Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart Poet Free verse

Onus

Saddled with this task
burden
beast
of razor colour scheme
years of crumbled paint
the dust in lungs
a poisoned dream
still clinging
holding breath
to clear the air
between the stitches of a seam

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Patricia Cresswell September 1, 2017 at 8:17 AM I have not been able to figure it out as yet. One thing is sure it has made me darn uncomfortable to read this poem Sosomewhere inside me it is jangling. Be back to read again.

Dominic Amezimi May 8, 2017 at 4:39 PM I was lost at first, but the moment i figured the poem, a lot of work was done to hold one overly forward teardrop back. Keep writing these short 'books'. Cheers M! Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart May 8, 2017 at 5:35 PM Aye, and a teardrop near produced as I read your generous comment, a lump in my throat; thank you dear D. xomo!

Darren White April 26, 2017 at 12:30 AM Ma mo, this reads like a painting! You can read in it what you like, but in the end it's not a pleasant picture that it paints in my mind Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 26, 2017 at 6:19 AM Thanks Darren :) i'm glad the feeling is conveyed. It stems from the relationship with my mother, trying to rectify it in the end, she was a seamstress...

Emile Pinet April 24, 2017 at 5:30 PM I felt the words as well as read them and they are powerful, Great Job! Emile. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 25, 2017 at 6:26 AM Thank you Emile :) have a wonderful day! xomo

Charlotte Puddifoot April 4, 2017 at 8:15 AM i'm not always a fan of short pieces, but when they're written like this...i would love to see something like this in a contest of mine (hint hint lol)...and thank you for commenting on my work Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 4, 2017 at 10:50 AM Why Thank You Charlotte! Will keep a look out... ;) xomo!

Laura Leiser April 3, 2017 at 11:05 PM Very creative expressions of angst is a few well chosen words, Maureen. I really liked this one. :) Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 4, 2017 at 7:00 AM Poets do do melodramatics best :) thanks Laura! :)

Chris Green April 3, 2017 at 5:24 PM Very abstract and deep Maureen. This is a tense piece expressing angst at a situation that seems ongoing. Nicely done my friend. Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart April 4, 2017 at 6:59 AM Thank you Chris :)