On the Edge

The street light shined dimly
Its shallow shadows slithered
The icy covering now bearded
In a five o’clock shadow

His hand faltered
The easel rattled
His brush refocused
On the edge of the wind
Copyright © | Year Posted 2023

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Goldsmith Avatar
October 11, 2023 at 10:24 AM
Congratulations on your win. A creative write/story. Have a blessed day....................
Jones Avatar
October 10, 2023 at 6:49 AM
Congratulations on your win.
One Avatar
October 9, 2023 at 12:53 PM
You are a clever poet John.. Thank you for writing and congratulations on your placement..
Brotherton Avatar
October 1, 2023 at 10:01 AM
We all have a finite amount of time to bring life to our art before our night falls.
Empress Avatar
October 1, 2023 at 7:26 AM
This has a very lyrical touch. I love the way you’ve played around with words and also how you’ve painted imagery. So picturesque! Some shadows can be shallow and they slither in when darkness befalls, love it!! Nailed it
Lane Avatar
October 1, 2023 at 2:41 AM
If I comprehend... your description of the building of ice on the streetlight shadows its light as a beard darkens a man's face by afternoon. I'm a titch in the dark about your last verse, unless the artist just had an epiphany of some sort.
Lawless Avatar
October 1, 2023 at 5:40 AM
I just write 'em I don't explain 'em. OK,,,Ok... in the city the street lights cast a dim yellow light, the "five o'clock shadow" is the dirty, ice crusted city snow. The artist, as all artists, is attempting to capture "a moment" in a bitter cold, windy night.....I think....but then again.....hmmmmm
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