Vijay Pandit Poet Free verse

Pale Shelter

Ashen was the sky 
That rejected hand of sunrise
Sullen was the heart
That stumbled in affection,

Incapable of lauding
Ruby blush of budding rose
And pink passions on horizon
Defying darkened woes.

In midst of a vibrant spring
Her garden blooms curled up
Amid hostile dry weather,

Teared-up, she sat alone
In pathos of indignation
Refusing to surrender
To demands of mendacity.

Crepuscular obscurity
Betrayed her evening
Fashioning night’s reverie
In trickery of nightmares,

As rancor of disillusionment
In ambivalent outrage
Recognized your stygian echoes.

Dead are her feelings now
Stilled in darkened cemetery
In graveyard of misdeeds,

Where spent emotions
Lamenting shattered love
Inscribe finality on tombstone
In epitaph of silent screams
Expounding your infidelity.

Oh, harbingers of cold hands,
Architects of pale shelter,

Glittering shiny metals
Disguising as genuine jewels,

Fear the cry of her angst
Howling soul forsaken

For she holds you in contempt
Of ancient Agape love
And monument to beloved--
The wondrous Taj Mahal.

November 15, 2019
Placed 1st: Pale shelter contest; Sponsor: John Hamilton
Placed 2nd: Strand special 11 by Brian Strand

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Angela Crabtree November 11, 2020 at 3:32 PM Great poem, Vijay. Sad, sad ending...

Brenda Chiri December 29, 2019 at 4:18 PM Vijay congrats on your top win!;)

Lin Lane December 19, 2019 at 5:38 AM This is filled with wistful thoughts, sentimental wanderings and heartache, told with a delicate hand. I see why John thought you should have been awarded a stand alone 1st place. I appreciate your use of 'Agape love.'

Heidi Sands December 8, 2019 at 7:01 PM Congratulations for your win Vijay! :) Vijay Pandit December 9, 2019 at 6:58 AM Much appreciate Heidi--many thanks.

Andrea Dietrich December 8, 2019 at 1:48 PM so glad to see you scored high. I figured you would with this gem. Congratulations. Vijay Pandit December 9, 2019 at 6:57 AM Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

Juliet Ligon December 7, 2019 at 11:17 PM Very descriptive and powerful. Congrats on a well deserved win! Vijay Pandit December 8, 2019 at 9:57 AM Thank you Juliet--many thanks.

Na Na December 7, 2019 at 5:39 PM Congrats on your winning poem Vijay Vijay Pandit December 8, 2019 at 9:57 AM Much appreciate Gregory--many thanks.

John Hamilton December 7, 2019 at 4:33 PM I've read this at least 5 times, I'm going to fave this one, it is I think beyond a doubt your best write. Upon further reflection I think I did you an injustice, this should have been stand alone first place, I don't think any of the others would disagree. Sorry! Vijay Pandit December 8, 2019 at 10:14 AM That is a very nice thing to say, John--especially an honor coming from you. You are a man of high integrity and goodwill--much obliged that you took the time to reflect regardless of the merit of the poem. Not many do that. I do not feel injustice --no need at all to say sorry, my friend. I am thrilled that you liked the poem. Many thanks, John.

Sandra Adams December 7, 2019 at 1:57 PM back to say congratulations my friend...i knew you would be up top with this one :) hugs Vijay Pandit December 8, 2019 at 9:57 AM Thanks for the return visit Sandy--much appreciate.

John Hamilton December 7, 2019 at 1:42 PM This is an astounding write Vijay, a well deserved shared top win! You are in great company with this write! Vijay Pandit December 8, 2019 at 9:56 AM You are so very kind--much appreciate John--many thanks.

Connie Marcum Wong November 24, 2019 at 4:48 PM A melancholy masterpiece Vijay! Your talent shines so brightly in this piece. I hope John realizes what a gem this poem is! : ) xxoo Vijay Pandit November 25, 2019 at 6:55 AM Much appreciate your kind remarks Connie--many thanks my friend.

