Richard Lamoureux Poet Terza Rima

Pain Drips

It seems at times we play sad parts.
Dancing on the edge of obscurity.
Music played on broken harps.

One step away from insanity.
We cling with a fervored grip.
How we hold on is a mystery.

We try not to drink yet take a sip.
The flavor of remorse intoxicates.
From our minds the liquid drips.

The judge and jury exonerates.
They cry this guilt was never yours
Still this knowledge doesn't satiate.
 
For the demons aren't trapped behind locked doors
Their power is infused within our pores



For Freddie's Terza Rima contest.

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Red Fiery August 16, 2013 at 11:10 PM Once again I feel connected. Judge and jury...exonerates. ...brought tears again ...keep on writing like this. You have a big fan here... Richard Lamoureux August 17, 2013 at 6:56 AM Thanks Red, I appreciate you looking back through my work.

Karen Anglesey August 11, 2013 at 5:15 PM WOW..I really, really like this one. You took the subject full throttle. Excellent write and congratulations on your win:) Richard Lamoureux August 11, 2013 at 6:21 PM What a great response Karen!

Sara Kendrick August 11, 2013 at 2:14 PM Congrats on your winning work..Sara Richard Lamoureux August 11, 2013 at 6:22 PM Thanks Sara

Len Gasun August 10, 2013 at 10:33 PM Good morning my dear friend Richard! This is a very lovely & touching write. A perfect terza rima indeed. I haven't tried this form yet but you did it extraordinarily well. I'm loving it & goes to my fave. Thank you so much for sharing and my win in your contest. I'm so sorry if the expression of gratitude comes only now 'cuz I didn't have enough time to come back @ soup. Got hectic schedules. But now I can stay longer 'til tom. (holiday). God bless! Million thanks! love lots & hugs, Leonora Richard Lamoureux August 11, 2013 at 6:25 PM Thanks Leonora. Your win in my contest was well deserved, I appreciate the entry in my contest.

Skat A August 9, 2013 at 7:08 PM well done... SKAT Richard Lamoureux August 9, 2013 at 7:20 PM Thanks SKAT

Andrea Dietrich August 9, 2013 at 4:47 PM wow, what a great poem about remorse and sadness, Richard. I really like it. Congrats, and I'm glad I am finally seeing it. Richard Lamoureux August 9, 2013 at 6:37 PM Thanks Andrea, I had forgotten I wrote this one.

Richard D Seal July 29, 2013 at 5:05 PM You have to live with you do, best to stay on the side of sanity, though I'll admit to slipping over now and then lol. You've made a great job of this write Rick, with a powerful message. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux July 29, 2013 at 5:08 PM Thanks Richard, I appreciate your visits today. You definatly have a playful humorous nature, I like that about you.

Milton Toran July 23, 2013 at 9:46 AM "We try not to drink yet take a sip". Absolutely my favorite line! We fight so hard to avoid the temptations in life, but that one small sip is all it takes to wreak havoc in our lives. Love the metaphoric contrast to our struggles and choices in life. Milt Richard Lamoureux July 23, 2013 at 2:56 PM You got it Milt! Sometimes seems pretty hard to resist and we believe we are stong enough to control the outcome. The deceiver has us figured out. Thanks for commenting.

Nette Onclaud July 22, 2013 at 2:19 PM Deep write lined with somber yet appealing tones, rich... wonderful!..:) Richard Lamoureux July 22, 2013 at 3:54 PM Thanks Nette

Heather Ober July 22, 2013 at 8:14 AM Those last two lines - wow!! Fantastic message and imagery, Rick! I love the title too. Richard Lamoureux July 22, 2013 at 11:47 AM Thanks Heather.

Eileen Manassian July 22, 2013 at 8:07 AM Richard....did you check? Are you sure you've done it the right way? Will you get back to me on this when you can? Thanks Eileen Manassian July 22, 2013 at 8:58 AM Thanks....please get back to me when you do.. Richard Lamoureux July 22, 2013 at 8:12 AM In the form area it seems that the last stanza should rhyme with the second line of the previous stanza. I sent a note to Craig to get some clarification.

Barbara Gorelick July 21, 2013 at 4:20 PM You've outdone yourself..this is magnificent...Another winner. BG Richard Lamoureux July 21, 2013 at 5:24 PM Thanks Barb, I appreciate the kind visit.

Eileen Manassian July 21, 2013 at 11:24 AM I don't know what to write.....It's too deep for words Richard Lamoureux July 21, 2013 at 12:41 PM That is more than enough, thanks

Colleen Bono July 21, 2013 at 10:55 AM Very deep. I wouldn't know where to start on a poem for your contest. Could you soup mail me a short example and maybe it will kickstart something? Love Colleen Richard Lamoureux July 21, 2013 at 12:41 PM I will send a soup mail.

Poet Tacito July 21, 2013 at 9:36 AM Some very, very deep messages within this piece. "Dancing on the edge of obscurity, Music played on broken harps"...damn. Richard Lamoureux July 22, 2013 at 3:55 PM thanks Drake. I missed you down here. sorry I didn't respnd till now.