Richard Lamoureux Poet Pantoum

Passionate Smile

I look at you with a knowing smile
Sometimes we don't even need our words
You prepare your arms for my embrace
My smile is transformed into a kiss

Sometimes we don't even need our words
I cannot take my eyes off of your lips
My smile is transformed into a kiss
The passion within begins to grow

I cannot take my eyes off of your lips
Nothing but a slave to my desire
The passion within begins to grow
We press together feeling the heat

Nothing but a slave to my desire
You prepare your arms for my embrace
We press together feeling the heat
I look at you with a knowing smile


First attempt at this form, this is a challenging one.
Thanks to Manel Gunatillake for introducing me to this form.

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Eileen Manassian April 1, 2015 at 6:03 PM so so pretty, Richard. To give love and to receive it in like measure is a blessing. I wonder what happened to Manel? Take care...Hugs Richard Lamoureux April 1, 2015 at 6:48 PM No idea like so any others she moved on. I'm glad you are still here Eileen.

Abdulhafeez Oyewole May 19, 2013 at 12:32 PM Very beautiful. Well written. AO Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:09 PM Thanks A.O

Timothy Hicks May 19, 2013 at 12:20 PM I liked the extension... I believe you are well on your way on getting the hang of this form! In a way it comes as no surprise... your skill with the terzanelle is very effortless (and the pantoum has similar repetition requirements)... Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:10 PM I have tried a few more, I really like this form

Nette Onclaud May 19, 2013 at 1:50 AM you are making waves for your first attempt at this form, richard... pantuoms are hrad to do, but you made it witha delicate theme and rhythmic sway... you may want to strrtch it for more than 2 stanzas, there are some good pantuoms here on soup... well done, my friend!..:) Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:19 AM Thanks, I was following the example on soup so kept it the same length. When I am feeling more ambitious I will try again.

Andrea Dietrich May 19, 2013 at 12:56 AM I think you did a good job of it. You chose a sweet topic too. Like Timothy says below here, typically they are four stanzas or longer. But great first pantoum. Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:20 AM Thanks Andrea

Timothy Hicks May 19, 2013 at 12:39 AM Very nicely done, Richard! And yes, I believe you have followed the pattern correctly. Typically they extend to four stanzas of four lines each (three stanzas is fine as well... I just don't see them very often). Some even carry it onto extreme numbers (like 8 or 10 stanzas). Depends on how far you wanna go with it. If you want to read a poem, which in my opinion, is one of the greatest pantoums I've read, check out He Was My Sun by Terry O'leary, here on P-Soup. Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:22 AM Thanks Tim, this is good information.

Manel Gunatillake May 18, 2013 at 10:04 PM I didn't see your foot note. Thank you my dearest you have elevated me. My next poem will be a pantoum as tribute to you. Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:22 AM It is my pleasure.

Manel Gunatillake May 18, 2013 at 9:29 PM fantastic. you have got it right. you have chosen a good theme for a pantoum. Have you felt the music in it. Lovely theme. Thank you for your comments on my poem. Love and hugs Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:24 AM Thanks for this generous comment.

Colleen Bono May 18, 2013 at 8:20 PM words just flow.take care Richard Lamoureux May 19, 2013 at 6:24 AM Thanks Colleen

Eileen Manassian May 18, 2013 at 6:36 PM Richard...how do you make everything LOOK so easy. This was beautiful and flowing and for a first...it's just amazing. The content is so sweet as well. Eileen Manassian May 18, 2013 at 6:54 PM Well....that makes me happy! :) Richard Lamoureux May 18, 2013 at 6:53 PM Thanks, I am glad you like it, hopefully I got it right. You have made my day with your enthusiastic comment.:0)