Lin Lane Poet Elegy

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On Waves of Broken Promises

I dared to chase that elusive butterfly
of love until he landed in my heart.
Caught up in wondrous fascination,
I placed my trust on its fragile wings
but they crumbled all around me
in broken promises lying on the ground.

I was betrayed by my heartless butterfly,
used like a pawn in a cruel lover's game.
He promised to love me for all eternity,
a promise broken in each word he'd spoken.
His romantic letters were works of fiction,
camouflaged behind the guise of truth.

In sorrow's hands I laid my aching heart.
Wounded by deceit, it had tumbled 
into a deep abyss of sorrow and despair.
Like raindrops running down a window pane,
my tears flowed into a sea of solitude
where I shall linger in darkness until I drown.

Forsaken heart of mine, you will perish thus,
staring at a sunset, alone on a barren shore.
Have you lost all hope since love has flown?
I will carve your epitaph in grains of sand
with my trembling hand before darkness falls
and waves of broken promises carry you to sea.


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June 30, 2017

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Kevin Shaw July 15, 2017 at 6:17 PM Hello Lin, This is a story many can tell, albeit not as well as you. Sadness like this can last briefly or even a lifetime. I loved your poem. This may sound a strange thing to say but, although your poem isn't in rhyme, when I read it, I found a rhyming quality to it, Regards Kevin x Lin Lane July 31, 2017 at 6:03 AM Thank you so very much for your kind remarks, Kevin. I'm a rhymer at heart, so I guess it shows no matter how I sometimes try not to. Your visits are always welcome.

Robert Lindley July 5, 2017 at 5:23 AM Sadly, the epic sadness that your magnificent poem describes so well has entered my life many times OVER THESE MANY DECADE OF LIVING. This world thrives on broken promises.. Super poetry my friend. A fav.. Lin Lane July 5, 2017 at 5:30 AM Hi Robert. It's a bane I've also faced, but only once. I'm truly sorry broken promises have plagued you. Thank you for reading me and leaving such a great compliment.

Joanna Daniel July 1, 2017 at 7:09 AM Very saddeningly sad, Lin, but touching the heart:) hope this wins:) Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:17 AM You're so kind and encouraging, Jo. Thank you very much.

Frederic Parker June 30, 2017 at 1:41 PM sometimes I wonder if the pain comes more from being deceived or from the fact we gave trust to one who deceives Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:16 AM I'd have to share your thoughts, Frederic. For me it's an equal share of anger and humiliation. Thank you for your thoughtful comment.

Tim Smith June 30, 2017 at 1:41 PM Beautifully sad Lin...have a great weekend Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:16 AM Thank you, Tim, and I return your weekend wishes.

Chris Green June 30, 2017 at 10:35 AM This was so deeply sad and so exquisitely written Lin. I could feel that heart breaking as I read this. This is truly a masterpiece of words and phrases. Best wishes in the contest Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:15 AM I always appreciate your encouraging comments, Chris. Thanks so much.

Daniel Turner June 30, 2017 at 10:12 AM I know a thing or two about broken promises. A very sad write, Peaches. If you are like me, once that bond of trust has been broken, it's nearly impossible to fix. Once a chain link has been broken, even if you're able to put it back together, it is always the weakest link. Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:14 AM A loss of trust often leads to a loss of respect, and you're correct in thinking that both are hard to regain. Thanks for your expressions, Danny.

Charlie Smith June 30, 2017 at 9:39 AM Woe, such a sad tale of despair so well written Lin, best wishes... Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:13 AM With thanks for your many visits to my poetry, Charlie.

Jan Allison June 30, 2017 at 9:23 AM Oh such sadness in your lines Lin - yes write his name in the sand and let the waves carry away those emotions:-) good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Lin Lane July 1, 2017 at 7:12 AM Thanks, Jan. The sea always brings deep thought to my mind. No pun intended.