Our Final Words Proclaimed

I remember you and the last line that we've played I remember your first whisper and our final words proclaimed I recall departing moments and the calling of my name I recall that night's farewell All has changed yet still the same Still too cold to feel the sun Still too warm to taste the rain Till the day I turn to dust Tell me who am I to blame Was it you or was it me Was it bitter destiny Was it unhealed scars and strife that has brought you in my arms to embrace both death and life Tell me who am I to blame Was it you or was it me Was it bitter destiny 'Pon that bench that We once sat Now I write your obituary.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2015

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Makama Avatar
June 4, 2015 at 9:57 AM
What a marvelous read from a blessed paged built on lines constructed with the lyrics of the skies and words well supported by dynamic foamy clouds. Message well expressed! No doubt an absolute 7##.
Goswami Avatar
May 28, 2015 at 11:04 PM
"Pon that bench that We once sat Now I write your obituary." Awesome!
Manassian Avatar
May 25, 2015 at 1:54 PM
OH sweetie....What a write. I think I've commented on this before, but just wanted to pass by and tell you, Miss you!!! :) This has your signature beauty, Charma. You are a beautiful person inside and out. Hugs
Dietrich Avatar
May 24, 2015 at 6:12 PM
oh MY, getting to that last line. SO sad, Charma. you led us to that part so deftly!! I really like this.
Callus Avatar
May 24, 2015 at 6:26 AM
Recalling a final encounter brings sadness and unanswered questions. A lovely and touching poem. // All the best. // paul
La France Avatar
May 23, 2015 at 6:32 PM
CharmaIne how utterly heart breaking, so sadly beautiful, amazing 7, and thanks for visiting my blitz poem
Onclaud Avatar
May 21, 2015 at 2:53 PM
hello, charms... been a while; had tech problems..i was struck by the languid and sad tone of this piece.. yet, so superbly composed!.. huggs
Martin Avatar
May 20, 2015 at 12:06 PM
Enjoyed this sad, but well-expressed poem! Liked metaphors also.
Sergi Avatar
May 18, 2015 at 9:53 AM
Hi Charmaine: Long time no see. A very intense poem that has inspired me to write a poem. Thank you
Leake Avatar
May 18, 2015 at 6:21 AM
A excellent piece again Charma, Your words just flow so nice Best Wishes Kevin
Vaso Avatar
May 17, 2015 at 10:14 AM
Charmaine this is so beautiful and touching, the last line gives the whole poem its beauty!
Goff Avatar
May 16, 2015 at 7:26 PM
Gently sweet...with considerable weight. ..nice, Char!
Pinet Avatar
May 15, 2015 at 11:09 AM
You have described well the pain and turmoil that accompanies the loss of a loved one. Words are sometimes few and far between when we need to express our grief. Good job. Emile. #7
Meade Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 8:17 PM
There is a fine line that separates life and death -- to embrace both at the same time is heartbreaking. a powerful poem that left me wondering -- a good poem that let's the imagination wrestle for answers. Light and love! 7
Dietrich Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 3:47 PM
hey, i rarely see you rhyme. Your rhythm is VERY nice, Charma. So lyrical this is!!
Tacito Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 3:35 PM
Goosebumps. This needs an acoustical riff. Absolutely touching. Also, hi. :) xo
Chircop Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:49 PM
Reply for Tim..Since the reply box sucks at times.I do miss both habits of writing without spacing.and not in the middle of the page..You might see some of my poems centered again...Since I dont have in mind to get them published..at least not yet.: )..Unless someone tells me to make use of my lyrics again... Tnks for believing in my poems.
Smith Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 3:29 PM
I like either way...I like mine centered. I don't plan on having them published either. To me it seems easier to read.
Manassian Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:26 PM
Charmaine....I like it when it's centered....I like YOU in your poetry. This is beautiful, indeed...yet, I miss the style of you. I feel it somehow different....workshop? ;) Lovely write. Hugs
Chircop Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:40 PM
No,no workshop here dear..I have put only one in workshop for now and it is now revised.The idea of writing at the side was in workshop fpr the other poem though..I really do need to get used to myself writing on the side of the page..But you might see some poems in the center once agsin : )..Tnks so much dear : )
Smith Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:13 PM
A beautiful poem Charma. Parting is such sweet sorrow. You will have always have those memories of that embrace locked deep in your heart...I do like the format on the left instead of the center but glad you doubled spaced because that is You....a favourite....hugs Tim
Allison Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:05 PM
such a beautiful flow to your sad words Charma:-) Hugs Jan xx
Merryman Avatar
May 14, 2015 at 2:01 PM
Charmaine, this is a lovely write. Flows smoothly with a melancholy feel. I enjoyed reading your poem today. Love, Kim
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