01:00 PM
Thank you Sir.
Date: 1/16/2019 9:01:00 PM
Hi salehi It is a beautiful poem, with a music in it. I enjoyed reading the full poem. Thanks.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 1/29/2019 6:01:00 PM
Thank you Muhammad...
Date: 1/8/2019 12:36:00 PM
These are just stunning Pashang. Beautiful haiku! Blessings for a wonderful new year! : ) xxoo
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 1/16/2019 6:57:00 PM
Thanks, dear Connie... Happy new year to you as well.
Date: 1/2/2019 4:13:00 PM
I like the drunken earth. I hope you had some too over the festive season Pashang. Happy New Year.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 1/2/2019 7:39:00 PM
Always my dear Jean... Happy new year...
Date: 12/30/2018 10:31:00 AM
The Persian Haiku form beautifully frames your exquisite poetry, Pashang. Your vivid imagery brings your Haiku to vibrant life in my mind as I read your lustrous strand of pearls. I relish your poet’s note as well. Warmest wishes for a happy new year.. ~Susan
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/30/2018 12:36:00 PM
I am glad Susan, Thanks for kind words, happy new year to you as well.
Date: 12/29/2018 12:02:00 PM
Nicely done,Pashang, enjoyed this deep emotional verse . May your new year be very blessed. Hugs Eve~`*
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/30/2018 12:35:00 PM
Thanks Eve... Happy new year...
Date: 12/27/2018 9:20:00 PM
Thanks for the introduction to this special form, Pashang. I enjoyed reading the different themed persian haiku in the series.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/28/2018 9:03:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea... Happy new year.
Date: 12/27/2018 4:59:00 PM
Pashang, thanks for introducing me to this form, I must try it. I like your series very much ~
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/28/2018 9:02:00 PM
Thank you dear heart...
Date: 12/26/2018 10:35:00 PM
Sorry it took me so long to enjoy such a wonderful gift you graced us with, Pashang, lovely...
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/27/2018 2:30:00 AM
Thank you, Charlie... Have a wonderful holiday...
Date: 12/25/2018 6:48:00 AM
Lovely rendition my friend...greatly tied together Pashang...have a wonderful holiday season and a merry Christmas if you celebrate...love & light...^WW^
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/26/2018 11:19:00 AM
Thank you, my dear friend ... Merry Christmas to you as well...
Date: 12/23/2018 2:52:00 AM
pashang, a delight to read your unique haiku, persian style!...enjoy a blessed christmas!....huggs
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/24/2018 11:25:00 AM
Thank you Nette, Merry Christmas to you ...
Date: 12/22/2018 3:48:00 PM
Thanks for your wonderful poetry, and in the particular, the history of the form, love what you write, have a wonderful holiday and all the best for 2019...Harry
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/24/2018 11:24:00 AM
Thank you Harry, Merry Christmas to you as well...
Date: 12/22/2018 6:40:00 AM
I love your string of luminous haiku dear Pashang, Love for the season xo
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/24/2018 11:23:00 AM
Thank you Pixie.
Date: 12/19/2018 10:00:00 PM
What a beautiful poem, I was not aware and so pleased to learn, I am currently reading up on Persian poetry!!!
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/20/2018 1:30:00 PM
That's great... let me know if I can help you...
Date: 12/18/2018 5:44:00 PM
what a lovely string of poems I especially liked the first and last ones:-) Seasons greetings my lovely butterfly friend fly high and enjoy yourself over the festive period:-) I have the one gift I want - my son arrives home on Thursday for Christmas i want for nothing more:-) hugs Jan xx
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/18/2018 11:52:00 PM
I hope you get your gift... Merry Christmas my dear Jan...
Date: 12/16/2018 12:44:00 PM
- They are beautiful all together, Pashang ... number two and three are my favorites :) - I wish you and your loved ones a peaceful and beautiful Christmas :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/18/2018 11:50:00 PM
I am glad you liked them... Merry Christmas...
Date: 12/15/2018 2:26:00 PM
Hi Pashang, I enjoyed reading each of your Persian Haiku. Each one sings in its own right. Excellent work my friend. Have a wonderful weekend. Your friend always....Mike.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 12/15/2018 4:10:00 PM
Thank you Mike... The Raven fed me today.
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