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Brain spatter smacked me in the face
Blood was everywhere, so thick I could taste it
I rolled to the left and with blurry eyes aimed 
Eliminating the sniper five seconds too late

I wiped off my face with the sleeve of my shirt
And looked at my friend that lay in the dirt  
Headless now, only his tags to ID him -
An image my mind refused to believe in

This jungle would be his makeshift grave 
No cherubbed headstone for Henry Mave
Nothing to tell of the soldier he was
The best friend I had, or the son who was loved

I buried his body beneath leaves and vines
Then I went hunting for Viet Cong lines 
I killed as many enemies as I possibly could  
Like a kamikaze, death was understood

Somehow I survived and went back to New York
Where the horror of war bled into my work
Lost my job, my house, friends, and family 
Trying to forget the engraved memory -

I always knew I’d be a permanent guest
Because the instant he died, I became homeless



**Susan Burch**
*Won 8th place in "World of War: Vietnam" contest

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 4/30/2011 6:58:00 PM
"Hello, Susan.. very striking thoughts to care about and very interesting..sad things to always think of .. and congratulations in the contest,..p.d."
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Date: 4/24/2011 5:23:00 AM
Many congratulations Susan on your win in Miranda's fine contest, Happy Easter....:)
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Date: 4/22/2011 11:26:00 AM
Great to see you in the winner's circle Susan. Congratulations on your worthy poem's place. Agape, Moses
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Date: 4/21/2011 3:46:00 PM
Congratulations on your deserving win in the contest, Susan. Happy Easter. Love, Annalise
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Date: 4/21/2011 1:57:00 PM
Congratulations on the eighth place win in the contest, Susan
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Date: 4/21/2011 12:01:00 PM
Congratulations on your win in the contest Susan. Love, Carol
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Date: 4/21/2011 8:17:00 AM
Congrats Susan on your spectacular win in Miranda's contest with this stirring and illustrious account of the Vietnam War .. enjoy your sweet win with luv..
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Date: 4/21/2011 6:24:00 AM
Wow, this is seriously powerful, Susan. Excellent job
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Date: 4/21/2011 3:49:00 AM
U & your words R SUPER !!!!! ~free cee!~
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Date: 4/20/2011 6:05:00 PM
Sensitive and very touching Susan.. the emotion exudes in every line fromt his soldier who buried his friend.. am sure this was repeated many times in the years the WAR existed.. good luck in the contest... am sure Miranda will be deeply touched luv..
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Date: 4/20/2011 3:50:00 PM
You resurrect not only the horrors of war, but the deep sense of loss a comrad in arms feels when his best friend has been killed. That last line -- I understand it so well. Losing someone dear to you makes you feel displaced -- no other place will feel like home again. Excellent entry for the contest, Susan, and surely a winner in my book. It goes to my faves. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 4/20/2011 9:02:00 AM
eeuuuh gory lol great imagery!
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Date: 4/18/2011 11:39:00 PM
wow, susan, I sure hope that you win the contest so that this will get read by more people. It is really a good one. I enjoyed finding it here tonight. LUv, Andrea
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