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On The Way To The Ballet Premiere Contest Winner

The old ladies march onto the elevator, steadied by their canes, each a shrunken frailty wrapping an unending soul-- they are going to watch young people dance their dances of grace and beauty, while they recall their own beauty long dissolved in the acid of time.... Yet, they are happy-- I even joke with them as I lean on my own cane: 'Come Ladies! Let's have a foot race!" They all laugh, as the young girls within their tattered frames flirt with the potent young man hiding behind a time-marked mask... for a moment we all feel a jolt of that spark we call life.

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Date: 3/18/2021 4:13:00 PM
An amazing write, L.J.! I love the imagery and descriptive phrases you used. Congrats on your win! Blessings, Kim M. PS: Going in my favs!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 3/20/2021 10:29:00 AM
Thanks Kim--you made my day!
Date: 3/17/2021 9:44:00 PM
Awesome feeling you sparked right there L.J.Carber :)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 3/18/2021 7:26:00 AM
Thanks Carol
Date: 1/9/2021 10:06:00 AM
totally delightful ~
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L. J. Carber
Date: 3/18/2021 7:26:00 AM
Thanks Line--I'm glad you liked it, my friend!
Date: 5/7/2020 9:53:00 PM
What a joy to re-read this amazing and impressive poem again, L. J. The irony of aging is captured in your endearing yet bittersweet expression. A fav! (I should have faved it first time around) :)) Congratulations on your wonderful win. Warmest wishes, my dear friend.. ~Susan
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/8/2020 2:35:00 PM
Gracias Susan, y vaya con Dios siempre, mi amiga!
Date: 5/5/2020 10:50:00 PM
You and I belong in Neverland ... I will NEVER grow up! Happy Cinco de Mayo and sincere congratulations for your win in Brian's contest, LJ - keep up the great work! I hope you are staying safe and sound, My Friend - blessings! :o)
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/6/2020 9:14:00 AM
Thank you Greg-- as for me, I'm a 24 year old trapped inside a 73 year old man! How weird is that? Vaya con Dios siempre, mi amigo...
Date: 5/5/2020 11:03:00 AM
Hi LJ. Can't believe I didn't leave a comment on this poem when I first read it! Enjoyed it then and got to enjoy it again! Beautiful imagery and metaphor. with such a delightful conclusion! Congratulations!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/5/2020 1:07:00 PM
Thanks Sam--this is a personal favorite and one of the lucky ones to get published--online by Freeman Magazine [I even got paid for it!!!]
Date: 5/8/2019 3:01:00 AM
Delightfully beautiful, Aloha William...
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/9/2019 12:06:00 PM
Thank you William, I'm happy you liked it-- Aloha!
Date: 5/3/2019 9:37:00 PM
Congratulations on your winning poem! Such an excellent read! XOXO - Briauna
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/4/2019 7:24:00 AM
Thank you, Briauna
Date: 5/3/2019 7:05:00 PM
Oh such glorious imagery LJ in this delightful poem - a worthy winner for sure, with kindest thoughts Ann xx
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/4/2019 7:24:00 AM
Thanks Ann, much appreciated!
Date: 5/3/2019 2:46:00 PM
Oh, your winning poem is outstanding in every way, L. J. You portray the ravages of aging upon the human body with poetic elegance and spotlight the ageless human spirit with sparkling zest. Every line is a beauty to behold. Congratulations on your excellent and well deserved trophy win. Warmest wishes always my friend.. ~Susan
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L. J. Carber
Date: 5/4/2019 7:25:00 AM
And thank you Susan-- that means a lot coming from a poet of your caliber.
Date: 12/4/2018 10:17:00 AM
I enjoyed reading this beautiful poem, L.J. , very well written. It stirs a reader's imagination with your imagery you have created . Congratulations on your win!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/4/2018 1:51:00 PM
Thank you Eve-- it was inspired by an actual experience when my wife and I were given tickets by her cello teacher to see the Pennsylvania ballet.
Date: 12/18/2017 9:43:00 PM
Love your poem, L.J., congratulations on your win!
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/19/2017 12:48:00 PM
Thank you Eve, I appreciate it.
Date: 12/18/2017 2:47:00 PM
Hi L.J. Excellent take on the contest theme. Congrats on your win:-) Alexis
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L. J. Carber
Date: 12/19/2017 12:48:00 PM
Many thanks, Alexis!