Our Finest Hours Have Passed

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[This poem, a TRIONET, is a poetry form I invented. It adds to the traditional Triolet a second stanza (of 6 lines similar to a 14-line Sonnet) repeating lines indicated in the rhyme scheme. The rhyme scheme is ABaAabAB AAABBb.]

My generation’s finest hours have passed
Now, I am afraid we are too old to lead
For the most part, our time was a blast
My generation’s finest hours have passed
Question is, how much longer can we last
Before the curtain rains down on our breed
My generation’s finest hours have passed
Now, I am afraid we are too old to lead.

My generation’s finest hours have passed
For the most part, our time was a blast
Question is, how much longer can we last
Before the curtain rains down on our breed
Now, I am afraid we are too old to lead
All we can do, perhaps, is plant a new seed.


SECOND PLACE WINNER
Written August 13, 2021
"Favorite August 2021 Rhyme" Contest
sponsored by Constance La France

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Michelle Faulkner

Date: 9/3/2021 10:31:00 AM

I really like the rhyme flow and the last line brings the message together wonderfully, congratulations on your win~

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/3/2021 11:02:00 AM

Thank you, Michelle, for your very kind and thoughtful comment on my poem.

Paris-Maree Boreham

Date: 9/3/2021 8:50:00 AM

Planting new seeds is exactly what we are naturally meant to do :) Great poem, Congratulations on your win !

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/3/2021 9:06:00 AM

Thank you so much, Paris-Maree, for your thoughtful comment.

Constance La France

Date: 9/2/2021 3:56:00 PM

Milt, wonderful and congratulations on your win in my contest ~ peace and tranquility _ Constance

L Milton Hankins
Date: 9/2/2021 4:08:00 PM

Thank you so much, Constance. I always feel so specially honored when I place in one of your contests. It's pretty special to me.

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 8/15/2021 3:44:00 AM

I do not think we are ever too old to lead, but the young often see us in this way so it makes sense for some. Not for others thank goodness!

L Milton Hankins
Date: 8/15/2021 10:08:00 AM

Yes. Mostly, I was thinking about me, Caren. I've reached that age where I feel there just isn't much I can do to change anything for the better. I try, and I think maybe my writing and poetry is about it.