Onus

Saddled with this task
burden
beast
of razor colour scheme
years of crumbled paint
the dust in lungs
a poisoned dream
still clinging
holding breath
to clear the air
between the stitches of a seam

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Patricia Cresswell

Date: 9/1/2017 8:17:00 AM

I have not been able to figure it out as yet. One thing is sure it has made me darn uncomfortable to read this poem Sosomewhere inside me it is jangling. Be back to read again.

Dominic Amezimi

Date: 5/8/2017 4:39:00 PM

I was lost at first, but the moment i figured the poem, a lot of work was done to hold one overly forward teardrop back. Keep writing these short 'books'. Cheers M!

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 5/8/2017 5:35:00 PM

Aye, and a teardrop near produced as I read your generous comment, a lump in my throat; thank you dear D. xomo!

Darren White

Date: 4/26/2017 12:30:00 AM

Ma mo, this reads like a painting! You can read in it what you like, but in the end it's not a pleasant picture that it paints in my mind

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 4/26/2017 6:19:00 AM

Thanks Darren :) i'm glad the feeling is conveyed. It stems from the relationship with my mother, trying to rectify it in the end, she was a seamstress...

Emile Pinet

Date: 4/24/2017 5:30:00 PM

I felt the words as well as read them and they are powerful, Great Job! Emile.

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 4/25/2017 6:26:00 AM

Thank you Emile :) have a wonderful day! xomo

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 4/4/2017 8:15:00 AM

i'm not always a fan of short pieces, but when they're written like this...i would love to see something like this in a contest of mine (hint hint lol)...and thank you for commenting on my work

Maureen McGreavy Pigeon Tart
Date: 4/4/2017 10:50:00 AM

Why Thank You Charlotte! Will keep a look out... ;) xomo!