One Major Lesson

one major lesson take only what is needed pass on all excess

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Lynette Chachere

Date: 4/29/2010 11:33:00 AM

true, even one person may need what you pass on to them, you might just be saving their life(: this poem is touching when you think of it that way.beautiful haiku. -Always&Forever Lynette

Gert W. Knop

Date: 4/24/2010 7:40:00 AM

Excellent this Haiku of yours, Audrey! And a good advice!..Thank you for your comments and have a great sunday...Love, Gert

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 4/23/2010 6:27:00 PM

Love it, seems like there is another lesson on here, do not mind her you wrote such an awesome lesson with a short haiku..p.d.

Doris Culverhouse

Date: 4/23/2010 6:07:00 PM

I wish I had obeyed today and passed up the buffet--oh my belly. lol

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 4/23/2010 5:15:00 PM

very interesting thought and so true...a haiku is about nature..this is more like a senryu which is about the weaknesses of man...either form is 5/7/5 and requires..no capitalization..no punctuation..no title..the first line can be used as the title..line 1 is the setting & lines 2,3 are the action...so you see this is a bit more like a short free verse aye? Light & Love

Skat A

Date: 4/23/2010 5:05:00 PM

Real good Audrey, enjoyed the lesson you have for us in this haiku,,Irma