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Outside My Window

Outside my bedroom window, as I peak through, a giant Bird of Paradise hides me from view. Down the busy boulevard, traffic hurries by while, under the shade of a tree, friends are stopping to say 'hi'. Children returning home from school, neighbors walking to the store; conversations rise and fall as people pass my door. Sometimes it's angry words I hear, usually late at night; I can't help but wonder, is everything alright? I only catch a moment of other people's lives but, I have a hopeful feeling, my own life it revives. Soon, I know, the curtain will fall and I will see no more for I'm confined to my bed with death my only visitor. Janece Terry September 9, 2015

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Date: 4/16/2016 12:51:00 PM
GREAT! Loved this in couplet form and was with you peaking from the window and listening at the door. Totally works!
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Date: 3/3/2016 1:59:00 PM
Lovely piece Janece, so well written, rather enjoyed it!
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:55:00 PM
Very wonderful take on the theme Janece! Congrats on a fantastic win!
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Date: 9/28/2015 11:02:00 PM
Janece, Congrats in Bev Smith's, contest. Hugs **SKAT**
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Date: 9/28/2015 9:18:00 PM
Nice write. Nice rhyme.
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Date: 9/23/2015 12:13:00 AM
I saw all the images you've described outside your window, Jan. Very good imagery. Seeing the last couplet, I hope this is fiction. Take care. hugs!
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Date: 10/1/2015 12:23:00 PM
Just returned from the mountains to find my Bird of Paradise cut down. Egads! I've been exposed. Lol. :) Janece
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Jan Terry
Date: 9/25/2015 12:02:00 PM
Thank you, Kim. Everything in my poem is true except that last couplet. I am not bedridden nor do I have a terminal illness that I'm aware of. However, I can imagine someone living vicariously through others. Thanks again for your comment. If you see something I can improve, please feel free to advise me. I am still very much in the learning stages of poetry. Hugs. Janece
Date: 9/16/2015 6:45:00 PM
That poem is AWESOME! I love it! Great job.
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Jan Terry
Date: 9/25/2015 12:06:00 PM
Thank you for reading my poem, Bekah. Glad you enjoyed it. It is so gratifying when others read what you write. I will be checking in on you too. :) Janece

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