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Perpetual Swirl

perpetual swirl

   portal through pink nebula --

      pathway to the light



*For Rick's "Haiku Beyond" contest

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Robert Ball

Date: 4/26/2011 8:22:00 PM

as usual you are good at what you do, and thank you for your kind comment again as usual, Yes, it's a true story, most of the poems in my collection are true, You see I lived on the street off and on since I was l6 and I am a Vietnam Vet, I have seen it all and when I had a life changing thing happen in 2003, I turned to God and that is that, never been happier in my life, so try my poem Unknown man in a lonely grave, My family still tends the grave in Vermont, someone from the family goes.

Jslambert Mister Roboto

Date: 4/17/2011 9:24:00 PM

This is real cool! I diGG chillin' with the HiGhCooZ! I posted a pretty different style poem. I don't really know if it is a "form"...but it's a form to me. Check it out. On a "writing break",and after a mean 3 hour Hank Bukowski sitting, I wrote 30 or so new poems. Some break huh?

James Fraser

Date: 4/4/2011 1:13:00 PM

Just maybe, one day man will see such a delight. Terrific Haiku Carolyn. Good luck in Rick's contest....:)

James Foulk

Date: 3/31/2011 9:46:00 AM

a great Haiku, enjoyed reading it

Joe Maverick

Date: 3/29/2011 11:46:00 PM

I hope your poem (goes way through) Carolyn, i have just enjoyed the read, i especially like the pathway to the light part it looks winning material to me!

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/29/2011 12:18:00 PM

I am just stopping by to thank you for all your kind comments Carolyn. It is always a pleasure to read your poetry my friend. Love, Carol

Eiken Laan

Date: 3/29/2011 10:41:00 AM

Beautiful Carolyn, love the alliteration. Congrats on your win:))

Kash Poet

Date: 3/29/2011 9:10:00 AM

This is a wonderful Haiku!Congrats Carolyn on your big win---kashinath

Dane Ann Smith-Johnsen

Date: 3/29/2011 12:58:00 AM

Great imagery...I love every line! Take care, my friend. Love, Dane

Audrey Haick

Date: 3/28/2011 6:05:00 PM

!!"I love the view you captured, Seafaress! A deserving 4th Place win it is, Congratulations! Love, Annalise

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 3/28/2011 2:34:00 PM

Congrad's on your win!

Carrie Richards

Date: 3/28/2011 12:51:00 PM

I'm so glad to see this one high on the winner's list!! I thought it was wonderful, Carolyn!! Congratulations!! (Love the portal through pink nebula!!)

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/28/2011 12:41:00 PM

Congratulations on the fourth place win in the contest of Rick, Carolyn

John Freeman

Date: 3/28/2011 12:11:00 PM

Congratulations Carolyn on your fourth place win...excellent haiku!! Great to see you near the top. Agape, Moses

Ray Dillard

Date: 3/28/2011 10:04:00 AM

Congratulations Carol, on your win this this far-reaching haiku. RAY

Sidney Beck

Date: 3/28/2011 9:03:00 AM

very well done Carolyn...I particularly like the subtle sound-echo in (perpe) TUAL SWIRL...very poetic touch.....my best wishes on your success

Tahera Mannan

Date: 3/28/2011 7:50:00 AM

Love this Carolyn. many congrats dear friend.

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/28/2011 7:37:00 AM

ohh carols, i knew this would be a highly-rated piece.. THUMBS UP for the tremendous win! :) huggs

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 3/28/2011 7:19:00 AM

Congratulations Carolyn on your win in ^Rick Parise's contest "Haiku Beyond". Love, Carol

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/27/2011 9:45:00 AM

Love it LNC...having computer troubles..borrowing one now and then. We had a power outage that messed it up, even though I had a power surge strip..love you...BG

Carol Fillmore

Date: 3/25/2011 10:47:00 AM

This is a lovely one Carolyn...really like the portal through pink nebula! that is what that pic looked like. Best of luck in the contest:) invitations to rascal raccoon and cat wedding in the mail this morning:)) all soupers welcome to attend LOL heaven knows what the reception meal will be;)) Thanks so much for your comments on Raccoon wooing one...had a blast writing that! First acrostic, too:) thought they were difficult! LOL

Gwendolen Song

Date: 3/24/2011 11:53:00 PM

Nice nonstop alliteration! This is gonna be at the top of the heap!! Fan-tab-ulous!! Gwendolen

Diane Locksley

Date: 3/24/2011 2:40:00 PM

Very good! I saw the Horsehead Nebula through a telescope and the swirling gases were green with a little blue and yellow. The nebula in the contest picture is one I haven't seen, but I enjoyed your description of its perpetual swirl. Thats what space is like. Everything in motion. Good luck in the contest. Best to you, Diane

Nette Onclaud

Date: 3/24/2011 1:19:00 PM

enlightenment of the spirit is our birning wih, carols.. beautifully portayed in this 'ku with lyrical lines... winning's best to you! :) hugggs, nette

Daver Austin

Date: 3/24/2011 8:20:00 AM

Jesus said, "Go into your closet." I wonder if the closet is full of stars. Love, Dave

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