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Parking Space

Metro auto wipes against my glass muck, fog and rain crush the inside out of me — There part of her appearing windshield down; this myself, a glitter in the stoplight — Now the slick and slip of odd out borders — this accidental Déjà Vu ploughed steel; Where the upside of this doll backseat pass — my brass wheels, they spin only for your world, And then to the swallows new to this air — the color of heart still beneath our tires.

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Date: 5/23/2025 5:00:00 PM
This piece hums with cinematic melancholy--grit, memory, and motion blurred by rain. "Fog and rain crush the inside out of me" is such a visceral opening. And that closing line--"the color of heart still beneath our tires"--absolutely wrecked me. Stark and beautiful.
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Date: 3/30/2025 1:13:00 PM
The ammount of things a space of pavement gets to see, in a day, a year, its life time. It is amazing how much.. Maybe my interprutation is way off but as I read it it made me think. What an interesting discription of a crack forming. "fog and rain crush the inside out of me —" Uniquely in awe of you! A.S.
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Date: 1/21/2025 1:22:00 PM
Love when you use alliteration like "the slick and slip" and that last couplet was awesome.
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Date: 1/20/2025 6:55:00 PM
Emotive!
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