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No stars tonight, yet eyes transcend towards bright moonlight. Oh Moon, without words, we converse in lone quiet moonlight. Angst of two hearts apart, shows in somber persona, spirit fears her vision will fade with benight moonlight. Untouched unique pearls searching for an oyster retreat. Hoping fate is kind, before the sight of slight moonlight. A path of thorns has grown upon my beloved's trail, guide my soul, so lips reunite in twilight moonlight. Shy stars shall shower her in sacred specks of stardust. Bring her into my arms and we will ignite moonlight. Heart has no desire to dwell in deception of dawn. Our bond is stronger in mystical midnight moonlight.  Silent One, craves to see moonlight reflect in her eyes. In distance, our yearnings, fragrantly invite moonlight. The Silent One 26 August 2020 There are different definitions for a Ghazal, and different interpretations of the from. Ghazal poetry is poetry of longing. Traditionally, the ghazal tended to focus on unattainable love, often illicit, or sometimes on metaphysical questions. But, today, the ghazal has broadened to touch many types of longing and loss. The ghazal is a form poem that uses the art of rhyme and repetition. As it is originally a Persian form and the Indian subcontinet, the refrain and rhyme can be lost when translated to English, as is the meter. Although mine is not perfect meter, I did stick to thirteen syllables. How to Write a Ghazal 1. Number your poem stanzas from 1-5, to make sure you meet the minimum of 5 stanzas. You could go as high as 15. But maybe start out slowly. 2. Each stanza will include two lines (a couplet) 3. Each couplet should be able to stand alone, as if it were its own poem. In some ways, this is good news, because you don’t have to be responsible for creating a narrative. 4. Every line is traditionally the same length (English writers are forgiven this task) 5. In the first line of the last couplet, the extroverted poet gets to insert him or herself. Fun, if you are the type! Call yourself by first name and see how it feels to live in a poem. Here’s a sample from an Agha Shahid Ali poem (bold added for teaching purposes): And I, Shahid, only am escaped to tell thee– God sobs in my arms. Call me Ishmael tonight. A) The first couplet ends with the same word. B) The first couplet introduces a rhyme *inside* the lines, right before the final word C) The end word will now repeat at the end of every *second* line of the rest of the couplets

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Date: 11/7/2020 8:23:00 PM
Your imagery is exquisite and the poem is infused with romance, Silent One. A wonderful ghazal! :) Evelyn
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Silent One
Date: 11/8/2020 5:07:00 AM
Thank you..
Date: 9/15/2020 10:52:00 AM
Romantico-You have a unique way when it comes to Romance.
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Silent One
Date: 11/8/2020 5:07:00 AM
Thank you..
Date: 9/14/2020 2:12:00 PM
Since you inserted your name in the last couplet, does that make you and extroverted poet? Love both of your Ghazal examples, SO. Hope I can get one done before your contest closes ~ John
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Date: 9/11/2020 11:45:00 PM
Read both your poems earlier and forgot to leave a comment... excellent examples.
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Date: 9/7/2020 2:29:00 PM
The moon will always be one of the most important inspiring things around poets. Lucky are those who can write more and more when they look at it.
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Date: 9/5/2020 7:55:00 PM
Thanks for the example of Ghazal and showing us what to do with this form. Always awesome writes from you. love phyl
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Date: 9/4/2020 2:28:00 PM
ahhh, so lovely, Silent One. Another wonderful ghazal sample for us.
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Date: 9/3/2020 8:12:00 AM
Bright perfect ending lines..:-) Enjoyed reading Ghazals.But I haven't tried it anytime. Thankyou for sharing this beautiful example & motivating us to write new forms. I will try it soon.:-) You are an inspiring and encouraging sponsor whom I admire a lot. Have a beautiful day.Take care.Warm regards.
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Date: 9/3/2020 5:53:00 AM
Indebted to you for teaching such a beautiful form of poetry. Made one today, thoroughly enjoyed it. Thanks to all the pains that you take to teach new forms, my knowledge of poetry had really increased. Take care. Warm regards, Rama
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Date: 9/1/2020 2:46:00 AM
Wow! Thanks for sharing these: the message, the form, the way to write it. God bless you.
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Date: 8/30/2020 3:19:00 PM
I know I have written a few in the past and i hope I did them correctly. Loved your examples And this one is so romantic.
