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On the Edge of Dawn

Soft rays of morning's first light broke
through jagged edges of sleeping dawn
and glowed til becoming a golden yolk

From within my cracked and fragile shell 
I moaned in lazy attempt to stifle a yawn
not able to convince the rising to quell

I could not bargain with the sun to tarry
Although I praised with words to fawn
With his strength I'll not quibble or parry


7/24/2017

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Justin Clason Date: 8/19/2017 2:19:00 PM Really like your descriptions. Great poem! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/19/2017 2:29:00 PM Thank you ever so much, Justin.

Ronald A. Williams Date: 8/9/2017 8:44:00 PM Like your analogies, form and chosen words. Very good write, condense poem. Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/9/2017 9:22:00 PM Thank you, Ronald. I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.

Dean Wood Date: 8/7/2017 3:57:00 PM Eggs-cellent! Lin you are truly a poet. Everything I read of yours is wonderful. Congratulations on this win! -- Dean Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/7/2017 4:01:00 PM I guess I left myself open for the 'eggs-cellent' comment. HA and thank you so very much for the compliments, Dean. I've taken them to heart.

Susan Ashley Date: 8/6/2017 8:06:00 PM Hi Lin, beautifully done, I truly enjoyed reading it. Congrats on your win :) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/7/2017 4:00:00 PM Thanks very much, Susan.

Jan Allison Date: 8/6/2017 6:16:00 PM dropping back with my congrats Lin an eggcellent poem:-) hugs Jan x Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 8/7/2017 4:00:00 PM HUGS for the congrats and humor. lol

Joseph May Date: 7/29/2017 9:07:00 PM Beautifully done Lin.. the image gives new meaning to the phrase "crack of dawn"...which came first, the poem or the picture? Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/29/2017 9:36:00 PM haha Loved your humorous wise "crack.' Thanks ever so much, Joseph.

Viv Wigley Date: 7/25/2017 9:57:00 AM This is lovely, Lin. regardless of time of year, I'm usually up around 04:00a.m, but spring and summer make it worth the effort, even early Autumn. I like to think that the Sun expects me to put the kettle on for it :) . Viv x Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/25/2017 11:22:00 AM Thank you, Viv, and nice to see you. The morning sun is the first to whisper 'hello.'

Winged Warrior Date: 7/25/2017 9:21:00 AM On the edge of dawn...you'll find Lin Lane there, writing her beautiful poetry...as she cracks open the sun lol...lovely write my lady friend...^WW^ Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/25/2017 11:22:00 AM I've come to admire sunrise more than sunset. Thanks WW.

Charlie Smith Date: 7/24/2017 1:05:00 PM Never thought of the sunrise that way before, maybe that's why eggs are so popular for breakfast...well done Lin Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 9:05:00 PM I'm an early morning person, but I'll skip the eggs. Thank you, Charlie.

Heidi Sands Date: 7/24/2017 12:04:00 PM Lin , this is so nice. I see beautiful sunrises and sunsets each way from where I live and I am always grateful. Thanks for sharing :) Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 9:03:00 PM Thanks, Heidi

Daniel Turner Date: 7/24/2017 10:29:00 AM This may be a little hard to believe but some mornings I get up to watch the sunrise then go back to bed. lol A peaceful awakening. Lin. Beautiful! Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 11:44:00 AM It's totally believable. I saw sunrises almost every morning for over 3 years and relish the memories. thank you

Lim'Rik Flats Date: 7/24/2017 9:40:00 AM A very poesy mosey which made me smile while the caffeines quarreled with cobwebs. Wow! Scwheet write. Old Sol just kicks the door down at my house, no class whatsoever! Toppa the morn'n with quibbles 'n bits! ~ john Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 9:44:00 AM Lol, John. Morning greetings to you as well. No quibbles with the sun and no kibbles for breakie. More caffeine will shake the cobwebs in the brain free. Thanks ever so much for sharing a morning cup with me.

Tim Smith Date: 7/24/2017 9:10:00 AM A beautiful awakening Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 9:11:00 AM Thank you, Tim, and g'morning to you.

Jan Allison Date: 7/24/2017 9:09:00 AM So beautiful and uplifting Lin I especially love very clever second stanza with the cracked and fragile shell - this is eggsactly how I feel some mornings :-( hugs jan xx Login to Reply Lin Lane Date: 7/24/2017 9:10:00 AM Thanks, Jan. Let's do breakfast one day at the crack of dawn...but no eggs.