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Emotional Shrapnel Contest

Painful Reveal

Your recent reveal was a sad steal
of all I knew.
My memory now bleeds severely
making days blue.
My world shattered and scattered
across the floor.
Something dying is out loud crying
aching and sore.
Your truth so grilling it is piercing
the past I saw.
Now that I am bruised by your news
I am plain raw.

Feeling a fragile head from words said
I’m torn apart.
No light to lend so darkness will bend
and ease my heart.
I will long mourn this unwanted thorn
that makes me cry.
I must ride the storm then wake some morn
with my eyes dry.
I need healing so I am willing
to see tears gone.
Accepting plight to put thoughts aright
I must play strong.

I accept what I cannot reject
for I love you.
Not knowing truth would alter my youth 
your story flew.
Nothing to gain by showing my pain
so I hushed true.
Explanation of revelation
will not ease me.
You had a need to stop your own bleed
to set hurt free. 
Never will you meet the strain of pain
for me, not thee.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2025

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Aldana Avatar
June 29, 2025 at 3:48 AM
• Painful • Emotional • Traumatic • Addictive Read
Jama Avatar
May 17, 2025 at 5:50 PM
Congratulations in placing in my contest. I can feel the absolute sorrow and pain in your piece. It is truly a heartbreaking write. Beautifully written. Each line is like a punch to the gut. I am truly sorry for the pain you are going through. I appreciate you writing.
Crandall Avatar
May 12, 2025 at 6:31 PM
Sounds very painful, but it you seem to be able to process it well. I guess poetry helps with that.
Wolf Avatar
May 11, 2025 at 5:04 PM
STARK, as in DARK. Wow. ~ Gershon
Anaya Avatar
May 11, 2025 at 2:40 PM
Love how the tail ends rhyme, you are sharing such personal memoirs, love that wasn't meant as we thought, universal and i can resonate as well. It also makes me want to now more of what he has revealed--and it makes you so brave and i adore that. Bol ~ xhugs
Godwin Avatar
May 11, 2025 at 3:12 PM
It was a SHE, one I call Mom, thus the line, "knowing the truth would alter my youth ..." The contest made me recall a night in 1999 when she broke my child, teenage and adult heart. Thank you, Anaya, for the affectionate and concerned comments. You're right, we can't assume our view of someone's feel for us is their reality, not until we truly know them. CayCay
Dietrich Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 7:26 PM
Wow. This is very heartfelt, Caycay and I am sorry for the pain that was inflicted in you, dear friend. Soupmail
Hind Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 6:46 PM
Raw- you must be going through a lot. I'm sorry. A beautiful poem for this contest. Best of luck, <3
Hind Avatar
May 11, 2025 at 1:38 PM
Oh, okay- glad everything is good there. :) Stunning writing. <3
Godwin Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 10:34 PM
Honey, I am a very joyous, upbeat person who has, indeed, been thru much, but I'm sure I agreed to every pain I've evolved thru. I am very spiritual and have held God's hand since a wee one. I am good. I wrote this from a memory I recorded in my journal in 1999. I'm okay. A lot of what you read the other day is from the past, and some was pure fiction. I have always walked into my pain that I will grow. Be golden, Paige ... CayCay
Empress Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 8:48 AM
How deeply moving and emotive is your poem, i felt the emotions flowing throughout this and i can resonate with so many lines in this! I especially love the lines “ I must ride the storm then wake some morn with my eyes dry. I need healing so I am willing to see tears gone.” i hope for those tears to be gone too! And yes sometimes when its stormy we just need to ride it out! Pleasure reading you today! Iv been thinking of you! So happy to see you back and posting! Sending you light poetic soul
Buhagiar Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 8:32 AM
I thought you had abandoned me. I had a POTD: Revenge of the Raven which is definitely not romantic and I can assure you I will be posting poems which I label dark. I loved your poem. So vivid and glad I read it. Returning your poetry hugs.
Poet Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 8:25 AM
Your bright, compelling poetry uses powerful emotional imagery. While "hushed truth" and "unwanted thorn" show that complexity, "bleeds," "shattered," "weeping," and "bruised" express great grief and pain. Contrasting imagery, such as "bright" and "darkness," makes your poetry more emotive.
Jones Avatar
May 10, 2025 at 7:09 AM
Emotive passionate write! You pull us into your world with vivid word choices. Great job and good luck!
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