Onion Breath

Got me a burger with raw onion piled high
A super-sized soda and a sack of french fries
Stomach starts to chirp
So let out a burp
An odor starts to linger like I was bout to die

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Paul Callus

June 1, 2015 at 8:08 AM

Enjoyable Limerick, Tim:) I love onions and garlic; cooking them solves odour problems...for the victims! // paul

Andrea Dietrich

May 30, 2015 at 1:42 AM

Ewwww. But they sure are good going down!!!

Arthur Vaso

May 29, 2015 at 11:59 PM

sadly this is not a poem, is NON fiction, and about me!!!!!! :)

James Fraser

May 29, 2015 at 4:25 PM

Made me smile Tim, funny one, and yes burping is a sign of appreciation in some countries, including Japan, James :)

Tim Smith

May 29, 2015 at 4:27 PM

Thanks James....that is good to know...next time I'm over be forewarned : )

David Meade

May 29, 2015 at 3:29 PM

I had an aunt and uncle that burped after every meal -- they told me it was a sign of a good meal. Your limerick was outstanding because I could visualize and smell each line!! well done friend. 7

Tim Smith

May 29, 2015 at 3:49 PM

I have heard that as well David....rumor had it was an old Japanese custom to burp as a sign of gratitude to the cook

Charmaine Chircop

May 29, 2015 at 3:00 PM

Just kiss your girl before the burp : )...lol ! Funny this is,..yuyks.

Tim Smith

May 29, 2015 at 3:03 PM

I think that is a good idea Charmu....just hope she wasn't eating garlic : ).....hugs Tim

Neva Romaine

May 29, 2015 at 10:26 AM

Hey Tim, stopped by for a visit. This is a mouth watering delight for the serious burger lovers. Hopefully the girl likes the onions too! A delightful piece. Be Blessed, Neva

Tim Smith

May 29, 2015 at 1:19 PM

Thanks Nova