On the Bench

he sits on the bench eager pigeons surround him a bag of breadcrumbs is the offering he brings loneliness is forgotten

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Gerald Kithinji

Date: 8/16/2013 2:25:00 PM

Among the pigeons... they need us as much as we need them, no?

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/29/2013 5:00:00 PM

I sure did like your tanka approach here, Francine. Congrats on your win.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/28/2013 10:19:00 PM

Francine, I'm stopping by to say hi, and wish you an early Happy Easter, just in case I don't have time to stop by in the next few days. take care and have yourself a good one~ Always & Forever *LINDA"

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 3/28/2013 3:50:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Francine xx

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 3/27/2013 8:22:00 PM

So well done..This should have been much higher. BG

Donna Jones

Date: 3/27/2013 5:29:00 PM

Congrats Francine. Donna

Joyce Johnson

Date: 3/27/2013 4:01:00 PM

Congratulations Francine. Much said in your short poem. Congratulations. Love, Joyce

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/17/2013 1:01:00 AM

wonderful. just wonderful. Susan loves Tanka and I am sure this will please her.

Joe Flach

Date: 3/16/2013 6:20:00 PM

This paints a very, emotive and realistic picture. I love the simplicity of a well-written Tanka. This one qualifies, in my mind, as one worth loving. Good luck in the contest.

Tim Ryerson

Date: 3/16/2013 6:04:00 PM

Ah, Francine...This tugs at my heart-strings!...I am fast approaching 'old man' age and look forward to doing that but I hope it's simply for the pleasure of doing so and not to forget loneliness...Wonderfully done - Tim