Greg Gaul Poet Rhyme

Open One Ocean

Screams at an azure ocean
bounce back in waves to me.
Egos spill over with frustration
of wants never meant to be.

Let go of self-absorption
awake in epiphany.
Rise above the commotion
reach a new reality.

Oneness is revelation
life's persistent mystery.
Droplets see some solution
while water moves consciously.

Drops rush and roll in motion
as currents of harmony.
Waves find inner direction
melodies of reverie.

Fragile in nascent notion
bound by fearing fates are we.
Wishes seem a mystic potion
from which we will not be free.

Open to one grand mastery
droplets of the human sea.


12/2/19

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Christuraj Alex January 5, 2025 at 4:25 AM "Rise above the commotion reach a new reality" - A clarion call. Congratulations!

Sam Kauffman June 1, 2022 at 10:58 AM Oh Greg, this is a masterpiece of inspiration! I could not pick out one line to highlight as every one of them is a gem in itself! The ocean is a beautiful metaphor of oneness for all humanity - all mixed up in waves and tides! This is a fav for me. Congratulations on your win my friend.

Christuraj Alex June 1, 2022 at 4:39 AM "Wishes seem a mystic potion from which we will not be free" - Indeed, it's difficult to be free from wishes. Beautiful. Congratulations! Greg Gaul June 2, 2022 at 6:55 AM Interesting phrase selection you make here. Thanks for your poetic insight, one of your great gifts.

Unseeking Seeker June 1, 2022 at 1:17 AM So happy you shared this outstanding work of 2019 with us, Greg. Congrats on your win ~ seems it won in a contest back then too Greg Gaul June 2, 2022 at 6:57 AM Greatly appreciate your sentient contest and theme. Thank you for your award. This is the kind of thing we need to tbink more about and write about. Real poet's work.

William Kelii Kekaula October 3, 2020 at 3:46 PM The magic of our lives, Greg, underlies the fluid imagery you vividly outlined in your submission, admittedly, rereads had shone your pictorial insights, blessings on your honorable placement, Aloha! William Greg Gaul October 4, 2020 at 11:40 AM Thank you William for your cogent commentary and thanks for your hosting. Most appreciated.

Na Na December 10, 2019 at 2:39 PM congrats on your winning poem Greg Greg Gaul December 10, 2019 at 3:30 PM Greg, thanks so much. Appreciate your noticing. Be well.

Connie Marcum Wong December 10, 2019 at 12:57 PM Greg, this is really an excellent entry! I love your use of alliteration in this piece. It caused your rhyme to flow flawlessly. Bravo and congratulations on your deserving win! : ) Greg Gaul December 10, 2019 at 1:15 PM Connie, your visits are so helpful and aware. Alliteration is a technique I've been working on and I thank you for noticing. You know your stuff. I'm lucky to call you friend.

Greg Hladky December 10, 2019 at 12:09 PM I like where you went with this poem. We stand as part of nature, not apart from it. Congratulations.

Lin Lane December 10, 2019 at 11:43 AM Very well written, Greg. First time reading you, but not the last. Greg Gaul December 10, 2019 at 12:09 PM Thank you Lin for the visit and the fine remark. Most appreciated.

Connie Marcum Wong December 4, 2019 at 4:39 AM One may speak to the sea and then in silence receive answers brought forth by the stillness of the mind. Sage, advice in this insightful poem Greg. Lovely! xxoo Greg Gaul December 4, 2019 at 8:44 AM I most appreciate your visits Connie. But you must know in all honesty, I have little idea of what I'm doing. Nonetheless, I love hearing your thoughts.