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On the Edge of Dawn

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Soft rays of morning's first light broke through jagged edges of sleeping dawn and glowed til becoming a golden yolk From within my cracked and fragile shell I moaned in lazy attempt to stifle a yawn not able to convince the rising to quell I could not bargain with the sun to tarry Although I praised with words to fawn With his strength I'll not quibble or parry 7/24/2017

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Justin Clason

Date: 8/19/2017 2:19:00 PM

Really like your descriptions. Great poem!

Lin Lane
Date: 8/19/2017 2:29:00 PM

Thank you ever so much, Justin.

Ronald A. Williams

Date: 8/9/2017 8:44:00 PM

Like your analogies, form and chosen words. Very good write, condense poem.

Lin Lane
Date: 8/9/2017 9:22:00 PM

Thank you, Ronald. I sincerely appreciate your kind comments.

Dean Wood

Date: 8/7/2017 3:57:00 PM

Eggs-cellent! Lin you are truly a poet. Everything I read of yours is wonderful. Congratulations on this win! -- Dean

Lin Lane
Date: 8/7/2017 4:01:00 PM

I guess I left myself open for the 'eggs-cellent' comment. HA and thank you so very much for the compliments, Dean. I've taken them to heart.

Susan Ashley

Date: 8/6/2017 8:06:00 PM

Hi Lin, beautifully done, I truly enjoyed reading it. Congrats on your win :)

Lin Lane
Date: 8/7/2017 4:00:00 PM

Thanks very much, Susan.

Jan Allison

Date: 8/6/2017 6:16:00 PM

dropping back with my congrats Lin an eggcellent poem:-) hugs Jan x

Lin Lane
Date: 8/7/2017 4:00:00 PM

HUGS for the congrats and humor. lol

Joseph May

Date: 7/29/2017 9:07:00 PM

Beautifully done Lin.. the image gives new meaning to the phrase "crack of dawn"...which came first, the poem or the picture?

Lin Lane
Date: 7/29/2017 9:36:00 PM

haha Loved your humorous wise "crack.' Thanks ever so much, Joseph.

Viv Wigley

Date: 7/25/2017 9:57:00 AM

This is lovely, Lin. regardless of time of year, I'm usually up around 04:00a.m, but spring and summer make it worth the effort, even early Autumn. I like to think that the Sun expects me to put the kettle on for it :) . Viv x

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2017 11:22:00 AM

Thank you, Viv, and nice to see you. The morning sun is the first to whisper 'hello.'

Winged Warrior

Date: 7/25/2017 9:21:00 AM

On the edge of dawn...you'll find Lin Lane there, writing her beautiful poetry...as she cracks open the sun lol...lovely write my lady friend...^WW^

Lin Lane
Date: 7/25/2017 11:22:00 AM

I've come to admire sunrise more than sunset. Thanks WW.

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/24/2017 1:05:00 PM

Never thought of the sunrise that way before, maybe that's why eggs are so popular for breakfast...well done Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 9:05:00 PM

I'm an early morning person, but I'll skip the eggs. Thank you, Charlie.

Heidi Sands

Date: 7/24/2017 12:04:00 PM

Lin , this is so nice. I see beautiful sunrises and sunsets each way from where I live and I am always grateful. Thanks for sharing :)

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 9:03:00 PM

Thanks, Heidi

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/24/2017 10:29:00 AM

This may be a little hard to believe but some mornings I get up to watch the sunrise then go back to bed. lol A peaceful awakening. Lin. Beautiful!

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 11:44:00 AM

It's totally believable. I saw sunrises almost every morning for over 3 years and relish the memories. thank you

Lim'Rik Flats

Date: 7/24/2017 9:40:00 AM

A very poesy mosey which made me smile while the caffeines quarreled with cobwebs. Wow! Scwheet write. Old Sol just kicks the door down at my house, no class whatsoever! Toppa the morn'n with quibbles 'n bits! ~ john

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 9:44:00 AM

Lol, John. Morning greetings to you as well. No quibbles with the sun and no kibbles for breakie. More caffeine will shake the cobwebs in the brain free. Thanks ever so much for sharing a morning cup with me.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/24/2017 9:10:00 AM

A beautiful awakening

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 9:11:00 AM

Thank you, Tim, and g'morning to you.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/24/2017 9:09:00 AM

So beautiful and uplifting Lin I especially love very clever second stanza with the cracked and fragile shell - this is eggsactly how I feel some mornings :-( hugs jan xx

Lin Lane
Date: 7/24/2017 9:10:00 AM

Thanks, Jan. Let's do breakfast one day at the crack of dawn...but no eggs.