Passed Out

Toot, toot goes the train. Jump, jump goes the brain. Moved to a new house. Old one had a mouse. Sometimes change is good. It's all the same! Play the sleep game! INSOMNIAC! INSOMNIAC! I can't sleep! I can't sleep! SLEEPLESSLY! Passed out! Passed out! DREAM!!! This is a Dimished Hexaverse, thank you Dr. Ram Mehta for correcting me. This is a fun type of poetry.

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Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 5/16/2011 5:41:00 PM

Congratulations on your poem being featured this week, Judy

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 5/16/2011 12:59:00 PM

Congratulations on your featured write this week Judy. Love, Carol

Michael Smith

Date: 5/1/2011 1:36:00 PM

This fun to read!! Although try reading it "Sometimes good is change". It rhymes a little better. That is the way my mind read it.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 4/1/2011 10:47:00 AM

Another week has come and gone and I haven't been able to read as much this week as I had wanted. I am glad I was able to read your poetry today Judy. Keep your pen scrolling don't let the ink dry up. I hope you have a wonderful weekend of sunshine and joy and find lots of inspiration along the way. Love, Carol

Brittany Martin

Date: 3/31/2011 8:16:00 PM

Lol This was a fun read! I kinda rapped/sang it out loud XD. It just had the flow that allowed me so. Much enjoyed!

Dr.Ram Mehta

Date: 3/31/2011 5:40:00 PM

What you have written is called Dimished hexaverse and you have done it perfectly, Judy. Please look into Forms of Poetry on the main page on the right side scrolling down to resources.

Constance La France

Date: 3/31/2011 4:28:00 PM

What a wonderful form, I must try it, and I had the same problem last night~~

Emeka Eluwa

Date: 3/31/2011 3:24:00 PM

cool

Kimberly Moore

Date: 3/31/2011 3:20:00 PM

ok, i liked