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For the Musings Of Love Poetry Contest of Ink Empress

Long ago, there came to the garden in which I’d been planted a stranger who admired me in the spring of my life. Tall was he; dark and gorgeous too. He kept visiting my garden spot while singling me out from the other lovely blossoms surrounding me and who also called this large garden their home. Sweet words he whispered through the garden fence. His words became the susurration of the almost daily breezes which he brought with him to caress my petaled face. As he became less a stranger, I longed more and more each day to see him watching me outside the garden’s fence which protected me from strangers, or so I thought . . . One day this handsome man flung open the gate to the garden. Taking me by surprise, he strode right up to me and stroked my blushing cheek. Unaccustomed to unsolicited attention such as his, I could do no more than stay posed there as always, trembling all the way to the bottom of my stem. Simply catching a glimpse of him became all that I was living for that spring. And although my soul was bursting with poetry, I knew my role as a fenced-in rose. Unable to voice my thoughts to him, I could only bask in the warmth of his amazing gaze, which eventually I noticed being cast upon other flowers too. Toward the end of that short spring season, my spirit began to wilt, for I knew that this man would be passing by no longer. Here I stand as usual in my garden space, for always I grow back, blooming again and again. Many springs have come and gone as well as some of my flower friends I used to know. Others have withered away forever. I too will wither away when only God can say, and the handsome man my soul once yearned for is but a melancholy memory of unrequited love, which more importantly, I can look back on and realize was not real love at all.

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Date: 2/22/2024 3:39:00 PM
Dear Andrea, Your poem unfolds like a delicate dance of emotions, each word a petal in the garden of your experience. The words of longing and unrequited love captures the bittersweet essence of human connections. Your reflection on the passage of time and the ephemeral nature of relationships evokes a sense of contemplation. Through your verses, you’ve a story of resilience and self-discovery. This i a beautifully crafted piece. - Blessings, Daniel
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Date: 2/20/2024 9:07:00 AM
I shy away from long poems, but once starting to read yours, I wished it would go on longer. A captivating story of first love, locked in memory. The way you told the story Andrea was unique and positively captivating. Such a well deserved first place.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/20/2024 1:13:00 PM
thanks, dear. It was not a first love, but one of several huge crushes I'd had in my younger days. This one just happened to be a married man and he was keeping it secret from everyone.
Date: 2/20/2024 6:03:00 AM
This is so beautiful and amazing and filled with wonder - wonderful. Love this so, dear Andrea. It's a blessing to my soul, a promise of the garden's joy, the whisper of a hope... oh, what joy your poem brings to those who love to garden, those who love the blooms that penetrate, not only the dark earth, but the dreams and the thoughts, the breathless heart,... love this so. Congrats, and God bless you and much love to you, Gina
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/20/2024 1:14:00 PM
thanks so much, Gina
Date: 2/20/2024 5:24:00 AM
Dear andrea, i felt the depth of emotions woven throughout this poetic tale, so well delivered. Brilliant personification, and so descriptive too. Unrequited love, youv expressed in such eloquence in such a unique manner. I especially love the way youv phrased your thoughts here, i think sometimes as time goes by so many look back and reminisce such moments, one that made a rose feel more fragrant than the rest , to be left, feeling like it was just a dream.congratulations on your win. Thank you
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/20/2024 1:14:00 PM
thanks so much for my placement. i really enjoyed writing about this.
Date: 2/14/2024 5:05:00 PM
Poor bloom. I hope she still can blossom again.
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Date: 2/12/2024 9:28:00 PM
Nice entry for the contest, Andrea, a lovely personification poem. A very smart flower to live so long and still value the lessons learned season to season. Smiles ~ Blessings, my dear friend. Big Hugs, Bill
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/12/2024 11:14:00 PM
Thanks, Bill.
Date: 2/11/2024 10:54:00 AM
Reads like a good contender for the contest to me. Way to go. Poor rose, I wonder did she quit blooming. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my pages. Sara K
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/20/2024 1:15:00 PM
for real!!
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/12/2024 8:33:00 AM
Andrea, I will be 79 soon and have health problems so I understand. It is hard for me to stay up on my feet because of spinal problems and also because of my heart condition. Life is not always easy. Sara
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/12/2024 7:35:00 AM
This rose only feels good sitting down
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Sara Kendrick
Date: 2/12/2024 3:48:00 AM
Life can be hard on a rose, but there is always a renewal coming. Slow down a little and enjoy each day. Sara K
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/11/2024 1:29:00 PM
No she is alive and well and getting old.
Date: 2/11/2024 9:21:00 AM
Job well done! You have described something not love, but the feelings that come over us at times. How do we get this straight? It takes experience indeed!
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/12/2024 7:34:00 AM
It is weird when a really cute person hits on you and tries to wear you down. It's flattering but one has to be controlled
Date: 2/11/2024 12:31:00 AM
Really love this one special Andrea. Starts out so cheery. It's sweet how you describe being the favorite blossom in the garden and that he "caress your petal face." Then trembling, then helpless. then melancholy. The end of the last sentence was sadder than I expected, more sorrow than sadness... Had to look up susurration :) first stanza, and . Then, more glike how you were the special
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/11/2024 9:34:00 AM
Nothing to be sorry for. Glad you like this. It sure was a spring to remember
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Robert Schatz
Date: 2/11/2024 12:35:00 AM
(Sorry about the thought remnants at the end.)
Date: 2/10/2024 9:57:00 PM
Hello Andrea,this is excellent poem! Good luck in the contest.Andrea Blessings
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/10/2024 11:25:00 PM
Thanks, Mulu
Date: 2/10/2024 9:48:00 PM
Gosh, dear Andrea, this one was such a rollercoaster ride, when bliss of affection reached its happiest place, but it proved to be a fleeting moment, forever remaining as a wistful memory in the name of unrequited love.This write made me feel so many emotions, swirling through vulnerability and feelings.Your descriptions are absolutely stunning and breathtaking, one can actually envision the scene moving in front of the eyes.So beautifully done! Loved reading this, a FAV! Best wishes for contest
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/10/2024 11:26:00 PM
Thanks so much. It is a heartfelt poem of mine so I appreciate that
Date: 2/10/2024 6:42:00 PM
Wow this is creative and beautiful! I love the personification and your word choices kept me engaged until the end! Good luck in the contest.
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Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/10/2024 11:26:00 PM
Thanks, Karen

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