Peek In

Sailboats fill the blue as the sun dips into a chartreuse night I watch the seabirds guide them home On the grass strewn with yesterdays news I carry my weight along with the pain disrupting lucid thoughts of me will this ever be through Peek in from under your parasail of perfection claiming the pains only in my head as I'm shivering on this concrete bed Find me again where broken homes and dreams stuff a cardboard box former friends scatter But it doesn't matter now like it mattered then soft eyes greeting sunrise wishes on first rays Oh peek back in a place you still belong seabirds with floating feathers scared scarred forever tired

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Lisa Ricci

Date: 3/23/2017 3:29:00 PM

Dear Tim. My goodness. I had to read this twice to soak it all in. First I had to turn the page when seeing the title. I had no idea what I would be reading. Allow me to say you truly know how to express and compose. Your execution in this entry alone is marvelous. I feel honored to have seen and read this entry. Poetry is all about heart and soul and the emotive factor. You and your entry have reached them all. Well done entirely.

Chris Green

Date: 2/27/2017 8:52:00 AM

Pain is often fleeting though understanding that at the time is difficult. Nicely written Tim, you have expressed your emotions in this so well.

Keith O.J. Hunt

Date: 2/27/2017 7:41:00 AM

Deep and unique write Tim, in some ways I know exactly what you mean;-) God bless

Hija De La Luna

Date: 2/27/2017 6:42:00 AM

Ahh, suffering...Your words clutchEd my heart deeply, Tim. This I s a beautiful and powerful piece!

Doug Vinson

Date: 2/26/2017 11:56:00 PM

Tim, you have a unique way of saying things - interesting, poetic, informative, beautiful, etc. Pain - I hope it ends fast. Thinking of ten years ago, two infected vertebrae in my back, thank goodness antibiotics took care of things - that was a bad 3 month stretch.

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 2/26/2017 6:19:00 PM

Tim, A poignant and moving piece written so well. ; ) 7

Arthur Vaso

Date: 2/26/2017 6:17:00 PM

Don't worry, hold in here, I am working on a prison break!!

Darren White
Date: 2/27/2017 8:01:00 AM

Yeah, he and I together!

Ilene Bauer

Date: 2/26/2017 5:03:00 PM

this is both sad and beautiful, tim. also very poetic!

Sara Ella

Date: 2/26/2017 4:54:00 PM

Tim I hope your pain will go away soon! The picture you paint is both very sad and yet beautiful. <3

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 2/26/2017 2:53:00 PM

- Oh, Tim so painful ... but so beautifully written ... - Best wishes and hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Eve Roper

Date: 2/26/2017 2:50:00 PM

Profound and well written dear friend..

Nette Onclaud

Date: 2/26/2017 2:31:00 PM

tim, this is endearing as you express angst in both 'measures' of joy and pain--a polarity highlighted in subtle tones.. huggs

Lynn Marie

Date: 2/26/2017 12:45:00 PM

..you create such beauty out of suffering Tim. I can only hope through your writing you can feel some relief, and feel happy that your lovely words bring much understanding and joy to all who your fine poetry touches.:-) A beautiful poem:-) Love the title. many blessings, lynn

Darren White

Date: 2/26/2017 12:05:00 PM

That pain.... We'll get there Tim, I promise. At the worst moments I close my eyes and imagine me on the beach, at night, in starlight. Write my weird poems. It's going to be alright.

Daniel Turner

Date: 2/26/2017 10:58:00 AM

I didn't mean the pain was in your head only the thought that the pills killed the pain. You'll be good as new before you know it and it will just be something to write poems about:) I love that word "peek" Nice write, Tim:)