Onion Breath

Got me a burger with raw onion piled high
A super-sized soda and a sack of french fries
Stomach starts to chirp
So let out a burp
An odor starts to linger like I was bout to die

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Paul Callus

Date: 6/1/2015 8:08:00 AM

Enjoyable Limerick, Tim:) I love onions and garlic; cooking them solves odour problems...for the victims! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/30/2015 1:42:00 AM

Ewwww. But they sure are good going down!!!

Arthur Vaso

Date: 5/29/2015 11:59:00 PM

sadly this is not a poem, is NON fiction, and about me!!!!!! :)

James Fraser

Date: 5/29/2015 4:25:00 PM

Made me smile Tim, funny one, and yes burping is a sign of appreciation in some countries, including Japan, James :)

Tim Smith
Date: 5/29/2015 4:27:00 PM

Thanks James....that is good to know...next time I'm over be forewarned : )

David Meade

Date: 5/29/2015 3:29:00 PM

I had an aunt and uncle that burped after every meal -- they told me it was a sign of a good meal. Your limerick was outstanding because I could visualize and smell each line!! well done friend. 7

Tim Smith
Date: 5/29/2015 3:49:00 PM

I have heard that as well David....rumor had it was an old Japanese custom to burp as a sign of gratitude to the cook

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 5/29/2015 3:00:00 PM

Just kiss your girl before the burp : )...lol ! Funny this is,..yuyks.

Tim Smith
Date: 5/29/2015 3:03:00 PM

I think that is a good idea Charmu....just hope she wasn't eating garlic : ).....hugs Tim

Neva Romaine

Date: 5/29/2015 10:26:00 AM

Hey Tim, stopped by for a visit. This is a mouth watering delight for the serious burger lovers. Hopefully the girl likes the onions too! A delightful piece. Be Blessed, Neva

Tim Smith
Date: 5/29/2015 1:19:00 PM

Thanks Nova

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 5/28/2015 11:29:00 PM

G'day Tim... it sounds like you might skunks out of business. Thanks for the chuckle mate - Lindsay

Tim Smith
Date: 5/28/2015 11:40:00 PM

That I may....hope it keeps the boss at bay here at work... Lol

Paul Schneiter

Date: 5/28/2015 11:18:00 PM

Tim, just as I predicted, you worked magic with the "onion breath" topic. Such fun! And you dedicated it to me. Even more fun! Thank you, thank you.

Tim Smith
Date: 5/28/2015 11:39:00 PM

Thanks for the inspiration my friend