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Pallid Skies

When the rain turns to small stones Battering homes with the sour skies Injured apples lay still on the ground Where they fade in a cloudy puddle And resting not to far A black raven peering with its heavy eyes Against a cold fall day as if he knew what I was thinking He pecked and prodded at his wet feathers And watched me walk past Then raised his mighty wings to flight Free without a thought No thoughts of a lover waiting somewhere No thoughts of retched pollution graying his air Close to what he knew Over my head my umbrella, I drew

Copyright © | Year Posted 2008




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Date: 10/30/2008 3:03:00 PM
Laura, I admire your poem Pallid skies. How expertly you have used words as a paint brush. Beauty thy name is Laura's poems. Thanks for your generous praise of my Haiku Disguise. Best wishes. -Mohammad
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Date: 10/28/2008 5:08:00 PM
I love when it rains, especially when I am at home and not in it, this paints a beautiful masterpiece, great write, take care D-nyce
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Date: 10/28/2008 12:15:00 PM
Strong imagery, so perfect for this miserable rainy/snowy day here. Those birds creep me out too. I saw that bird so clearly prodding is feathers then flying away. I think he knew what you were thinking. Awesome write. Love, Shar
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Date: 10/28/2008 11:31:00 AM
Wonderful. A powerful and very dynamic poem. I love the hinted pun (air/hair) in the pen-penultimate line, which adds so much emphasis to the metaphoric comparison with the raven's unburdened mind. Great write. Love, Nigel
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Date: 10/28/2008 10:02:00 AM
Such clear imagery brings that bird to life for the reader, brings the whole scene and all action alive. A wonderful read my friend. Michael
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