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Paradise

The shrouds of clouds slim whim accost the sun — The phat and fat, ruddy red and horizon muddy one. Underscore of wavy grass, a sea of bees, life’s core. A hiss of bliss, a slap, a tap of tippy-toe on crazy shore. The forest rests on the pregnant breast of the fireball. The teasing test of wheezing labor on a neighbor’s shawl. The quake of vermillion beads, the wake of creation’s seeds. No weeds in rebirth, the girth of bittersweet tease, broken water bleeds. Crusty-Winter’s crossed. Trim sails from rusty nails and splinter’s cross. Behold the boast from coast to coast, warm the cold, the lost. 10/4/2018 Battle XI/Sponsor - Juli-Michelle

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Date: 12/8/2018 4:22:00 PM
Congratulations on your win, Kim!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/8/2018 5:24:00 PM
Thank you, Michelle!
Date: 12/6/2018 4:10:00 AM
Gosh, mine seems puny compared to this giant of the rhyme battle. Now I understand what's required for the next challenge! Congratulations, Kim!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/6/2018 6:31:00 AM
Thanks so much, dear Wendy! Hugs...Kim
Date: 12/5/2018 6:14:00 PM
Kim, I loved the interwoven rhymes here, a well-deserved win! Congratulations on your placement in my Rhyme Battle contest!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 12/5/2018 9:00:00 PM
Thank you, Juli-Michelle!
Date: 10/8/2018 11:27:00 AM
Incredibly rhyme schemes, woven so seamlessly into these wonderful verses. A FAV! Best wishes, Gershon
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/8/2018 3:41:00 PM
Thank you, my friend!
Date: 10/4/2018 4:25:00 PM
Lovely lines that create vivid imagery Kim..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2018 7:38:00 PM
Thank you, dear friend!
Date: 10/4/2018 3:19:00 PM
Great flow, vivid and impressive, good luck in the contest!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2018 7:38:00 PM
Thank you, Michelle!
Date: 10/4/2018 12:41:00 PM
I like your style, Kim. Almost recognizable. lol reads like a winner. I love internal rhymes.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 10/4/2018 7:39:00 PM
Thank you, sweet friend!

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