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Partialling the Truth

Listen here! I am hurting up all over Lying here undiscovered Papparazzi cumulus are jostling in my street God is taking photos of the remnants of His sheep Climbing footholds and gripping on the rungs Heaving and panting I'm a-aching in my lungs Ascend this twisted ladder of my helix I'm not the father of this mutant DNA Help me Hiroshima,make it go away Panties on the washline hip-hopping in the air Headbanging jackets dancing with no hair I tried to speak , stutter, spitting out the truth Joy the dormant factor in my spittle and my sperm Followed you through crooked mile Tracked you through the non-return Nowhere to go now, just following my feet Like an unpaid hooker walking on her beat Oh, my bedside lamp begs the question mark I do not want to hear Sprinkled in baptism Ah! Salvation ...hanging in the air -the petrichor of rain

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Date: 11/14/2017 9:22:00 AM
Everything I just said in my last comment, about how impressively you've honed your writing, is applicable and proved in this write. You have become quite the line 'impactor' and 'grabber.' Yes, I made up my own version of those words up, but I mean what I'm saying. Wonder why I feel to proud of you? Hugs ... CayCay
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 11/14/2017 1:06:00 PM
Bless you dear woman. Your comments are so precious to me
Date: 7/11/2017 1:41:00 AM
Good you are back! Petrichor of rain could be a beautiful metaphor for inspiration returning.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/12/2017 5:42:00 AM
Hi Darren thanks for coming over. It does indeed.
Date: 7/10/2017 2:20:00 PM
Hello Jannie, Thanks for your recent comment on my "Full Moon Makes Faces Tonight" couplet. I really like the spontaneous nature of "Partialling the Truth." The metaphors and relational meanings are very enticing for sure!!This is a superb verse for sure. The only thing missing was Einstein's E = mc2. Cheers and Best, Gary
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/12/2017 5:41:00 AM
Hey Gary, cmon its not that complex. You got to "feel" more than read it. I happy that you came here though. Im working on a delicate love poem now. Its starts with an angle grinder and ends with a front end loader hee hee
Date: 7/9/2017 7:44:00 PM
I agree with Connie, Jannie. your intellect is soaring here! Deep poem. That last line is splendid.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/10/2017 2:29:00 AM
I told John next door what you said about my intellect, and he doubled up with laughter .Dont fret I kicked his shin. Ha ha
Date: 7/8/2017 10:53:00 PM
Nothing sequatious about this fantastic piece Jannie! Your intellect soars in this fine piece that was worth waiting for my friend. Outstanding! : )
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Date: 7/8/2017 7:46:00 PM
First of I like the title a lot. And then I read it you're a wild dancer of character :) I enjoyed it, Jannie... hugs :)
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/10/2017 2:35:00 AM
Hi Akkina. Im doing a twisted samba here. I also went ro your site Thank you. Hugs back
Date: 7/8/2017 5:18:00 PM
Strong imagery in your poem. Not sure I understand everything, but it paints an atmosphere.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/10/2017 2:32:00 AM
Oh Agnes, its easy. When you feel down just jumble down a bunch of words and it all makes sense to you. He he Thanks for visiting
Date: 7/8/2017 2:06:00 PM
I missed you a lot Jannie but you made up for it with this zinger. Wow, action packed, love it, Charlie...
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/8/2017 2:11:00 PM
Whoa Charlie, so did I. Thank you for stopping by and your nice words
Date: 7/7/2017 5:07:00 PM
Groovy and wild, Jannie. Brother, it is so good to read your thoughts/feelings once more. Your poems always spark my muse. I got a dozen poems Rolodex-ing thru my mind thanks to this seminal gem of a poem. So much butterfly truth floating from this grand poem. Love and peace always.
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/8/2017 12:29:00 AM
Freddie Freddie Freddie. Its comments like these that fire me up again.So here comes the next one... I wished you lived next door. Thank you
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Freddie Robinson Jr.
Date: 7/7/2017 5:08:00 PM
Btw ... great title too. Love always.
Date: 7/5/2017 7:10:00 AM
Wild :)
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Jannie Breedt
Date: 7/5/2017 8:20:00 AM
Hi Maureen oy you were quick! Yea I suppose its a bit wild. Walk a mile in my shoes honey. Loved your visit. Ty

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