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Pale Shelter

Ashen was the sky That rejected hand of sunrise Sullen was the heart That stumbled in affection, Incapable of lauding Ruby blush of budding rose And pink passions on horizon Defying darkened woes. In midst of a vibrant spring Her garden blooms curled up Amid hostile dry weather, Teared-up, she sat alone In pathos of indignation Refusing to surrender To demands of mendacity. Crepuscular obscurity Betrayed her evening Fashioning night’s reverie In trickery of nightmares, As rancor of disillusionment In ambivalent outrage Recognized your stygian echoes. Dead are her feelings now Stilled in darkened cemetery In graveyard of misdeeds, Where spent emotions Lamenting shattered love Inscribe finality on tombstone In epitaph of silent screams Expounding your infidelity. Oh, harbingers of cold hands, Architects of pale shelter, Glittering shiny metals Disguising as genuine jewels, Fear the cry of her angst Howling soul forsaken For she holds you in contempt Of ancient Agape love And monument to beloved-- The wondrous Taj Mahal. November 15, 2019 Placed 1st: Pale shelter contest; Sponsor: John Hamilton Placed 2nd: Strand special 11 by Brian Strand

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Date: 11/11/2020 3:32:00 PM
Great poem, Vijay. Sad, sad ending...
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Date: 12/29/2019 4:18:00 PM
Vijay congrats on your top win!;)
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Date: 12/19/2019 5:38:00 AM
This is filled with wistful thoughts, sentimental wanderings and heartache, told with a delicate hand. I see why John thought you should have been awarded a stand alone 1st place. I appreciate your use of 'Agape love.'
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Date: 12/8/2019 7:01:00 PM
Congratulations for your win Vijay! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/9/2019 6:58:00 AM
Much appreciate Heidi--many thanks.
Date: 12/8/2019 1:48:00 PM
so glad to see you scored high. I figured you would with this gem. Congratulations.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/9/2019 6:57:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.
Date: 12/7/2019 11:17:00 PM
Very descriptive and powerful. Congrats on a well deserved win!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thank you Juliet--many thanks.
Date: 12/7/2019 5:39:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem Vijay
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Much appreciate Gregory--many thanks.
Date: 12/7/2019 4:33:00 PM
I've read this at least 5 times, I'm going to fave this one, it is I think beyond a doubt your best write. Upon further reflection I think I did you an injustice, this should have been stand alone first place, I don't think any of the others would disagree. Sorry!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 10:14:00 AM
That is a very nice thing to say, John--especially an honor coming from you. You are a man of high integrity and goodwill--much obliged that you took the time to reflect regardless of the merit of the poem. Not many do that. I do not feel injustice --no need at all to say sorry, my friend. I am thrilled that you liked the poem. Many thanks, John.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:57:00 PM
back to say congratulations my friend...i knew you would be up top with this one :) hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:57:00 AM
Thanks for the return visit Sandy--much appreciate.
Date: 12/7/2019 1:42:00 PM
This is an astounding write Vijay, a well deserved shared top win! You are in great company with this write!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 12/8/2019 9:56:00 AM
You are so very kind--much appreciate John--many thanks.
Date: 11/24/2019 4:48:00 PM
A melancholy masterpiece Vijay! Your talent shines so brightly in this piece. I hope John realizes what a gem this poem is! : ) xxoo
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/25/2019 6:55:00 AM
Much appreciate your kind remarks Connie--many thanks my friend.
Date: 11/22/2019 9:33:00 AM
WoW! Vijay, This is an excellent interpretation of the song Pale Shelter by Tears For Fears. Your talent amazes me. I wish you the best of luck in contest. Have a great day:-) Alexis
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/23/2019 7:13:00 AM
So kind of you my friend--much appreciate your comments--many thanks, Alexis.
Date: 11/19/2019 9:28:00 AM
Vijay, this is a dramatically descriptive, vivid, moving piece telling of heartbreak and disillusionment. Janice
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/20/2019 3:41:00 PM
Much appreciate Janice--many thanks.
Date: 11/18/2019 7:04:00 PM
Your talent is fully on display with this beauty.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:47:00 AM
Thank you Richard--much appreciate.
Date: 11/18/2019 1:20:00 PM
The Taj Mahal, one of the seven wonders of the world - I would love to physically see it and be close to it. Such a vibrant poem powerful and full of creativity ! Hugs and blessings my friend, Jennifer.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:46:00 AM
Much appreciate Jennifer--many thanks.
Date: 11/18/2019 11:46:00 AM
Wow you wove and created an impressive eloquent story of your own! Then you added the Taj Mahal to it woah. The monument was built as a token of love by the emperor for his wife. Your vocab also is brilliant! Kudos. Pls pleez do comment on my newest poem too. I luv to hear from yah.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/19/2019 5:46:00 AM
Thank you S. zaynab--much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 11:44:00 PM
Wow ... such great write ... I love the ending.
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Pashang Salehi
Date: 11/19/2019 12:54:00 AM
You bet my friend...
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:56:00 AM
Much appreciate Pashang--many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:25:00 PM
Definitely one of your finest, my friend ! Great mood, exceptional wordcraft... smashingly good poem !
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:56:00 AM
A joy to read your feedback--so kind of you Lawrence--many thanks. Awaiting your new poem soon!
Date: 11/17/2019 8:22:00 PM
You are such a good writer Vijay. This is written superbly and with depth. Well done! :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:55:00 AM
You are so very kind--appreciate the compliments, Heidi--many many thanks.
Date: 11/17/2019 5:09:00 PM
a pale shelter almost like a moonlit night sitting under the light of your pen beautifully painted vijay the ending was perfectly moulded into this piece
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/18/2019 5:53:00 AM
Thank you my friend--appreciate your visit and comments.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:40:00 AM
wow, in the end the Taj Mahal. Very creative descriptions, Vijay. What an interesting way to do the theme of pale shelter.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:56:00 AM
Thank you Andrea--much appreciate.
Date: 11/17/2019 10:40:00 AM
I still have to hear the song!!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:57:00 AM
Sad tones in the song--beautifully vague.
Date: 11/17/2019 3:13:00 AM
Captivating poem depicting the story of an eternal love! A monument your verses are that compete in beauty the structure itself dear, Vijay!
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:55:00 AM
Many thanks my friend--much appreciate.
Date: 11/16/2019 11:09:00 PM
So much can be said about this place. There are many different angles to look at "The wondrous Taj Mahal" Each and every emotion I can feel, through your words. This holds a touch of sadness. It is so beautifully written and presented. ~ Brandy
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:55:00 AM
Thank you Brandy--much appreciate your kind remarks..
Date: 11/16/2019 10:23:00 PM
Nicely done, you made it look easy ,a good read, good luck in the contest. I too like CayCay I am not familiar to the song.. so I will not attempt.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 11/17/2019 11:54:00 AM
Thanks for the visit and your comments Eve--much appreciate the kind remarks--many thanks.
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