Ordinary

he said, "I am an ordinary stone" ~
in one nocturnal rendezvous 
and vanished in sky's tenebrosity
before her hands could reach
to embrace him ~

a gentle gypsy wind
dulcified her dolesome heart
and set her to slumber

a shooting star arrowed 
in elegiac ebony evening~
and as she opened her eyes
she found a stone that dazzled
midst the darkest night behind her


10 May 2022


A Brian Srrand Premiere Choice Poetry Contest 
8th Place

lovemagicmysteryfree verse

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Mystic Rose Rose

August 4, 2022 at 2:27 PM

Your poetry is purely magical, thank you for softening my heart tonight

Susan Lawrence

July 22, 2022 at 10:35 AM

Wow lovely, luminous and so emotional in its expression JCB ! A belated congratulations on your win . So eloquent. I love it . Blessings, Susan :)

Ann Peck

June 10, 2022 at 8:18 AM

I love your poem, JCB ~ especially the first stanza, and your title is perfect.

Timothy Ray

June 8, 2022 at 1:07 PM

loved the language and the realization the ordinary has its deepest roots in the extraordinary....

Connie Marcum Wong

June 3, 2022 at 1:11 AM

Superb writing JBC! Your poetry always impresses my friend. I loved your ending in the spark of light you give her with these lines “she found a stone that dazzled midst the darkest night behind her”. Your talent shines bright on this poetry site. Almost forgot to congratulate you. Hugs, Connie xxoo

Paula Goldsmith

May 31, 2022 at 1:42 PM

Congratulations on your win. What a "Wonderful" story/write. Have a blessed day writing away....................

John Watt

May 29, 2022 at 11:06 PM

Beautiful poetic imagery, J. I love "in elegiac ebony evening~" so much. Congrats for your win, a Fave for me to enjoy over and over ~ John

Andrea Dietrich

May 19, 2022 at 8:53 AM

well, that is certain not ordinary! Splendid wordage!!

Heidi Sands

May 14, 2022 at 9:07 AM

Mysterious and beautiful. Well written :)

Valsa George

May 11, 2022 at 9:08 PM

This is nothing ordinary..... but coming close to "Excellent" ! Congratulations dear friend for our deserving win !

Sam Kauffman

May 10, 2022 at 10:02 AM

JCB, this is a verbal delight of images! Mystic and mystical! There is a powerful magic in your lines drawing me in to a gorgeous scene. Many congratulations on your win! This is a fav for me dear friend like a melody floating through my mind! Blessings!

JC Brul

May 10, 2022 at 2:24 PM

Thank you dear friend. Your warm appreciation is very inspiring enough and your fave? I am greatly overwhelmed and grateful. More power to you. ^JCB