Notes About The Poem


This is a repost of a poem we did in February, back then it appeared on Chris' poem list, this time on mine :)

One Night This Darkness - Collaboration With Chris Green

One night this darkness will end life
with clouds in damp fog without stars
and a moon dressed in tatters screaming
at feet scratched on pebbles in low-tide
rough water to sway one and stumble

Maelstroms twist, turn and swallow fish
in an icy-cold winterland with rickety wrecks
Stranded with thundering crashes ashore
leaving flotsam resentful on soggy sand
The roar of firebolts raging around

And the sky will fall in guarded shadows,
streaks painted in dripping revelations,
shades of nevermore patina
eroding encrusted thoughts into gaping holes,
swallowing what is left of the dream

The artisan's hand glares down from the sky
Gouache in thick streaks in tangerine rage
A knife sticking out scraping clouds
Unstable equilibrium shakes easel unnoticed
Genius vision or prediction of doomsday

When the unthinkable, unfathomable happens,
in silent sunbeam glory a single bloom forms
Tiny roots ruminate a desolate landscape,
gently removing soil from fractured stone,
caressing sorrows in springtime whispers

Dark clouds now cast warming farewells
as blue sky canopies float like streamers,
singing in harmony with endless beliefs that,
one night this darkness will end life,
until dawn’s resurgence is reborn

***

February 3, 2017
Copyright ©Chris Green and Darren White
Copyright © | Year Posted 2017

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Duncan Avatar
July 10, 2017 at 2:46 AM
WoW! nice collaboration :) thanks for yr comment on my ice cream Addiction poem :)
Y. Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 11:58 PM
WoW! Darren, You and Chris have penned an excellent collaboration. Good imagery and metaphors. This is top notch poetry. You two write well together. And this is a write that you should be of. Outstanding job:-) Alexis PS, If the rating feature was still up, this would be a without a doubt seven.
White Avatar
May 29, 2017 at 12:01 AM
We just keep "The Ghost Of The Seven" alive. Thanks Alexis :)
Vaso Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 3:18 PM
This is very beautifully written poetry, from start to finish, I am at a loss for words, amazing!
White Avatar
May 29, 2017 at 12:01 AM
Thanks my friend :)
Ricci Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 8:15 AM
Hello Darren. Good Afternoon. Congratulations on an entry that is solid poetry. The entry by both of you prove why Free Verse is tops for all obvious reasons. Thank you both for posting. May you both continue to have future collaborations for your readers to follow. Have a wonderful afternoon Darren. E x c e l l e n t
White Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 8:43 AM
Thanks my friend :) We will see what the future will bring. I agree with you on the power of Free Verse. I love it most of all, even though I love using rhymed and metered forms as well. Both Chris and I can't escape a certain cadence in our writing, it just happens.
Coreggia Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 7:14 AM
Guys, you've outdone yourselves with this incredible write where you've brought hope back from the brink! Amitiés
White Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 7:20 AM
It was an incredible poem to write together, and I still love it as much as the day(s) we wrote it. Thank you :)
Williams Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 5:15 AM
Two brilliant minds coming together as one to create a masterpiece. Well done you two, love the way you've ended it 'until dawn's resurgence is reborn". Love it and I'll have to give a 7+ for each of you.... Maria
Williams Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 5:40 AM
Really no more sevens? Didn't even notice
White Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 5:23 AM
Woot, we love sevens, even when we can't get them anymore :)
Smith Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 11:21 AM
You took me on a journey that twisted and turned leaving me along with the dawn reborn
White Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 11:52 AM
Yep, we did, wasn't it cool??? :)
Wolf Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 3:34 AM
You guys sure know how to write! Awesome job! Loved it!
White Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 3:43 AM
Like it? Thanks :D
Garcia Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 2:03 AM
Jeezums - this is one hell of a collab. Really, I can pick up subtle hints of both of you through out but just barely, enough to highlight the seamless blend. Incredibly intense use of language and metaphors too, easily publishable in my estimation. In looking at the line where "tiny roots navigate..." did you consider using "ruminate"? Personally, I think it captures the pensive tension a bit better, but navigate works very well as it is.
White Avatar
May 28, 2017 at 5:22 AM
Ruminate made it through the committee, congratulations ;)
White Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 3:42 AM
Doesn't work that way PG, nononono :) We both agree, or no ruminate at all!
Garcia Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 2:18 AM
Possession is 9/10 of the law, D-Dub. Someone's gotta be in charge while Chris is presumably sleeping
White Avatar
May 26, 2017 at 2:15 AM
I might like ruminate better too! I'll discuss it with Chris and if he doesn't mind, I'll change it :) Thanks PG.
Ella Avatar
May 25, 2017 at 11:51 PM
Maelstrom!!! I love that word :D This is epic. You and Chris have a journey here and the ending is perfect (the whole poem is too) <3 <3 <3
White Avatar
May 25, 2017 at 11:54 PM
Cool word isn't it? I love this poem, it's one of the two poems we started our collaborations with, the other one is completely different :)
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