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Our Moment In Time

With every tick our time alone gets shorter With every tick my heart for you beats stronger Stop the clock, prolong our time…

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Joy Wellington

Date: 9/8/2010 9:21:00 PM

This I can relate to....Mmmmm....That's the way it is Wilma, that darn clock! Joy

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/8/2010 2:04:00 AM

haha my you're really sticking to making me a scapegoat huh? lol ;) but hmmm like I said that headache's just brought about by lack of sleep-- haha Mr. Headache's sure having a field day! ;)

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 9/8/2010 1:03:00 AM

If only we could stop time, Wilma! Think of all the joyful days we could preserve forever. Very uplifting tanka, dear. Love, Carolyn

Hyle Chu

Date: 9/8/2010 12:09:00 AM

Time is fleeting and then it's gone. It sucks when you know time is running short. I'm not a fan of repetition, but lines 1 and 3 are strong in portraying the tick of time. I have a poem on time, too. I wanted to stop the clock also.

Ralph Taylor

Date: 9/7/2010 7:26:00 PM

Outstanding write, Wilma. Enjoyed. Nice going. xxxRalph

Constance La France

Date: 9/7/2010 6:40:00 PM

Thanks for commenting on my poetry, yes, Wilma, if we could just stop the clock, expecially when with the one we love~~ Love Constance

Sidney Hall Mad Poet

Date: 9/7/2010 6:40:00 PM

I stopped the clock and now you mine. Love your poems grilfriend

Matthew Anish

Date: 9/7/2010 1:58:00 PM

Nice use of the tanka form! Wish we could stop the clock but as Khayam said - "the moving finger writes and having writ moves on.." Peace & Blessings Matthew Anish

Michael J. Falotico

Date: 9/7/2010 1:52:00 PM

Hate to sound like a broken record, butbeen their too many times.... your heart is good and with that it shall shine ...luv Michael

James Fraser

Date: 9/7/2010 12:44:00 PM

Clever Tanka Wilma. Sometimes it would be so nice to stop the clock >> James

Sara Kendrick

Date: 9/7/2010 12:35:00 PM

Good to love someone and want to be with them so much that one wants time to stand still..Enjoyed reading your work such wonderful thoughts of love penned..Thanks for stopping by and commenting and letting me know that Spring is coming on your part of the world..Sara

Deb Wilson

Date: 9/7/2010 11:58:00 AM

Yes we all have moments we would like to make last..very nice tanka Wilma..Take care~Deb

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/7/2010 11:03:00 AM

Thank you, Ms. WilMa :) you are ever so kind :) just like my mom lol --you have to bear with me ok? I am awake yet again at 2am in the morning this is the super duper last comment with regards to that--haha the tadpole grew into a frog again--there- (yeah right) anyhow-- I wanted to thank you for your comments-- that was sort of inspired by a friend who got married ;) though tweaked some bits like she is not a fart...smart but definitely not a fart ;)

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 9/7/2010 8:47:00 AM

If only that were possible Wilma ... we all would do that ..stop time..but its out of our control..your words tell it well today... a very thought provoking piece of poetry my friend.. enjoyed with luv..

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 9/7/2010 7:22:00 AM

I LIKE this kind of poem, asking time to stop. You know I know how important that is to us both!! Luv, Andrea

Kabuteng P.Ink K.

Date: 9/7/2010 6:54:00 AM

Very meaningful tanka-- don't we all wish sometimes that we can just freeze time? Sorry I fell off the face of email earlier lol-- I had to eat my merienda cena :) haha what can I do? I needed brain food so I can write ;) now I am off yet again to eat some crab & corn soup haha (see what snacking does to me? I get hungry at weird intervals!!) --nikko :)