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I want to touch her ebony skin To luxuriate in the depth of her storm Those dark brown eyes hypnotize me granting me the courage to approach Now I can participate in her masquerade For she binds my hands with golden suture I have no fear of death or her instruments of pain I long to feel her slice deep into my flesh The sting of her whip peels back my opaque veneer Beneath my skin a crimson passion flows She drinks until I become intoxicated I watch as she swallows my darkness Only then does she grant me permission to touch her! For Laura Loo's "Write me something deep and dark" Poetry Contest. Written May 30th, 2017

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Vladislav Raven

Date: 12/15/2018 11:44:00 AM

Hi Richard, another wonderful write from your pen. This is indeed deep and dark. This is so well written my friend. A few meanings can be taken from this write but whatever meaning taken, this piece has been written with such skill. Their is a dignity and grace within the write. You show such creativity in your writes. An excellent piece. Have a wonderful weekend. your friend always....Mike.

Paul Callus

Date: 6/23/2018 3:29:00 PM

Bondage, sexuality and erotica presented in a dignified poetic delivery. You might be interested in checking out my poem "Grovelling" written ca 3 years ago. Regards // paul

Funom Makama

Date: 7/12/2017 10:24:00 AM

Excellent and profound. You have that unique skill of beating the peak. This is a wonderful stuff, always beating our expectation. Can wait to jump to your next page.

Lisa Ricci

Date: 6/6/2017 12:13:00 PM

Hello Richard. You have quite the expression here. I very much enjoyed your title and how it fitted in with the last line. I consider that a nice poetic touch. This entry has strength and was well executed in its entirety. Good luck with the contest.

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 6/6/2017 12:08:00 PM

Whew! You went Skywalker dark on us w/this one, Richard. But I know the poetic force is w/you still. Lol! Very kinky undertones, but the dark love was felt in every line. Great write, raw and gritty. Keep shaking us up w/your pursuit of truth. Love always, bro.

Becca Teagan

Date: 6/5/2017 9:50:00 AM

Wow, Rick, I love the way you did this, it's very good. I read your comments below, and first of all, I don't think you pushed the bounds of good taste at all, this is written in good taste! It pushes the bounds of deep dark feelings, which is awesome. Especially after reading your comment to Akkina, I see the deeper meaning within this. "I long to feel her slice deep into my flesh" - that is a great line, among many. Well done. Gosh I've missed reading your poems.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/7/2017 1:53:00 AM

Thanks Becca, coming from you this means a lot. I'm glad you are reading my poems again. Hugs Rick.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/3/2017 7:46:00 PM

wow, this is such an amazing entry, Richard. I wish I could have redone my original poem to make it this tight. Once I realized I rhymed instead of used free verse, I had to do it all over again and could not recapture the same quality. This one HAS a great mood!!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/4/2017 7:19:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, I'm pleased you like it.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/2/2017 10:40:00 AM

Oh...my my my! LOVED this piece. :) Glad to have some time to read and write, dear. This is intoxicating.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2017 7:39:00 AM

Thanks.;0)

Scott Thirtyseven

Date: 6/2/2017 8:33:00 AM

Ooh that really tantalises the senses. Best of luck in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2017 7:39:00 AM

A little luck couldn't hurt, thanks Scott.

Tim Smith

Date: 5/31/2017 11:42:00 AM

Not your usual style but it oozes a dark seduction...best of luck

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 6/3/2017 7:36:00 AM

Thanks Tim. I'm not sure I have a usual style.

Darren White

Date: 5/31/2017 10:33:00 AM

OOoooohhh, I love this! Dark and lovely and very suggestive :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2017 10:34:00 AM

Thanks Darren.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/31/2017 9:47:00 AM

Very deep, but written with good intentions, I see:) great work, Richard:)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2017 10:34:00 AM

Thanks Jo.

Akkina Downing

Date: 5/31/2017 8:56:00 AM

Oh very deep and dark alright. And a little bit of naughtiness. ;) I enjoyed this very much, it left a mind thinking and smiling. Lol! Awesome piece, Rick :)

Akkina Downing
Date: 5/31/2017 9:44:00 AM

Oh wow! Ok, my respect. And I bid you good luck in the contest :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2017 9:21:00 AM

Thanks Akkina, part of the message is an atonement for the slavery of African people. Until we know their pain and suffering we will not be granted the figurative right and permission to touch them in a meaningful way.

White Wolf

Date: 5/31/2017 7:51:00 AM

Oh, I like this, Richard! Hurts so good! I'm sure this will do well in the contest! Best of luck to you mate

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2017 8:10:00 AM

Thanks White Wolf. I think I might have pushed the bounds of good taste based on lack of response. Thanks for being one of the brave ones to comment.;0)

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/30/2017 9:52:00 AM

I do believe, deep and dark and naughty!! An intoxicating write!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 5/31/2017 8:11:00 AM

Thanks Arthur, imagination can take us to som unusual places.