Our Love Turned Cold

OUR LOVE TURNED COLD

This fluff I pluck,
sew, trim and tuck.
I’m in a rush —
Now, man, do hush!

I’m tired and sick.
So stop it — quick!
Tell me you’ll miss
our time of bliss.

A fish you’ll catch —
our love won’t patch.
To doom your apt.
My mind is zapped.

I’d love to blush —
feel love’s red rush,
the hue of plum.
...I’ll gorge on rum!

O days your quest —
leaned on my breast…
Now, love, I race
to grab the mace.

Oh how we’d spoon
‘neath the blest moon,*
on the pink beach —
stars we can’t reach…

Missed days of sun,
ink from eyes run.
Long lines of prose.
Brrr..cold words froze.

Now we say bye.
Man, don’t you cry!
See, I’ve moved on.
This is no con.

2/1/2018
128 Words Contest
4 - 1 syllable words per line/32 lines
Sponsor: Silent One

*howmanysyllables.com  listing this line as 3 syllables but it is 4

Copyright © | Year Posted 2018



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Date: 2/27/2018 4:03:00 PM
Putting the slam down w/this amusing, gritty and oh, so down-to-earth poem, Kim. Such a cool poem ... Mesah like, mesah like it a lot ... a whole lot. Very creative poem, my talented friend. Love and joy always.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/27/2018 4:52:00 PM
Thanks so much, Freddie!
Date: 2/15/2018 10:32:00 PM
Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Kim - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/27/2018 4:52:00 PM
Thank you, Greg!
Date: 2/9/2018 3:35:00 PM
Congratulations Kim on your shared win!!! Wonderful entry !!! ~Judy
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/9/2018 3:57:00 PM
Thank you, Judy!
Date: 2/6/2018 10:40:00 AM
Ha! Love that ending ;) fabulous ink Kim, congratulations on your win! xomo
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/6/2018 5:09:00 PM
Thanks so much, Maureen!
Date: 2/6/2018 4:35:00 AM
Nicely written, Kim, congrats on your win. John
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/6/2018 6:12:00 AM
Thank you, John!
Date: 2/5/2018 6:17:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/5/2018 7:31:00 PM
Thank you, Agnes!
Date: 2/5/2018 10:45:00 AM
Wonderful write, Kim , congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/5/2018 10:54:00 AM
Thanks so much, Eve! Hugs...Kim
Date: 2/5/2018 6:00:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Kim, you are so talented, really enjoyed reading this well written poem. :))
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/5/2018 6:45:00 AM
I appreciate your comment, Roy! Thank you!
Date: 2/5/2018 12:38:00 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your fine win and first placement.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/5/2018 6:45:00 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Date: 2/4/2018 8:27:00 PM
A beautiful poem Kim with lovely rhythm and rhyme that smoothly sailed me through your wonderful lines. Congratulations on your excellent first place win. Warmest wishes ~Susan
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 8:30:00 PM
Thank you so much, Susan! Hugs...Kim
Date: 2/4/2018 7:29:00 PM
Congrats on a fine write and win Kim!~Che :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 7:47:00 PM
Thank you, Che! ...Kim
Date: 2/4/2018 5:32:00 PM
Congratulations for your win Kim. Well done :)
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 5:34:00 PM
Thanks, Heidi!
Date: 2/4/2018 5:08:00 PM
Congrats on your winning poem, Kim.
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 5:11:00 PM
Thank you, Line!
Date: 2/4/2018 5:06:00 PM
So well-written using the strict word rules, Kim. Congratulations on your 1st Place win. Hugs, Sandra
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 5:11:00 PM
Thank you, my friend! Hugs...Kim
Date: 2/4/2018 4:40:00 PM
Congratulations Kim , great work. Regards Tom
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 5:10:00 PM
Thank you, Tom!
Date: 2/4/2018 3:15:00 PM
This is just brilliant Kim, you have produced two fantastic poems for my last two contests, I actually though this one may have been by a differen poet, so you di dsurprise me.. You poem flows really, good rhyems also.. one slight improvement could be the rhyme in the last line, but that is just me being picky! Congratulations on your first place in the contest.. Loved the first stanza..
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Kim Rodrigues
Date: 2/4/2018 4:18:00 PM
So excited! Thank you so much, Silent! :) Kim
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