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Silent One
Date: 8/30/2020 3:26:00 PM
Thank you
Date: 8/30/2020 4:05:00 AM
In India ghazal is one of the most lovable form of poetry. I love ghazal so much that I always read & listen it.Most of the time I remember some couplet & speak it to my every family member & friends , & so they run away from me :)..this is first time that I am reading ghazal in english and is sooo beautiful. I wish I could participate in your contest in Hindi/urdu.But still I'm very excited to participate & i will try my best in english.Thank you for sharing information about writing ghazal :)
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Silent One
Date: 8/30/2020 11:01:00 AM
Yes they are very popular in the subcontinent.. I am glad you liked it... Thank you
Date: 8/29/2020 11:54:00 PM
Lovely, and I can feel the longing. Have to try this form! Regards // paul
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Silent One
Date: 8/30/2020 11:01:00 AM
Thank you Paul..
Date: 8/29/2020 12:45:00 PM
Stars, moonlight, longing, a definite recipe for romancing and loving. Great poem Silent One, perhaps a bit ambitious for me. Blessings and hugs, Jennifer.
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Silent One
Date: 8/30/2020 11:01:00 AM
I am sure you would do it perfectly well... Thank you
Date: 8/29/2020 10:09:00 AM
I love this form,, may be because we have really classical Ghazals in urdu language. And writing a ghazal in urdu is quite difficult thing. I am sure same will be the case with English Ghazals. (you poets would certainly know better). Anyway you wrote it quite well, like all of your poems, I enjoyed reading it.
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 10:43:00 AM
Thank you, yes the Urdu and Persian forms are the real ghazals...
Date: 8/28/2020 11:46:00 PM
Nicely done friend... even you have your alias there... I am glad you wrote the instruction for writing Ghazal... All the best...
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:31:00 AM
A great compliment coming from you, as I know you write so many.. thank you
Date: 8/27/2020 3:36:00 AM
Your way of expressing your emotions lingers through my very depth of soul.
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:29:00 AM
Thank you Mandy..
Date: 8/26/2020 11:17:00 PM
The moon is always a great inspiration for poets and lovers, this doesnt look too easy to compose, one ive never heard of. Tom
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:28:00 AM
Thank you Tom... You should give it a try..
Date: 8/26/2020 8:28:00 PM
In the moonlight, many emotions linger. This statement holds me so close. "to see moonlight reflect in her eyes" I can feel the longing within. This is beautiful and tender all at the same time. ~ Brandy
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:26:00 AM
Thank you Brandy...
Date: 8/26/2020 6:38:00 PM
You were taking it so easy on everyone in the Contests, as I'm assuming this could be an upcoming one hosted by you. Ghazal sounds like flying to the moon tomorrow - pardon use of moon again. ' Shy stars' line is so vivid. Rich and beautiful in your renowned way.
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:17:00 AM
Yes, you are right, I was... I look forward to some great ghazals.. Thank you.
Date: 8/26/2020 6:28:00 PM
Love the poetry, as for the form, not easy but worth a try..
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:25:00 AM
I am sure you will master it.. Thank you Harry..
Date: 8/26/2020 6:14:00 PM
I remember struggling with the ghazal form when I started exploring poetry forms...I like the moonlight refrain and esp. love your 'shy stars...' line. Nice one :)
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:25:00 AM
I think you could do it very well.. all about have a good refrain and rhyme system... Thank you
Date: 8/26/2020 2:24:00 PM
An effort worthy of praise Silent One. It, to say the least is a challenge to write. The Moon listens to us hurtful souls. Stay well my friend...
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:23:00 AM
Indeed the moon is there for all.. Thank you Michael.
Date: 8/26/2020 1:17:00 PM
Beautifully worded with so much feeling. Lovely. God Bless, JB The poem you asked about was a prompt poetry contest by Line Gauthier
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:22:00 AM
Thank you Judy
Date: 8/26/2020 10:54:00 AM
Beautiful expression of longing in this intriguing poetic form, SO. Thank you for the poetry and the instructions for writing a good Ghazal. I shall have to attempt it sometime soon. Enjoyed your alliterations in lines 9 and 11. Lovely. ~ John
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Silent One
Date: 8/29/2020 4:18:00 AM
Thank you John, I am sure you will be able to write a very good one...
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