Our Love Turned Cold

OUR LOVE TURNED COLD

This fluff I pluck,
sew, trim and tuck.
I’m in a rush —
Now, man, do hush!

I’m tired and sick.
So stop it — quick!
Tell me you’ll miss
our time of bliss.

A fish you’ll catch —
our love won’t patch.
To doom your apt.
My mind is zapped.

I’d love to blush —
feel love’s red rush,
the hue of plum.
...I’ll gorge on rum!

O days your quest —
leaned on my breast…
Now, love, I race
to grab the mace.

Oh how we’d spoon
‘neath the blest moon,*
on the pink beach —
stars we can’t reach…

Missed days of sun,
ink from eyes run.
Long lines of prose.
Brrr..cold words froze.

Now we say bye.
Man, don’t you cry!
See, I’ve moved on.
This is no con.

2/1/2018
128 Words Contest
4 - 1 syllable words per line/32 lines
Sponsor: Silent One

*howmanysyllables.com  listing this line as 3 syllables but it is 4
Copyright © | Year Posted 2018

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Robinson Jr. Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 4:03 PM
Putting the slam down w/this amusing, gritty and oh, so down-to-earth poem, Kim. Such a cool poem ... Mesah like, mesah like it a lot ... a whole lot. Very creative poem, my talented friend. Love and joy always.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 4:52 PM
Thanks so much, Freddie!
Barden Avatar
February 15, 2018 at 10:32 PM
Sincere congratulations on your win in this VERY challenging form, Kim - blessings and congrats to you, my friend! :-)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 27, 2018 at 4:52 PM
Thank you, Greg!
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February 9, 2018 at 3:35 PM
Congratulations Kim on your shared win!!! Wonderful entry !!! ~Judy
Rodrigues Avatar
February 9, 2018 at 3:57 PM
Thank you, Judy!
Pigeon Tart Avatar
February 6, 2018 at 10:40 AM
Ha! Love that ending ;) fabulous ink Kim, congratulations on your win! xomo
Rodrigues Avatar
February 6, 2018 at 5:09 PM
Thanks so much, Maureen!
Gondolf Avatar
February 6, 2018 at 4:35 AM
Nicely written, Kim, congrats on your win. John
Rodrigues Avatar
February 6, 2018 at 6:12 AM
Thank you, John!
Krampe Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 6:17 PM
Congrats on your win, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 7:31 PM
Thank you, Agnes!
Roper Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 10:45 AM
Wonderful write, Kim , congratulations on your win! Hugs Eve
Rodrigues Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 10:54 AM
Thanks so much, Eve! Hugs...Kim
Pett Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 6:00 AM
Congratulations on your well deserved win Kim, you are so talented, really enjoyed reading this well written poem. :))
Rodrigues Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 6:45 AM
I appreciate your comment, Roy! Thank you!
Sinha-Roy Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 12:38 AM
Congratulations, Kim on your fine win and first placement.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 5, 2018 at 6:45 AM
Thank you, Subimal!
Ashley Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 8:27 PM
A beautiful poem Kim with lovely rhythm and rhyme that smoothly sailed me through your wonderful lines. Congratulations on your excellent first place win. Warmest wishes ~Susan
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 8:30 PM
Thank you so much, Susan! Hugs...Kim
Hoffman Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 7:29 PM
Congrats on a fine write and win Kim!~Che :)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 7:47 PM
Thank you, Che! ...Kim
Sands Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:32 PM
Congratulations for your win Kim. Well done :)
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:34 PM
Thanks, Heidi!
Gauthier Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:08 PM
Congrats on your winning poem, Kim.
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:11 PM
Thank you, Line!
Haight Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:06 PM
So well-written using the strict word rules, Kim. Congratulations on your 1st Place win. Hugs, Sandra
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:11 PM
Thank you, my friend! Hugs...Kim
Cunningham Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 4:40 PM
Congratulations Kim , great work. Regards Tom
Rodrigues Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 5:10 PM
Thank you, Tom!
One Avatar
February 4, 2018 at 3:15 PM
This is just brilliant Kim, you have produced two fantastic poems for my last two contests, I actually though this one may have been by a differen poet, so you di dsurprise me.. You poem flows really, good rhyems also.. one slight improvement could be the rhyme in the last line, but that is just me being picky! Congratulations on your first place in the contest.. Loved the first stanza..
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February 4, 2018 at 4:18 PM
So excited! Thank you so much, Silent! :) Kim
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