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Pale shelter

Ashen was the sky 
That rejected hand of sunrise
Sullen was the heart
That stumbled in affection,

Incapable of lauding
Ruby blush of budding rose
And pink passions on horizon
Defying darkened woes.

In midst of a vibrant spring
Her garden blooms curled up
Amid hostile dry weather,

Teared-up, she sat alone
In pathos of indignation
Refusing to surrender
To demands of mendacity.

Crepuscular obscurity
Betrayed her evening
Fashioning night’s reverie
In trickery of nightmares,

As rancor of disillusionment
In ambivalent outrage
Recognized your stygian echoes.

Dead are her feelings now
Stilled in darkened cemetery
In graveyard of misdeeds,

Where spent emotions
Lamenting shattered love
Inscribe finality on tombstone
In epitaph of silent screams
Expounding your infidelity.

Oh, harbingers of cold hands,
Architects of pale shelter,

Glittering shiny metals
Disguising as genuine jewels,

Fear the cry of her angst
Howling soul forsaken

For she holds you in contempt
Of ancient Agape love
And monument to beloved--
The wondrous Taj Mahal.

November 15, 2019
Placed 1st: Pale shelter contest; Sponsor: John Hamilton

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Date: 12/7/2019 11:17:00 PM
Very descriptive and powerful. Congrats on a well deserved win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Juliet--many thanks.
Date: 12/7/2019 5:39:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Much appreciate Gregory--many thanks.
Date: 12/7/2019 4:33:00 PM
I've read this at least 5 times, I'm going to fave this one, it is I think beyond a doubt your best write. Upon further reflection I think I did you an injustice, this should have been stand alone first place, I don't think any of the others would disagree. Sorry!
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Date: 12/8/2019 10:14:00 AM
That is a very nice thing to say, John--especially an honor coming from you. You are a man of high integrity and goodwill--much obliged that you took the time to reflect regardless of the merit of the poem. Not many do that. I do not feel injustice --no need at all to say sorry, my friend. I am thrilled that you liked the poem. Many thanks, John.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:57:00 PM
back to say congratulations my friend...i knew you would be up top with this one :) hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thanks for the return visit Sandy--much appreciate.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:42:00 PM
This is an astounding write Vijay, a well deserved shared top win! You are in great company with this write!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:56:00 AM
You are so very kind--much appreciate John--many thanks.
Date: 11/24/2019 4:48:00 PM
A melancholy masterpiece Vijay! Your talent shines so brightly in this piece. I hope John realizes what a gem this poem is! : ) xxoo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/25/2019 6:55:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind remarks Connie--many thanks my friend.
Date: 11/24/2019 3:17:00 PM
WOW! It has been a while since I've left comments! I've been so busy! I am glad to finally read your wonderful poems! Keep posting!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/24/2019 4:13:00 PM
Thank you Natalyn--much appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 11/22/2019 9:33:00 AM
WoW! Vijay, This is an excellent interpretation of the song Pale Shelter by Tears For Fears. Your talent amazes me. I wish you the best of luck in contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/23/2019 7:13:00 AM
So kind of you my friend--much appreciate your comments--many thanks, Alexis.
Date: 11/19/2019 9:28:00 AM
Vijay, this is a dramatically descriptive, vivid, moving piece telling of heartbreak and disillusionment. Janice
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Date: 11/20/2019 3:41:00 PM
Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.
Date: 11/19/2019 4:40:00 AM
A fabulous write, Vijay. Best wishes for the contest. T.J
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:47:00 AM
Thank you T. J.--much appreciate.
Date: 11/18/2019 7:04:00 PM
Your talent is fully on display with this beauty.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:47:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate.
Date: 11/18/2019 1:20:00 PM
The Taj Mahal, one of the seven wonders of the world - I would love to physically see it and be close to it. Such a vibrant poem powerful and full of creativity ! Hugs and blessings my friend, Jennifer.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:46:00 AM
Much appreciate Jennifer--many thanks.
Date: 11/18/2019 11:46:00 AM
Wow you wove and created an impressive eloquent story of your own! Then you added the Taj Mahal to it woah. The monument was built as a token of love by the emperor for his wife. Your vocab also is brilliant! Kudos. Pls pleez do comment on my newest poem too. I luv to hear from yah.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:46:00 AM
Thank you S. zaynab--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 11:44:00 PM
Wow ... such great write ... I love the ending.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 11/19/2019 12:54:00 AM
You bet my friend...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:56:00 AM
Much appreciate Pashang--many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:25:00 PM
Definitely one of your finest, my friend ! Great mood, exceptional wordcraft... smashingly good poem !
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:56:00 AM
A joy to read your feedback--so kind of you Lawrence--many thanks. Awaiting your new poem soon!
Date: 11/17/2019 8:22:00 PM
You are such a good writer Vijay. This is written superbly and with depth. Well done! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:55:00 AM
You are so very kind--appreciate the compliments, Heidi--many many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 5:09:00 PM
a pale shelter almost like a moonlit night sitting under the light of your pen beautifully painted vijay the ending was perfectly moulded into this piece
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:53:00 AM
Thank you my friend--appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:40:00 AM
wow, in the end the Taj Mahal. Very creative descriptions, Vijay. What an interesting way to do the theme of pale shelter.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:56:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:40:00 AM
I still have to hear the song!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:57:00 AM
Sad tones in the song--beautifully vague.
Date: 11/17/2019 3:13:00 AM
Captivating poem depicting the story of an eternal love! A monument your verses are that compete in beauty the structure itself dear, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:55:00 AM
Many thanks my friend--much appreciate.
Date: 11/16/2019 11:09:00 PM
So much can be said about this place. There are many different angles to look at "The wondrous Taj Mahal" Each and every emotion I can feel, through your words. This holds a touch of sadness. It is so beautifully written and presented. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:55:00 AM
Thank you Brandy--much appreciate your kind remarks..
Date: 11/16/2019 10:23:00 PM
Nicely done, you made it look easy ,a good read, good luck in the contest. I too like CayCay I am not familiar to the song.. so I will not attempt.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:54:00 AM
Thanks for the visit and your comments Eve--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.
Date: 11/16/2019 5:56:00 PM
I have read about the contest but I am not a bit familiar with the song (maybe I'll recognize it when I hear it) so I can't commit on content in terms of defining the song but I can tell you this write is, to me, profound - requiring a second read which the talent each line exposes made me glad to do. Impressively written and appreciatively read! Always a pleasure. CayCay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:53:00 AM
Always a pleasure to read your feedback--much appreciate CayCay..many thanks.
Date: 11/16/2019 5:33:00 PM
one of the most wonderous beauties is the Taj Mahal, you are majestic with your pen, and beautiful of spirit, who can ask for anything more. I suspend my disbelief, and believe in your reality. That is what good friends do xo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:52:00 AM
Such a nice comments my friend--much appreciate your kind remarks..many thanks.
Date: 11/16/2019 2:02:00 PM
- Beautifully written with sad and gloomy feelings, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/16/2019 2:45:00 PM
Yes--the song is kind of like that. Much appreciate Anne-Lise--many thanks.
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