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Outside the City

OUTSIDE THE CITY Outside the city where the pomegranates grow, I take a silent breath and walk a little slow, The cottage I live in is not too far away, All covered with ivy and an open doorway; Outside the city where the icy waters flow, There's a hidden garden where I often go, Having ruby red apples and bottle green pears, All ready to eat but there's no one who cares; Outside the city where the unearthly folks show, I take a tiny step and talk a little low, The cottage I came for is right in front of me, But there are others inside where I ought to be; Outside the city where I had died long ago, You can hear my laughter and laugh with me also, I'm munching merrily on the apples and pears, While inside my cottage others enjoy the scares. 28 April 2016 For Angela Tune's "A Ghost Story" contest

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Date: 1/13/2022 10:42:00 PM
Great Ghost Story. Very thrilling. Congratulations!
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Date: 1/13/2022 12:51:00 PM
Back with congrats on your top win!
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Date: 1/13/2022 11:00:00 AM
Smashingly eerie write, Jo. Im glad old spooky drawers likes apples and pears cos I wouldn’t want him coming after my banana. Congrats on your first place win. Terry
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Date: 1/13/2022 9:49:00 AM
A great story, Jo! Your imagery is beautiful and a surprise ending ~ what more can a person ask for! Congratulations :)
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Date: 1/8/2022 7:19:00 PM
Love this! It is a pretty write. I love the ruby red apples and bottle green pears. When the ghost shows up the outsiders know.
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Date: 1/7/2022 8:42:00 PM
Great perspective...I see it was a while back when you wrote this but I hope it was in the running.
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Date: 1/7/2022 5:04:00 PM
This has overtones of a grown up (Casper the friendly ghost). Lovely imagery and delicious descriptions of the fruit. I'd go there, even with a ghost. :-) Bill
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Date: 1/7/2022 3:34:00 PM
wow, that's quite a different ghost story. I like it very much, Jo
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Date: 1/7/2022 6:57:00 AM
This is a great one Jo! Well done :)
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Date: 1/7/2022 1:11:00 AM
Aah.. Great ghostly poem. I enjoyed it.. Good luck in the contest Daniel
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Date: 1/7/2022 12:51:00 AM
You often hear about people returning after they have passed to a place where they were happy Good luck in the contest Jo. Tom
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Date: 1/6/2022 10:32:00 PM
What a lively and blissful ghost you make. Enjoyed the read. Blessings.
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Date: 1/6/2022 10:12:00 PM
I really enjoyed this lyrical piece Jo. Excellent rhyme and flow. New year blessings xxoo
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Date: 1/6/2022 9:30:00 PM
Brilliant! I am fine! Happy new year to you too dear
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Date: 1/6/2022 9:24:00 PM
This is a REPOST:)
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