Our Dance, Must End

The lead you own; your charge I accept
Your feet lithe, my eyes mesmerized 
My joy suppressed, hope found
Your hand in mine, my dream alive. 
Points important, the moment more 
As you glide, my wonder is nourished
A spectator, a partner; my roles, both
Your delicate motions, I relish. 
Each step an accomplishment known
The first twirl, my fear shown
The second, aggravation grown
The beginning forgotten, but procrastination key
As the dip is done, my body is numbed
The end of an assessment; the loss of your grasp.
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Godwin Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 2:13 AM
I'm back because I love this poem and I'm too excited to shut up! I was thinking that if others react like me, mayhap it would serve to change your title. Then, yes - something else happened - I noticed you picked Sonnet and I'm not sure you have the conventional rhyme scheme that calls for - or the format. These are all 'trifling' suggestions that in no way suggest you should change / alter / or rethink the content. How cool it is to be noticed and praised right after posting? Wow again
Govender Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 2:38 AM
Thanks, I've always been critical of my choice of format. I think your words have offered me enough insight to know tht I need to do some research.
Godwin Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 2:03 AM
I love this, Keshan - because I forgot the title (which gives it away, obviously), the end was extra packed with poetic punch and it blew me away. I thought I was reading lovely lines about NEW LOVE and all its JOY, but, slam, bam - no, it literally hit me then, hard - meaning the shift in me from NEW LOVE to the pain of that first twirl you mentioned, the impact gave me goosebumps. Reading this again, then faving. You get a WOW from me. Don't know why I typed new love in all caps. CayCay
Govender Avatar
July 30, 2016 at 2:36 AM
Thank you soo much. Your comment gave me goosebumps.
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