One More Day

Then while I held you The world felt just right Our twin hearts beating Wrapped round you at night You’d filled all the holes That burst in my soul Slow spreading like glue Until I felt whole I loved what my life was With you by my side Content overwhelmed me My lonely had died Dear God won’t you gift me One more perfect day This heart wrenching sadness Can’t go on in this way Please take my own soul Is this what you must do Pain brittles my bones This can't be my truth Please just one more chance To hold him at night To feel his heart beat To make my world right Dear God … please grant me JUST one more day One last … I love you Take my tears away November 22, 2017

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Edward Orozco

Date: 2/28/2018 7:47:00 AM

Heartfelt poem.. touching....

Arthur Vaso

Date: 11/26/2017 12:44:00 AM

This brought a tear to my eye, just very beautiful heartfelt poetry!

Judith S
Date: 11/27/2017 4:36:00 PM

Thank you so much Arthur for your comments. I appreciate you reading. Best, Judy

John Gondolf

Date: 11/25/2017 7:18:00 AM

Judy, I think all of us at some time in our lives have been left longing for just one more day; you have penned this emotion perfectly. Nicely done. John

Judith S
Date: 11/25/2017 2:05:00 PM

Indeed. It's a subject we can all relate to in one way or another. Thank you for reading John ... and for your kind comments. Best, Judy

Maria Williams

Date: 11/24/2017 6:34:00 AM

There is such heart wrenching sadness in this soulful poem of yours Judith. Your last four lines, an emotional cry out for just one more day is just amazing. A fave for me. ..Maria xx

Judith S
Date: 11/25/2017 2:03:00 PM

Thank you so much Maria for your kind comments. Appreciate you reading :) ~Judy

Susan Ashley

Date: 11/22/2017 9:43:00 PM

Judy, the depth of your sad emotions are profound in your soul stirring write. Your deep and sincere heartbreak clutched at my heartstrings.. a great write my friend!

Judith S
Date: 11/25/2017 6:51:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments Susan. I appreciate, always, your continued support and friendship! :) ~Judy

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 11/22/2017 5:28:00 PM

A truly sad, but soulful poem, Judith. You expressed your loss w/adequate words hard to find. A rare ability indeed. Fine poem w/a sorrowful yearning of love loss. Love and joy always.

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 5:56:00 PM

Thank you Freddie. I so appreciate your comments and continued support. ~Judy

Lewis Raynes

Date: 11/22/2017 5:23:00 PM

my lonely had died, loved this poem Judy. great stuff

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 5:54:00 PM

Thanks for stopping by Lewis and for your kind comments:)

Constance La France

Date: 11/22/2017 1:14:00 PM

Judith, oh so emotional and sad, I felt my tears falling, I loved this write a lot !

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 1:18:00 PM

Thank you BW! This may seem strange ... but I'm happy you felt the sad emotion. That's what we try to portray in our writing :) And so, this is the best kind of compliment!! Thank you! ~Judy

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/22/2017 12:56:00 PM

So sad, that last part. JUST one more day. Such longing in that phrase and "take my tears away" Really enjoyed this.

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 1:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Andrea! Appreciate your visit. Best, Judy

Winged Warrior

Date: 11/22/2017 8:47:00 AM

Lovely poem my friend...heartfelt all the way Judith...if we could only go back in time...god bless...^WW^

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 10:15:00 AM

Thank you so much for your kind comments WW. I always appreciate your friendship and support. Best, Judy

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/22/2017 7:03:00 AM

- Dear Judith, a heartbreaking poem with deep feelings - Love is not easy - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 10:13:00 AM

Ahhh .. well CONGRATULATIONS are in order then Anne-Lise!! I hope you have a wonderful day!! Thank you for your kind comments on my write. Best, Judy

Vijay Pandit

Date: 11/22/2017 6:17:00 AM

I am touched by your meaningful words--love emanates from your verses and tugs the heart--well written, Judith--makes quite an impact listening to the song!

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 10:12:00 AM

Thank you so much Vijay. Your kind comments mean a lot to me. Always appreciate you reading. Best, Judy

Arturo Michael

Date: 11/22/2017 5:43:00 AM

Just one more day at the end is always that way... Lovely poem Judy...All the best

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 10:03:00 AM

Arturo .. thank you so much for reading and your always kind comment. Best, Judy

Silent One

Date: 11/22/2017 5:29:00 AM

Touching poem, How so many wish they could spend one more day with the one they love, once they are gone sadly that is not possible.. sometimes a soul searches for something similar, but rarely finds that perfect match to make that perfect day... Emotive poetry Judy..

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 5:43:00 AM

Dear Silent One ... thank you so very much for your kind and understanding comments. The song choice was not mine ... but a recommendation from a good friend and mentor. I originally had something not quite so fitting. This superbly creates the mood of my words. Best, Judy

Silent One
Date: 11/22/2017 5:34:00 AM

That song is perfect for this poem and has perfect lyrics... Nice choice.

Jan Allison

Date: 11/22/2017 5:24:00 AM

I have tears reading your touching poem and watching the video and your poets notes are so poignant ... I'd love to hear the poem set to music it would make a wonderful lyric which would touch the hearts of many... just one more day is going into my faves to be read again and again:-) hugs jan xx

Judith S
Date: 11/22/2017 5:38:00 AM

Ahhh ... thank you Jan for your lovely comments. Maybe I'll try to put a few chords together. I wish I had that talent. I can read music ... but sadly can't create it. Appreciate you reading. Best, Judy