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One old man slouched down with his worn bent-brimmed hat Wrinkled face covered, asleep in reverie Comfortable in his enclosed habitat Across his boney chest, hands so leathery Body now bone, shriveled, which once stored-up fat In his daydreams and REM dreams a treasury Memories of those youthful accomplishments Carry him on to future's astonishments Date: 9/23/2022 Contest: Ottava Rima Sponsor: L. Milton Hankins Checked with syllablecounter.net Checked with Grammar Checker on soup

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Unseeking Seeker

Date: 10/6/2022 6:15:00 PM

Oh wow! Age has diminished not, his vibrant aliveness! Superb write, Sara. Congrats on your win!

Beata Agustin

Date: 10/4/2022 4:28:00 AM

Congrats! Thanks for sharing this... a vivid presentation ... exposed by your awesome poetic style. God bless you.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/4/2022 6:50:00 AM

Beata, Thanks for dropping by with congratulations. I need all the blessings I can get to just get by each day. Sara

Valsa George

Date: 10/3/2022 8:41:00 AM

Live portrait of a withering old man ! Congratulations on your win Sara.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/3/2022 1:24:00 PM

Thank you, Valsa. I am glad you see it as a portrait. Sara

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 10/3/2022 7:25:00 AM

Back with big congratulations on your win Sara! Linda

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/3/2022 1:23:00 PM

Thank you, Linda. I appreciate you taking the time to stop by again. Sara

Susan Ashley

Date: 10/2/2022 6:32:00 PM

Dear Sara, such a moving and intimate portrayal of “one old man”. Beautifully composed with vivid and emotive imagery. Congratulations for your excellent win in Milt’s contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/3/2022 1:23:00 PM

Why, thank you, Susan. I appreciate the kind review. Sara

Janice Canerdy

Date: 10/2/2022 11:34:00 AM

Very touching piece, Sara. CONGRATS on your win. Janice

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/3/2022 1:22:00 PM

I appreciate the visit with congratulations. Sara

L Milton Hankins

Date: 10/2/2022 10:26:00 AM

Congratulations, Sara, on your placement in my Ottava Rima contest. I really enjoyed your poem, so descriptive, so well-written. Nice work!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 10/3/2022 1:21:00 PM

Thank you, Milton for stopping by with congratulations and let me know that I placed. Sara

Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 9/24/2022 11:54:00 AM

Gotta love this old guy Sara. As they say, Growing old ain't for sissies! Linda

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 12:50:00 PM

Linda, I totally agree that we have to be strong to keep on keeping on. Thanks for the visits. Sara

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 9/24/2022 11:44:00 AM

He carries that young man inside though his body is spent. Good one, Sara!

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 12:50:00 PM

Kim, Yes, he does. Thank you for the nice review. We all carry our youth plus other aspects of our life within us. Sara

Sotto Poet

Date: 9/24/2022 7:51:00 AM

Sara, you have captured an accurate resemblance of an elderly man in this painting. The effects of age are undeniable, but they also bring about important shifts in mindset.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 8:35:00 AM

Lasaad, From our point of view, we see that we have to change and desire for it to be for the best so that what is left of life will be even better than the first part. Thank you for your visit and encouraging review of my work. Sara

Vijay Pandit

Date: 9/24/2022 5:08:00 AM

This portrait of an old man is true to life, Sara. Aging does take its toll and offers life changing perspective.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 6:03:00 AM

Vijay, How well I know aging takes its toll and add COVID even a somewhat mild case and the aging accelerates. Thanks for dropping by and leaving a kind review of my work. Sara

J. Summers

Date: 9/23/2022 3:59:00 PM

Wonderful poem, I like the imagery and the way you played “daydreams” and “REM” off of each other. A great character study of old age. Another one for my favorites list. John

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/24/2022 3:21:00 AM

J, I am honored that you would fav this one. Thanks for stopping by, reading my work and taking time to comment. Sara

Michael Tor

Date: 9/23/2022 11:51:00 AM

Love this Poem from you Sara. Your description of the old man and his life and future were cleverly thought out and create special sentiments within the reader. Be blessed...

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/23/2022 12:33:00 PM

Why, thank you, Michael. I appreciate the blessings. Your kind review is encouraging. Sara

Tom Cunningham

Date: 9/23/2022 10:14:00 AM

Sadly it's the path we all eventually take Sara. Best of luck in the contest. Hope alls OK with you and the family. Tom

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/23/2022 12:32:00 PM

Tom, Our son is home from the hospital. As far as I know he is doing fine. He has someone staying with him and health care is coming some. Thanks for dropping by and your hopes for us. Sara

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 9/23/2022 8:51:00 AM

Alas we have to get old and die. Great picture of an old man.

Sara Kendrick
Date: 9/23/2022 12:31:00 PM

Victor, My mother-in-law used to say go measure those graves in the cemetery. Meaning that some die young, but mostly people live life through all the stages and die at a ripe old age. I appreciate you dropping by. Your support by reading my works is uplifting. Sara