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chain rhyme

Disciples wept
in mass anxiety 
pioneering death in the sea unknown.
Their Master slept. 
Hearts were afraid on Galilee,
facing it seemed His lack of care.
Up from the deep, He spoke relief,
storm was doomed, "Wind and Waves, be still. "

~~~~~

Their Master wept
in dismal piety
volunteering sin's full debt to atone.
Disciples slept
while He prayed in Gethsemane,
bracing for clear death and despair.
Friends fall asleep.  Broken with grief,
He resumed,  "Father God,  Your will."

Copyright © | Year Posted 2011



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Date: 9/8/2021 9:40:00 PM
Reason, congratulations on your win in my "H" Contest, New or Old with your wonderful poem ~ peace and tranquility _Constance
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Date: 8/19/2013 6:41:00 PM
While I am not a "religious" person per se, I find this poem is both beautiful and brilliant, absolutely brilliant. I felt the spirituality, and it touched me. As poets, I think our job is to prick an emotion inside the reader, and you definitely did for me. Kudos--no, double kudos lol; wonderful piece. You should be proud :)
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Date: 9/8/2021 6:09:00 PM
I thank you, Chan, for your kind, generous note. So glad you were able to relate to the poem emotionally. Your comments makes my day Just noticed the eight year old date (2013), but the piece just won 2nd place in a contest today, Sept 8, 2021. Double thanks to you
Date: 1/5/2012 7:01:00 AM
Congratulations on your win in ~Debbie Guzzi's~ "Something Different" contest Reason. Love, Carol
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Date: 1/3/2012 3:54:00 PM
I could not deny the skill with which you constructed the write such skill should always be rewarded and hopefully your message will be inspirational. Congrad's Light & Love
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Date: 1/3/2012 1:08:00 AM
Happy New Year, Reason. Congrats on this very spiritual write. Love the info contained ...such a unique topic!! Gwendolen
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