Alexis Y. November 22, 2019 at 9:33 AM WoW! Vijay, This is an excellent interpretation of the song Pale Shelter by Tears For Fears. Your talent amazes me. I wish you the best of luck in contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis Vijay Pandit November 23, 2019 at 7:13 AM So kind of you my friend--much appreciate your comments--many thanks, Alexis.

Janice Canerdy November 19, 2019 at 9:28 AM Vijay, this is a dramatically descriptive, vivid, moving piece telling of heartbreak and disillusionment. Janice Vijay Pandit November 20, 2019 at 3:41 PM Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.

Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2019 at 7:04 PM Your talent is fully on display with this beauty. Vijay Pandit November 19, 2019 at 5:47 AM Thank you Richard--much appreciate.

Jennifer Proxenos November 18, 2019 at 1:20 PM The Taj Mahal, one of the seven wonders of the world - I would love to physically see it and be close to it. Such a vibrant poem powerful and full of creativity ! Hugs and blessings my friend, Jennifer. Vijay Pandit November 19, 2019 at 5:46 AM Much appreciate Jennifer--many thanks.

S.Zaynab Kamoonpuri November 18, 2019 at 11:46 AM Wow you wove and created an impressive eloquent story of your own! Then you added the Taj Mahal to it woah. The monument was built as a token of love by the emperor for his wife. Your vocab also is brilliant! Kudos. Pls pleez do comment on my newest poem too. I luv to hear from yah. Vijay Pandit November 19, 2019 at 5:46 AM Thank you S. zaynab--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.

Pashang Salehi November 17, 2019 at 11:44 PM Wow ... such great write ... I love the ending. Pashang Salehi November 19, 2019 at 12:54 AM You bet my friend... Vijay Pandit November 18, 2019 at 5:56 AM Much appreciate Pashang--many thanks.

Lawrence Sharp November 17, 2019 at 10:25 PM Definitely one of your finest, my friend ! Great mood, exceptional wordcraft... smashingly good poem ! Vijay Pandit November 18, 2019 at 5:56 AM A joy to read your feedback--so kind of you Lawrence--many thanks. Awaiting your new poem soon!

Heidi Sands November 17, 2019 at 8:22 PM You are such a good writer Vijay. This is written superbly and with depth. Well done! :) Vijay Pandit November 18, 2019 at 5:55 AM You are so very kind--appreciate the compliments, Heidi--many many thanks.

Liam Mcdaid November 17, 2019 at 5:09 PM a pale shelter almost like a moonlit night sitting under the light of your pen beautifully painted vijay the ending was perfectly moulded into this piece Vijay Pandit November 18, 2019 at 5:53 AM Thank you my friend--appreciate your visit and comments.

Andrea Dietrich November 17, 2019 at 10:40 AM I still have to hear the song!! Vijay Pandit November 17, 2019 at 11:57 AM Sad tones in the song--beautifully vague.

Andrea Dietrich November 17, 2019 at 10:40 AM wow, in the end the Taj Mahal. Very creative descriptions, Vijay. What an interesting way to do the theme of pale shelter. Vijay Pandit November 17, 2019 at 11:56 AM Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.

Demetrios Trifiatis November 17, 2019 at 3:13 AM Captivating poem depicting the story of an eternal love! A monument your verses are that compete in beauty the structure itself dear, Vijay! Vijay Pandit November 17, 2019 at 11:55 AM Many thanks my friend--much appreciate.

Brandy Nicole November 16, 2019 at 11:09 PM So much can be said about this place. There are many different angles to look at "The wondrous Taj Mahal" Each and every emotion I can feel, through your words. This holds a touch of sadness. It is so beautifully written and presented. ~ Brandy Vijay Pandit November 17, 2019 at 11:55 AM Thank you Brandy--much appreciate your kind remarks..

Eve Roper November 16, 2019 at 10:23 PM Nicely done, you made it look easy ,a good read, good luck in the contest. I too like CayCay I am not familiar to the song.. so I will not attempt. Vijay Pandit November 17, 2019 at 11:54 AM Thanks for the visit and your comments Eve--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.

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