Judith S Poet Quatrain

One More Day

Then while I held you
The world felt just right 
Our twin hearts beating
Wrapped round you at night

You’d filled all the holes
That burst in my soul
Slow spreading like glue
Until I felt whole

I loved what my life was
With you by my side
Content overwhelmed me
My lonely had died

Dear God won’t you gift me
One more perfect day
This heart wrenching sadness
Can’t go on in this way

Please take my own soul
Is this what you must do
Pain brittles my bones
This can't be my truth

Please just one more chance
To hold him at night
To feel his heart beat
To make my world right

Dear God … please grant me
JUST one more day
One last … I love you
Take my tears away



November 22, 2017

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Edward Orozco February 28, 2018 at 7:47 AM Heartfelt poem.. touching....

Arthur Vaso November 26, 2017 at 12:44 AM This brought a tear to my eye, just very beautiful heartfelt poetry! Judith S November 27, 2017 at 4:36 PM Thank you so much Arthur for your comments. I appreciate you reading. Best, Judy

John Gondolf November 25, 2017 at 7:18 AM Judy, I think all of us at some time in our lives have been left longing for just one more day; you have penned this emotion perfectly. Nicely done. John Judith S November 25, 2017 at 2:05 PM Indeed. It's a subject we can all relate to in one way or another. Thank you for reading John ... and for your kind comments. Best, Judy

Maria Williams November 24, 2017 at 6:34 AM There is such heart wrenching sadness in this soulful poem of yours Judith. Your last four lines, an emotional cry out for just one more day is just amazing. A fave for me. ..Maria xx Judith S November 25, 2017 at 2:03 PM Thank you so much Maria for your kind comments. Appreciate you reading :) ~Judy

Susan Ashley November 22, 2017 at 9:43 PM Judy, the depth of your sad emotions are profound in your soul stirring write. Your deep and sincere heartbreak clutched at my heartstrings.. a great write my friend! Judith S November 25, 2017 at 6:51 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments Susan. I appreciate, always, your continued support and friendship! :) ~Judy

Freddie Robinson Jr. November 22, 2017 at 5:28 PM A truly sad, but soulful poem, Judith. You expressed your loss w/adequate words hard to find. A rare ability indeed. Fine poem w/a sorrowful yearning of love loss. Love and joy always. Judith S November 22, 2017 at 5:56 PM Thank you Freddie. I so appreciate your comments and continued support. ~Judy

Lewis Raynes November 22, 2017 at 5:23 PM my lonely had died, loved this poem Judy. great stuff Judith S November 22, 2017 at 5:54 PM Thanks for stopping by Lewis and for your kind comments:)

Constance La France November 22, 2017 at 1:14 PM Judith, oh so emotional and sad, I felt my tears falling, I loved this write a lot ! Judith S November 22, 2017 at 1:18 PM Thank you BW! This may seem strange ... but I'm happy you felt the sad emotion. That's what we try to portray in our writing :) And so, this is the best kind of compliment!! Thank you! ~Judy

Andrea Dietrich November 22, 2017 at 12:56 PM So sad, that last part. JUST one more day. Such longing in that phrase and "take my tears away" Really enjoyed this. Judith S November 22, 2017 at 1:16 PM Thanks so much Andrea! Appreciate your visit. Best, Judy

Winged Warrior November 22, 2017 at 8:47 AM Lovely poem my friend...heartfelt all the way Judith...if we could only go back in time...god bless...^WW^ Judith S November 22, 2017 at 10:15 AM Thank you so much for your kind comments WW. I always appreciate your friendship and support. Best, Judy

Anne-Lise Andresen November 22, 2017 at 7:03 AM - Dear Judith, a heartbreaking poem with deep feelings - Love is not easy - hugs // Anne-Lise :) Judith S November 22, 2017 at 10:13 AM Ahhh .. well CONGRATULATIONS are in order then Anne-Lise!! I hope you have a wonderful day!! Thank you for your kind comments on my write. Best, Judy

Vijay Pandit November 22, 2017 at 6:17 AM I am touched by your meaningful words--love emanates from your verses and tugs the heart--well written, Judith--makes quite an impact listening to the song! Judith S November 22, 2017 at 10:12 AM Thank you so much Vijay. Your kind comments mean a lot to me. Always appreciate you reading. Best, Judy

Arturo Michael November 22, 2017 at 5:43 AM Just one more day at the end is always that way... Lovely poem Judy...All the best Judith S November 22, 2017 at 10:03 AM Arturo .. thank you so much for reading and your always kind comment. Best, Judy

Silent One November 22, 2017 at 5:29 AM Touching poem, How so many wish they could spend one more day with the one they love, once they are gone sadly that is not possible.. sometimes a soul searches for something similar, but rarely finds that perfect match to make that perfect day... Emotive poetry Judy.. Judith S November 22, 2017 at 5:43 AM Dear Silent One ... thank you so very much for your kind and understanding comments. The song choice was not mine ... but a recommendation from a good friend and mentor. I originally had something not quite so fitting. This superbly creates the mood of my words. Best, Judy Silent One November 22, 2017 at 5:34 AM That song is perfect for this poem and has perfect lyrics... Nice choice.

Jan Allison November 22, 2017 at 5:24 AM I have tears reading your touching poem and watching the video and your poets notes are so poignant ... I'd love to hear the poem set to music it would make a wonderful lyric which would touch the hearts of many... just one more day is going into my faves to be read again and again:-) hugs jan xx Judith S November 22, 2017 at 5:38 AM Ahhh ... thank you Jan for your lovely comments. Maybe I'll try to put a few chords together. I wish I had that talent. I can read music ... but sadly can't create it. Appreciate you reading. Best, Judy