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I lived ... once
I loved and laughed and ached from my marrow
I spoke my soul, and spun my mind to my innervation and impulse
Swam up spirits to the source of their dreams and passions

I moved and breathed and thrived
Slept and soared and savored the tang of carnality
Counted my chaos, and measured my occupations with desire
I danced with angels, dazzled and dark and unearthly

And I sang to the heavens in their wildest weeping
With a voice of callow intonation ... and melodious temper
ALL with a child's heart, and a saint's assumption
Yes, I lived ... once

Full and bright and joyous as a midday meadow
Yet, in the midst of a moment's suffering
A soft, stinging moment of false hope and agony
I pressed, tender, the lips of a curse ...

One deep, warm, melting kiss of a temptress
That turned to a coursing ... of poison
"You will write with such feeling," she whispered, eyes smiling
As the glass between us fogged with her bitter breath

A painted fingertip, shaped and pressed
Tracing my doom in the opaque mist
Oh, vile brutality - to gift me this insight and creativity
Only to shake it ALL from my grasp ...

And turn me ... to dust.





~ 10th Place ~  in the "Opaque" Poetry Contest, Anthony Slausin, Judge & Sponsor.

Copyright © | Year Posted 2019



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Date: 11/29/2019 12:01:00 AM
Congrats on your winning poem Greg
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Date: 11/28/2019 9:05:00 AM
Beautiful writing, my friend. Congrats on Anthony's winners' list. This is so creative!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 11/28/2019 9:07:00 AM
Thank you so much, Andrea - much appreciated.
Date: 8/14/2019 9:30:00 AM
Callow intonation...melodious temper, my, my, you are the master of word choices, how do you keep finding these gems, feels like inspiration to me!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2019 6:39:00 PM
Thank you so very much, John, I'm happy that you enjoyed this one ... blessings to you, Dear Friend! :o)
Date: 8/13/2019 9:13:00 PM
Great poetry my friend. Yes, the curse and its unfathomable appearance merely reflects the insidious darkness that dwells in humanity..... I that have ate of its accursed heart* Wandered blindly in its dusty plains* Found a true light to this wisdom impart* Little of worth comes without sacrifice pains*...... A fav-- a fre verse gem you have given us..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2019 6:38:00 PM
Oh, what a gorgeous and heartfelt comment, Sir Robert - I love this little verse that encapsulates! Blessings and kind thanks to you, Brother! :o)
Date: 8/13/2019 2:54:00 PM
The impassioned heart suffers much. Another poem of depth to enjoy and contemplate Greg. I loved your ending! xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2019 6:37:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Connie, I'm pleased you liked this one! Blessings, Dear Poet! :o) <3
Date: 8/13/2019 9:54:00 AM
How do you do it? I am enamored. A fav for me.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2019 6:35:00 PM
Oh, many kind thanks to you, Sunlite, this means a lot to me, Friend! :o) <3
Date: 8/13/2019 9:23:00 AM
Powerful images and smooth flowing words! Your poem is excellent, Greg! Blessings, Kim
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/1/2019 6:35:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim - blessings to you! :o) <3
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