Parade of Antlers

I pump my arms, my legs
through chlorinated fluidity,

hopeful of shaping up,
not shipping out.

up and down, side to side.
sinking weights.

still wet, dash off to my car.
vinyl and towels on the seat.

wouldn’t want to be pulled
over, wearing only a coverup,

but I want
for my shower.

to the top of the hill.
Oh! Deer!

spotted. no two. done.
no three. the fourth

has huge antlers. stops.
I’ve opened my window

so we can stare at each other.
we have our moment.

so four. no, five.
the final oh-deer

pulling up the rear,
not as robust as the last. done.

now, for the shower;
and to show hub’ the pics

of trees wagging tails,
antlers in the midst,

and the watered down animal
snapped in my itty bitty forest.

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Date: 7/27/2025 1:38:00 PM
Wow, that sounds so beautiful! Sometimes God just wants us to slow down for a minute and see His beautiful creation!
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/28/2025 6:33:00 AM
So true! A couple days later, I saw one other deer in my yard, looking at me and wagging his tail, as if he was a dog…oh my!
Date: 7/11/2025 10:04:00 AM
It's important to appreciate moments, because of that - we find beauty, and things worth the living to see. Beautiful poetry, Kim <3
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 7/11/2025 12:32:00 PM
Such a God thing…it was amazing, Paige!
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