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Patriarchy

The village head summoned the meeting The elders, the sons, the warriors came greeting Sitting on a round table all eating Great minds at work in this honorable seating Talks of hunting errands Arranged marriages Scheduled rituals Protection from rivalry tribes Flew and grew With each beer Pulling up his pants that were almost to the ground Joining his peers for another round The boys having all the time, rarely deficient of sound Boisterous, trivial matters, not ashamed of being loud Another day of missed responsibilities Wasted abilities Occasional crime activities Where are the fathers, where are the father figures Society in pieces Endangered species Patriarchy contest 7/4/2015 Sponsor: Thomas Martin

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Date: 8/2/2015 10:42:00 PM
Superb write njeri that's worthy of great win! Big congrats!
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Date: 8/2/2015 12:04:00 AM
Njeri, congratulations. Forever **SKAT**
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Date: 7/7/2015 1:42:00 AM
This is wonderful Njeri...I love how you've portrayed the 'past' and 'now' picture... and how so true the message is. All the best in the contest!
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Date: 7/5/2015 4:55:00 PM
A lovely write for the contest, good luck...............A.M
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Date: 7/5/2015 10:32:00 AM
A brilliant entry for the contest my dear friend, Njeri. I thoroughly enjoyed the read. Thank you so much for sharing! Good luck in the contest. Thank you so much as well for sharing your precious time reading my latest poem and your inspiring comments. love lots and big hugs, Leonora
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Date: 7/5/2015 1:07:00 AM
You've conveyed a sense of place and given a good social commentary, njeri. Good luck for the contest. Viv x Ps- I still think that you should enter the colloquialisms contest, even though your phrases will be unique, since they will give variety and colour to the contest and we'll all learn something new x
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Date: 7/4/2015 7:51:00 PM
I think you have a very strong entry for the contest, my dear. I liked the difference that stands out between the two stanzas. I also like the rhyming you've used. Hugs
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Date: 7/4/2015 7:07:00 PM
True! So many fathers are not there for their children. And how sad that is. I've also seen those droopy pants of the boys with their behinds hanging out! Some, I'm sure are gang members who hide guns in oversized pant legs. They die young. Good luck in the contest.~~Darlene
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