Perhaps

I saw....
Two black crystal balls
Rimmed with white
Reflecting an indefinable emotion
Glowing with some intense passion

Riveting,
Entrancing!

Two eyes of oceanic depths
Relaying the most intimate message
What did they commune?
PERHAPS- they said silently- "I love you" (?)

So piercing were those eyes
That I couldn't stand their electric glare
From those eyes, rose the Promethean fire
Glistening like molten gold,
At once sending out,
The light of a hundred galaxies.

In the fire bursting through those eyes,
My body was turned into a conflagration
And my soul rippled like fermented wine.

Why didn’t I respond instantly
PERHAPS, I was so stunned,
That my body couldn’t follow the sense’s urging

An ocean was stirring within
Whose whirls could never again be tamed
In those flooding pools,
Let me cast my fishing net.

What catch, can I expect?
PERHAPS, the boon and bliss of a lifetime!

devotionlovesensualfree verse

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Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/18/2025 12:52:00 PM

Creative work for sure. Way to go. It reads like a good contender to me for the contest. Sara K

Jay Narain

Date: 9/18/2025 9:43:00 AM

Your poem captures the way love—or even a single glance—can overwhelm the senses and erupt into myth and metaphor. It feels passionate, raw, and unrestrained, much like the gaze it describes.

CayCay Jennings

Date: 9/18/2025 9:15:00 AM

Such an expressive, emotive ride I just took through your inspired imagery that I now feel compelled to rest my brain as it continues to soak in content. Yes, I'm still marinating pieces of this and will reread to garner more. Poetry hugs ... CayCay

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/18/2025 7:14:00 AM

What an emotionally charged and moving composition, Valsa! I am captivated by the way you portray the eyes as fiery galaxies that ignite both the spirit and the physical being. The powerful and evocative quality of the poem lies in the way the repeated "PERHAPS" expresses the tension between wonder and doubt.

Rowena Velasco

Date: 9/18/2025 7:10:00 AM

Such a powerful and passionate piece, Valsa! Your imagery is mesmerizing, the eyes as galaxies and fire ignite both soul and body. The repeated “PERHAPS” captures the tension between wonder and hesitation, making the poem deeply moving and unforgettable.