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The crowbar rattled at the clattering noise, In the yard, against the hulls and hoys, A Cloud of tar smoke rose through the green, Large oil slicks floating on the lake sheen. Inconsistent hills throughout the landscape, The sunlight was a deep purple color shape, Similar to the finishes of Florentine bronze, That's it for the day, no real swans. Overwhelming sadness now needs our song, From death, an awful lot of sadness sprung, What type of tears? What heart's grief arrest, What sighs on sighs lobs the mom's breast? With faint homes to brilliant ethereal light, The enchanted guiltless has taken flight, On the liberal bosom of undying love, We find a concealed elevation above. Warden, I realize you both mourn her loss, She no longer feels the hold of pain across, The regulations of elegance are without bias, You can turn your pain into grace and praise. The dread of the interminable assault, The arrival of gizmos has long been sought, All these notions had a major effect on history, Each was a frightening age-related mystery. The attack on slavery was nonsense, Designed to hide the ambitions for pretense, Never before has a tiny beast attacked so hard, It just bites its horns and hides with its tiny shard. Thoughts on webcasts, phone calls, Facebook, Rising vitality contains attacks and an ebook, Both were made by teenagers in their twenties Bounty drives and precious realities. Do not shed tears in the flowing river, No real pain in the dark pits to deliver, The first light was magnificently bright, It was soon covered by the haze of the night. This eliminates spontaneity, love, and anxiety, It steals time and hides physical and moral piety, Concept, politics, creation, and profit come first, A blitzing slave was a lie to hide the curst.
1st Place Contest Winner Written: September 08, 2022 Pick-A-Title, Vol 32 - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Edward Ibeh

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Date: 10/17/2022 5:15:00 AM
What a powerful, superb piece, Lasaad:-) Heartiest congratulations on your top win in my contest!
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Date: 10/17/2022 7:00:00 AM
Thank you so much, Edward. Appreciate your comment as well as reading evaluating and placing my poem among the top list of your contest. It's really appreciated.
Date: 10/14/2022 8:25:00 PM
'You can turn your pain into grace and praise'..... Yes, there is so much of misery in the world and this is the most valid message anyone can give. Powerful analysis and a wonderful entry ! Congratulations on your First place win dear friend.
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Date: 9/11/2022 11:56:00 AM
A sublime poem well written, seems to be about wars, social media and more wow! Kudos for the great muse! Plz also read and comment my newest poem too.
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Date: 9/11/2022 8:08:00 AM
Passionate well written poem, Lasaad. I feel the pain from the turmoil war causes inside a person. Thanks for sharing your thoughts through your exquisite poetry my dear friend. I read below of your challenges and will pray for strength and healing for you. Soup mail me if there's anything I can do to help. Prayers ~ Blessings Bill
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Date: 9/11/2022 7:05:00 AM
Lasaad I saw your comment to Victor hope you are coping and will get through my friend. I will definitely pray for you. If you want to share more please send me a Soup mail and I will make in effort in getting all to pray. God bless you Lasaad and heal you...
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Date: 9/10/2022 11:38:00 PM
A fabulous poem that all should read, my dearest friend, Lasaad! If only we could learn! A FAVE! Blessings!
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Date: 9/8/2022 8:03:00 PM
Humanity is confronted by the onslaught of pain through different causes ! You have given full justice to the theme ! Profound and piercing ! All the best in the contest dear Lasaad!
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Date: 9/8/2022 1:30:00 PM
The dread of assault pings throughout your poem, Lasaad. Best to you.
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Date: 9/8/2022 1:18:00 PM
Fabulous poem of onslaught. Great entry Lasaad! Linda
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Date: 9/8/2022 11:53:00 AM
Several examples of onslaught. Grealy examples expanded with great images. Hope you're well.
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Date: 9/8/2022 2:18:00 PM
I am grateful to you for the warm sentiments, Victor. The road to recovery is going to be a little bit more challenging. Thanks

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